Matrix story

Mothbite

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Hey, I've written bits and pieces of this story idea out (constituting about a 3rd of the story), and I'm wondering if anyone would be interested in co-writing the rest as a joint project. I've kind of lost the drive to finish the story (haven;t added anything to it since six months ago).

This fic would take place before the movie, back before Neo when Trinity would still be seeking out Bluepills and the One.

The scenario would be something like this: Trinity is on a mission that is compromised when she falls into a trap where she is affected by a program that temporarily robs her of her ability to bend the rules of the Matrix/any martial arts programming she learned. She learns from Tank that he can overwrite it, but it would take three hours. So in the mean time, she tries to hide/find a phone.

The nearest one is at an old warehouse, so she goes there. She steps in there and looks for the phone. Just as she sees it in a corner, she gets sprayed with knockout gas. When she comes to, she’s leg-cuffed to a table in a basement interrogation room, captured by a random bluepill security guard who works alone. This security guard is thoroughly unattractive, hairy, and overweight, the antithesis of Trinity’s beauty and toned physique.
The guard explains that while he doesn’t know why she’s wanted, he knows there are cops/agents out there looking for her, and offers her a choice: to spread her legs for him and he will let her go, or otherwise he will alert them and turn them over.

Trinity is helpless because of the program infecting her, and knows being turned out means death. Her cell phone has been taken from her, but she remembers she has around an hour or so left, so she has no choice but to endure the guard’s lusts until then.

The main erotic point in the story is the situational humiliation at Trinity’s expense. In the Matrix, she’d normally be able to take out any non-agent, and we all know what a huge player she is in a bigger game being played. But here she is, being taken not by any all-powerful agent or programming, but a random bluepill mook of a security guard. He is completely ignorant of how powerful and important a woman he has in his hands: to him, she is just powerless woman that fell under his control by extreme luck, who will be a means of finally satisfying his blueballs. The fact that he’s so unattractive and unfit makes for an erotic contrast with the beauty and toned body of Trinity.

She would be forced to strip, then bent over the table and fucked, watching herself being taken in the two-way mirror by this ugly, ignorant slob. Trinity tries to block it out by just remembering that this is just a simulated reality. However, as the guard (who happens to be very well endowed), ruts on her, she's slowly overtaken by the sensations she experiences are something she has not experienced for a long time, given she probably has no time for it in the real world. She gradually begins to enjoy it, albeit silently. The guard could force her to moan for him as well. The pleasure for her is such that she begins to respond genuinely, thrusting her hips back to meet him, vocalizing sounds, etc. Eventually, he squirts his seed deep inside her, while unintentionally bringing her to orgasm as well.

The guard is not finished after this, however, and since Trinity still needs more time, she complies with him as she sucks and licks him back to hardness before being forced to ride him.

After they are done, she feels the effects of the programming wear off. She breaks free of her bonds, and considers killing the guard, but after experiencing mixed emotions, decides against it and just runs for the phone still naked, making it just in time.

She keeps quiet about her experience to the rest of the crew, while the bluepill has the memory of the mysterious woman he came across…

The viewpoint could begin with Trinity, and we could get glimpses of the guard's POV, mostly his marveling at his fortune and how good his first time is...and taking arrogant pleasure in satisfying her with his crude but effective attentions.

If this sounds good, hit me up so we further flesh it out.
 
I don't see much different from any story of an ugly security guard taking advantage of a helpless girl. Okay, it's Trinity and the Matrix, but it doesn't really impact on the story - except that she could kill him later if she wanted to. But it's the Matrix, so does the security guard even exist?

It might be different if what is happening to Trinity in the Matrix is affecting her body in the real world, so the crew see her getting turned on, wet, etc. Maybe while she's being fucked by the security guard, she's playing with herself back in the real world, and maybe some unscrupulous crew members take advantage of her and use her body for their own amusement.

Whether it would make a good story or not, I'm not sure...
 
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I don't see much different from any story of an ugly security guard taking advantage of a helpless girl. Okay, it's Trinity and the Matrix, but it doesn't really impact on the story - except that she could kill him later if she wanted to. But it's the Matrix, so does the security guard even exist?

It might be different if what is happening to Trinity in the Matrix is affecting her body in the real world, so the crew see her getting turned on, wet, etc. Maybe while she's being fucked by the security guard, she's playing with herself back in the real world, and maybe some unscrupulous crew members take advantage of her and use her body for their own amusement.

Whether it would make a good story or not, I'm not sure...

The point I'm trying to make is that in ANY other circumstance, Trinity would never be captured by this guy/kick this guy's ass/barely give him a second glance/find him irrelevant at best. The hook for this story is she's finding herself in the worst possible situation due to circumstances, and some obnoxious, pathetic, nobody of a loser is the one who gets to take advantage of it. It's made all the worse that the guard himself is largely ignorant of her importance as a character (though we the readers know)--all he knows is some attractive lady on the run from the law fell on his lap, and he's going use her to change his morbidly depressing run of luck.
 
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I can see what you’re aiming for, but Trinity seems an odd choice. It would be similar to Supergirl or Wonder Woman temporarily losing their powers and being at the mercy of a fat, ugly man. The thing with the movie is that the ‘real’ Trinity isn’t like that, of course. She’s only cool and sexy and self-assured when she’s inside the Matrix itself, and has all the benefits that go with it - kung fu, weapons, cool clothes, etc.

Anyway, good luck with it.
 
I can see what you’re aiming for, but Trinity seems an odd choice. It would be similar to Supergirl or Wonder Woman temporarily losing their powers and being at the mercy of a fat, ugly man. The thing with the movie is that the ‘real’ Trinity isn’t like that, of course. She’s only cool and sexy and self-assured when she’s inside the Matrix itself, and has all the benefits that go with it - kung fu, weapons, cool clothes, etc.

Anyway, good luck with it.

Yeah, real Trinity isn't like that, so if this fic were to take place in the 'real' world, it'd be pointless, but it's not...it takes place in the Matrix, where she's used to having these abilities.

I can understand that this fic's premise would work better with someone like Supergirl or Wonder Woman, but 1) Those characters don't interest me, 2) No one's done a fic with Trinity, 3) I'd prefer the characters in this situation be closer to earth rather than an otherworldly, all-powerful being.
 
That's because most of us don't find Trinity to be attractive. Sure obviously you exist but if we were gonna write Matrix stories they'd focus around either the Lady in Red or the (I'm not lookig up how to spell this) the Merovigian's club or Persephone.
 
That's because most of us don't find Trinity to be attractive. Sure obviously you exist but if we were gonna write Matrix stories they'd focus around either the Lady in Red or the (I'm not lookig up how to spell this) the Merovigian's club or Persephone.

To be fair, I've put out requests for similar scenarios before, only with different characters, like Lara Croft and Elastigirl. They never got a response....and I was not able to write anything myself for them. At least for this story, I got something off the ground to meet any prospective writers with.
 
If you recall I wrote a Lara Croft one it just wasn't exactly what you wanted and I have a Black Cat one that's closer but still not exactly that.
 
Right, I remember now, that LC fic you wrote...pretty good and detailed, and goes into the characters' heads (#1 priority for me), but as you said, not the same vibe I'm looking for in this request. Read your BC one....same feedback.
 
As depraved as I'm capable of getting I have a really hard time with the fat ugly guard. I get why the LC story might not have been up your alley. One of my problems with writing is a lot of times the charachters just kinda tell me to fuck right off they do what they want. I started that story with Lara being a victim to a thug and then knowing what I know about a good majority of professional musicians the two just took over and I ended up with "You're not a thug! You went to college and you've only been to monopoly jail" vs "Your an actress, you'd have died of exposure a thousand times over if you actually went into the jungle like that." Believe me that was NOT the plan.

Black Cat at least did most of what I wanted. If I find a girl I like I'll see if I can spit something out more to your liking but the fat guy kinda turns ME off and makes it harder. And I don't have a default fat guy in my head.
 
As depraved as I'm capable of getting I have a really hard time with the fat ugly guard. I get why the LC story might not have been up your alley. One of my problems with writing is a lot of times the charachters just kinda tell me to fuck right off they do what they want. I started that story with Lara being a victim to a thug and then knowing what I know about a good majority of professional musicians the two just took over and I ended up with "You're not a thug! You went to college and you've only been to monopoly jail" vs "Your an actress, you'd have died of exposure a thousand times over if you actually went into the jungle like that." Believe me that was NOT the plan.

Black Cat at least did most of what I wanted. If I find a girl I like I'll see if I can spit something out more to your liking but the fat guy kinda turns ME off and makes it harder. And I don't have a default fat guy in my head.

Well, I understand your view. And I do appreciate the effort. I mean, nothing can really be done if a vision doesn't really end up being compatible with the writer's head.

I mean, heck, I went with fat security guard because the ultimate motif for my requests are "strong, kickass heroine brought down (by an extremely unlucky set of circumstances) by a pathetic, low-grade mook, pitied/scorned by everyone". A fat, unattractive overweight man just happened to symbolize that motif for me the most.
 
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