dr_mabeuse
seduce the mind
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I'd be very careful in using mannerisms to try and describe someone.
First of all, it's not so much what they're doing as it is the way they do it. Twirling the hair can be flirtatious and cute or obsessive and neurotic, depending on how it's done, but if it takes too much explanation, it shifts the focus and becomes distracting. It can make your character seem annoying or grotesque.
"Hmmm. I wonder..." Jane said, poking her tongue into her cheek and rolling her eyes up to the side.
I mean, what's wrong with Jane? Bell's Palsy?
A lot of authors try very hard to give their characters endearing or interesting mannerisms, and in my opinion it rarely works. Doc Savage, the old pulp action hero, used to make an unconscious "liquid, trilling sound" whenever he was lost in thought, and all I could imagine was him kind of yodeling under his breath. It always took me aback.
I think you might have more luck paying attention to body language: the things people do with their hands and arms and trunks and eyes when they're interacting. Folding your arms across your chest or straightening your back, self-grooming or leaning towards someone are gestures that need little description and paint a very clear picture in just a few words.
One of the things I've found myself using is describing what my character chooses to look at during a conversation. A woman's telling a man she's leaving him. If he's looking at the television while she's talking, that means one thing. If he looks out the window where he sees one bird sitting on a telephone wire, that means another. My characters always seem to be doing things with their eyes.
--Zoot
First of all, it's not so much what they're doing as it is the way they do it. Twirling the hair can be flirtatious and cute or obsessive and neurotic, depending on how it's done, but if it takes too much explanation, it shifts the focus and becomes distracting. It can make your character seem annoying or grotesque.
"Hmmm. I wonder..." Jane said, poking her tongue into her cheek and rolling her eyes up to the side.
I mean, what's wrong with Jane? Bell's Palsy?
A lot of authors try very hard to give their characters endearing or interesting mannerisms, and in my opinion it rarely works. Doc Savage, the old pulp action hero, used to make an unconscious "liquid, trilling sound" whenever he was lost in thought, and all I could imagine was him kind of yodeling under his breath. It always took me aback.
I think you might have more luck paying attention to body language: the things people do with their hands and arms and trunks and eyes when they're interacting. Folding your arms across your chest or straightening your back, self-grooming or leaning towards someone are gestures that need little description and paint a very clear picture in just a few words.
One of the things I've found myself using is describing what my character chooses to look at during a conversation. A woman's telling a man she's leaving him. If he's looking at the television while she's talking, that means one thing. If he looks out the window where he sees one bird sitting on a telephone wire, that means another. My characters always seem to be doing things with their eyes.
--Zoot



