Male Orgasm

[JinkiesFarie]

First off, I'm sorry if this is already a topic every time I look in the search engine for something similar, my pc glitches.

Ok, so I am struggling on writing a decent male orgasm. I know it doesn't have to be perfect, but there will be quite a few as this is for a forced fem story. I feel so stuck and this is where I started writing the first sex scene because I was building up the rest of the story.

Here's what I have so far:

'She however, was the stronger of the two and showed it by keeping him pinned down under her hand. She ignored all whimpers pf anxiety as she continued to suck him off as well as rapidly move her fingers in and out of his forbidden zone.

A small mewling sound like that of a kitten parted his lips as his body prepared for his ejaculation. His body shuddered, eyes bulging.'

Any suggestions?

 

[CWatson]

Okay, so... What's the problem so far?

It's a 3rd-person story, but is it omniscient or close-in viewpoint? Can you describe what the male partner is feeling, or is the camera in the female's head and limited only to the physical characteristics? Also, in and out of what "forbidden zone"? Guys only have one of those, and not all of us are keen about having them invaded.

If you want to do more research beyond "sit here and wait for someone to answer," my advice would be to go to porn websites and watch movies. If you Google "empflix", "tnaflix" and (particularly) "zoig", you can find no-pay sites with all manner of amateur and homemade stuff. (That's assuming you can't do any hands-on research of your own, but since you're asking this question, that seems a safe assumption. )

 

[badman1985]

well not sure if this will help but i'll talk about my own orgasm. most of my partners barely even notice when i cum. i don't react to it that much other then wanting to slow down so i can recover. sometimes when my partner knows i have came and they speed up it feels good then almost hurts. like i don't even want them to touch my dick for a bit so i can get over my orgasm(if they speed up). if my partner is smart they know that i just want to keep it in them with little movement so i can stay hard but not feel that pain. when done right i can recover and keep going. so if i were you I'd try to let the readers know that the man is almost in pain after he came. well hope that was helpful

 

[VWSinger]

Something to keep in mind is that the male orgasm is strongly centred around the penis, physically and mentally. The closer a man gets to orgasm the more focused he will be on that part of his body.

 

[mynameisben]

A small mewling sound like that of a kitten parted his lips as his body prepared for his ejaculation. His body shuddered, eyes bulging.'

Any suggestions?

I would drop the "small mewling sound like that of a kitten." It makes me think you're jacking off your cat.

 

[JinkiesFarie]

First, I understand that most orgasms are stimulated by the penis. However, if there's anyone who has seen Road Trip, go back to the scene where Sean William Scott has "troubles" producing a sperm donation.

Second, yeah I don't want people to think I'm have a cat jerked off. So I'll work out something on that.

 

[yuna1981]

It's a good question, and a challenge to write well. I myself haven't ventured into writing this very often because I find it difficult. I've only ever written one story that delves into the male point of view in more detail, and even then I switch back and forth from the male and female characters' perspectives.

It seems like you are doing the same thing here, but maybe you could show more action/reaction between the two characters, and narrating how he feels more focus going solely to his cock as he orgasms.

Also a shudder seems more feminine, IMHO, which maybe works for this character, but IRL I have noticed that, like badman1985 discusses, there's a kind of stillness at the moment of ejaculation, where the only movement is the intense shooting of his cock, and maybe a tightening and flexing of the leg muscles and feet.

This could also be hugely stereotyped/gendered, but I've only ever heard men moaning, grunting, silent, or breathing hard when cumming. Never a mewl, which is an extended sound, that contradicts the kind of bursts that make up the male orgasm.

 

[gregor2001us]

So far, the descriptions given to you are pretty good for a circumcised guy. Basically a tensing up and then everything contracts and is centered in the groin. Severl strong contractions followed by a big release,then the feelings slowly fade away. And the glans become very senbsitive to touch for a while, uncomfortably so.

However, if you character has a foreskin, then you can describe it more like a woman typically has. Wave after wave of whole body contractions that make everything tingle and convulse with pleasure. These can last quite a while, then gradually dissipate.

At least that is has worked for me. Big difference between the two. I was circ'd as an infant, restored enough to have a functioning foreskin now.

Cheers!

 

[bailadora]

I was circ'd as an infant, restored enough to have a functioning foreskin now.

Cheers!

I don't want to hijack the thread, but really? Wow. Had no idea they could do that sort of thing. Although...I guess it makes sense. If they can partially restore a hymen, why not a foreskin?


OP - have you ever read anything by JR Ward? IMO, she has some of the hottest descriptions of male orgasm around. I don't know how accurate they are from the male POV, but as a female reading those descriptions? Um, yeah. I always have to have the ceiling fan going full blast.