Madeline

[Jane43uk]

Young,slightly nerdy young woman walks home every day through the park when she sees a fat old man flashing his cock at her.She runs away but can't get the image out of her mind....end result is that she approaches him and sucks him off....how do I get her to get the confidence to do that?

 

[PattieD]

Young,slightly nerdy girl walks home every day through the park when she sees a fat old man flashing his cock at her.She runs away but can't get the image out of her mind....end result is that she approaches him and sucks him off....how do I get her to get the confidence to do that?

Her knowledge of a park that contains her, the path home and the man with a wanting erection is her confidence.

Her mind's eye takes inventory of the surroundings containing all three while engaging in a brain search with the keywords "private" and "secret" in the subject line.

"OUT OF ORDER" immediately surfaces as the most popular match. A few steps back towards her aroused stranger reveals that those three words were still valid. An "out of order" sign appearing on the entrance door to the public restroom was just about 100 feet away.

The fat and exposed old man is in between her and her "private" and "secret" destination. Walking towards this public pervert catches him off guard as she silently takes his hand and leads him to a battered door with an "out of order" sign hanging off a handle that is just as battered and rusted.

A quick and confident booted kick to the locked latch made the sign irrelevant as the door eased open for a blow job that was in order. A girl's hand locked the slide bolt on the inside as the fat man's hard cock softened to a soft penis. That is until this young slightly nerdy girl drops to her knees looking up at horrified fat man.

 

[AlinaX]

She's read that pervs like this do it for shock value and don't like to be confronted. So she corners him, intending to humiliate him, but her confidence fails her at the last moment and her mockery ends up sounding more like an offer...

 

[sirhugs]

It happens from compulsion rather than confidence.

 

[Jane43uk]

Her knowledge of a park that contains her, the path home and the man with a wanting erection is her confidence.

Her mind's eye takes inventory of the surroundings containing all three while engaging in a brain search with the keywords "private" and "secret" in the subject line.

"OUT OF ORDER" immediately surfaces as the most popular match. A few steps back towards her aroused stranger reveals that those three words were still valid. An "out of order" sign appearing on the entrance door to the public restroom was just about 100 feet away.

The fat and exposed old man is in between her and her "private" and "secret" destination. Walking towards this public pervert catches him off guard as she silently takes his hand and leads him to a battered door with an "out of order" sign hanging off a handle that is just as battered and rusted.

A quick and confident booted kick to the locked latch made the sign irrelevant as the door eased open for a blow job that was in order. A girl's hand locked the slide bolt on the inside as the fat man's hard cock softened to a soft penis. That is until this young slightly nerdy girl drops to her knees looking up at horrified fat man.

Yes really like this idea
...trying to steer away from the old hat 'awakening ' story but I can see Madeline wanting more...and crucially in public toilets

 

[Zeb_Carter]

You might want to change the word girl to young woman or young lady as girl implies she isn't/might not be old enough to engage in sexual situations.

There is an age limit here at Lit of 18+, so any reference to boy or girl will be looked at as under age by the powers that be. Once you have established the age of the young lady, you might be able to use girl but the processes that scan the stories will still pick up on that usage and might reject is out of hand.

 

[PattieD]

You might want to change the word girl to young woman or young lady as girl implies she isn't/might not be old enough to engage in sexual situations.

There is an age limit here at Lit of 18+, so any reference to boy or girl will be looked at as under age by the powers that be. Once you have established the age of the young lady, you might be able to use girl but the processes that scan the stories will still pick up on that usage and might reject is out of hand.

So
Initially
“young” is acceptable
While
“girl” implies underage?

 

[LupusDei]

So
Initially
“young” is acceptable
While
“girl” implies underage?

I think that's overzealous.

Office girl can be over fifty.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

edited.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

sirhugs nailed it [no pun]. compulsion works. maybe obsession after some over-analysing?

she thinks about it and thinks about it, perhaps masturbates to the idea as well. there's guilt, shame, humiliation mixed in with the excitement.

then she sees him in the park again...

bish, bash, bosh: her knickers are sodden and she goes for it.

 

[UtilityCurve]

How about she tells her bestie what she saw, knowing that her "fun-loving” friend will not be revolted, but intrigued. Madeline is also somewhat proud to bring something to the conversations they have had, which up until now have consisted of her listening to her BFF's adventures.

Bestie, sensing some excitement in Madeline (and feeling some herself!), tells her she should have gone over to the flasher, if for no other reason than to get a look "at a real one."

When Madeline recoils in stage horror, her friend goes for broke and tells her if something like that ever happens again, she should go crazy and not merely do reconnaissance, but take the opportunity to suck him off!

Madeline is HORRIFIED at the suggestion, but her friend says, with great seriousness that they will both be sucking cocks for the rest of their lives, so starting sooner rather than later is simply realistic and practical. Besides, the park perv is likely to come quickly from the thrill, so it won't be a chore.

Madeline is (or makes out to be) appalled, but that night in bed, her friend's scenario plays out in her mind while her fingers play in her pussy.

 

[Jane43uk]

How about she tells her bestie what she saw, knowing that her "fun-loving” friend will not be revolted, but intrigued. Madeline is also somewhat proud to bring something to the conversations they have had, which up until now have consisted of her listening to her BFF's adventures.

Bestie, sensing some excitement in Madeline (and feeling some herself!), tells her she should have gone over to the flasher, if for no other reason than to get a look "at a real one."

When Madeline recoils in stage horror, her friend goes for broke and tells her if something like that ever happens again, she should go crazy and not merely do reconnaissance, but take the opportunity to suck him off!

Madeline is HORRIFIED at the suggestion, but her friend says, with great seriousness that they will both be sucking cocks for the rest of their lives, so starting sooner rather than later is simply realistic and practical. Besides, the park perv is likely to come quickly from the thrill, so it won't be a chore.

Madeline is (or makes out to be) appalled, but that night in bed, her friend's scenario plays out in her mind while her fingers play in her pussy.

Really like this idea...thanks!!

 

[Zeb_Carter]

So
Initially
“young” is acceptable
While
“girl” implies underage?

I may be over reaching, but we have had writers(new ones) appear on the Authors' Hangout with a complaint about stories being rejected for under age. It turned out they were using language that implied that. ie. girl, boy, etc. even though those are valid descriptions of a persons sex, in erotica it does tend to identify a person who is not yet an adult.

And Laurel's process keys off word like that and other things that would be pedos would use. Not saying any writer here is a pedo, yet there have been some writers that try to skirt the hard, fast rule of 18+.

Also, all the women I know are women, not girls, to me. Lady is also a good identifier, yet I find it a little awkward as it reminds me of how people talked in my childhood. 'The lady said I had to go home, so here I am mom.' Of course her next question was 'What Lady?'