Low scores for a newbie

[NOIRTRASH]

This. I got lost with all the dude, and man. This line nearly lost me because even all the guys I know, and I just stayed with three a couple weekends ago for a long weekend, none of them talk like this.
"Dude you've got to go out and check out some chicks man,"

Also I admit I get lost with the location, and using kg(I am a hopeless American I guess, LOL).
And sports thrown in too!!! I am so not into sports.

BUT I do think you're writing is good. It flows fairly well. A few minor typos or grammar problems, but believe me I have seen way worse. I've only read a few paragraphs so far, but will finish hopefully tonight.

Some guys speak like that tho its a faux cool. When I was a teen we played gay holding hands and blowing kisses and flapping our hands like little wings. A lost art. Eddie Murphy was a master of it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-70XZP8y7e8
GAYEDDIE

 

[NicoleZ]

Please do not let it get to you Dansouthwest or anyone else who feels depressed about low scores and a few harsh comments initially. Those say more about the person who makes the comment than they do about you as a writer. Remember, they probably reached their incompetence level as writers at the "Run, Spot, run. See Spot run"- level... I posted my own first story here not long ago (although I am not exactly new to writing) and the first comments and scores were far worse than those you received.

Then, as others have already pointed out, my story was read by people intellectually equipped and emotionally mature enough to understand and appreciate a story written for adults and in addition to a steadily rising average score, I got some very kind and appreciative comments. Do you recall that old adage about "but for a man and his dog"? Even if only a single person writes to say that he or she loved your story, that story was well worth writing as it gave another human being a bright moment.

 

[lovecraft68]

I normally don't pay attention to how scores change over the first day, so this is merely two anecdotes. I wanted to submit my entry for the 2016 Summer Lovin' contest entry after lovecraft68's so his story wouldn't step on mine. First thing Monday morning, I checked to see if his story had dropped and I was really surprised to see his "I Want Mom Too!" had a sub-4 score. It's now at 4.62.

I submitted "My European Summer Vacation" that day. I woke up early, early the next morning and couldn't resist seeing if my story was published. It had been and had a score of 4.3 something. It's now at 4.84.

I wasn't surprised at all with the sub 4 score mine had for awhile. I just placed in a contest. The trolls were coming out extra hard for me. Then after day one the new story trolls drifted and the regular readers began to bring it up, typical pattern.

The 4.62 it is now is still low for me, but I also put a different dynamic into the story and it has the readers split into factions. Some wanting the older brother with mom some the younger one, some both, lot of hate for the alpha brother vs the younger sweeter one.

Bottom line I didn't pander to the tropes as I've done at times and the score shows it.

In every category people love their comfortable same ole same ole. I went with different.

Course I went with different in my Nude day winner, but it was a standard type of conflict throughout just a different device.

Wait until my Halloween incest story. It may not be great, but its going to go down as being memorable.

 

[CoffeeWithMonkeys]

Some guys speak like that tho its a faux cool. When I was a teen we played gay holding hands and blowing kisses and flapping our hands like little wings. A lost art. Eddie Murphy was a master of it.

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-70XZP8y7e8
GAYEDDIE

When I was a teen...I have no fucking clue, LOL, that was a long time ago!
I do tell my kids about how we had a smoking lounge at our high school. Not much of a lounge, it was basically a space outside! But I think now how crazy that was.

Eddie Murphy...so funny back in the day.

 

[ChloeTzang]

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[Irreverent1]

For incest, the scores IMHO relate more to the premise of the story than the quality of writing. Write a story about a guy secretly fucking his mom, then his sister and then his aunt in the back seat of the car during a cross-country drive and you'll get a red H even if the story is filled with typos and bad grammar.

So, so true

 

[dansouthwest]

Hey I too am a newer writer and recently posted a story. In my case I have gotten high views and ratings however there were some down right mean reviews too that had nothing at all to do with my story. I even had experienced authors telling me that the only reason the story did so well is that the genre is popular. Well why didn't other stories in the same genre do as well as mine then. I am getting off topic.

I am learning to not get so hung up on the scores and ratings as in my case it gave me a little bit of a big head and that is not good either. Eventually all things even out and go where they are supposed to go.

Just remember why we write these stories in the first place. To get ourselves off. We share them for others to do the same thing but originally it was for ourselves. I promise to read your story and give you an objective review.

Don't sweat the small stuff. If it is a good story that will eventually pan out.

Also remember you can always edit your story and re-post it if you are unhappy with it.

Thanks Richman. I have got an editor now, so working with them now to iron out the mistakes. Have you figured out how to edit and repost it? I can't seem to find out how to delete the old story and publish the new edited one.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

writing as a brit can occasionally have a downside. don't give up, though. i'll go and take a longer look at the piece and mebbe's PM.

 

[dansouthwest]

writing as a brit can occasionally have a downside. don't give up, though. i'll go and take a longer look at the piece and mebbe's PM.

I know I found that a bit of a challenge as I wasn't too sure if I should give a lot of information to make it easier for our friends across the ocean, but at the same time didn't want to sound like I was spoon feeding them either.

From the feedbacks I've received so far a few of the readers are annoyed that I assumed the Non-Brits couldn't google the city's name if they wanted to but at the same time I've got a few others who were thanking me for making it easier for them to read!

The bottom line is I guess you can't please everyone and I just need to find the right balance.

 

[J_R_Ashunwhy]

Have you figured out how to edit and repost it? I can't seem to find out how to delete the old story and publish the new edited one.

You don't have to delete the old one to replace it with an edited version. Instead, submit the edited version of the story with the same title followed by (EDITED) in the title line, and then in the author's notes section, add either what was edited or a quick blurb of why the edits were completed. The site will replace the original with the edited version without you losing any favorites on the story, but if I understand correctly, edits end up at the back of the story queue, so it may take a few days to see the story updated.

 

[TxRad]

You don't have to delete the old one to replace it with an edited version. Instead, submit the edited version of the story with the same title followed by (EDITED) in the title line, and then in the author's notes section, add either what was edited or a quick blurb of why the edits were completed. The site will replace the original with the edited version without you losing any favorites on the story, but if I understand correctly, edits end up at the back of the story queue, so it may take a few days to see the story updated.

Using this method you don't lose votes, views or comments either.

It might take a week to get the edited version up according to how many stories are submitted. It might also take a few days for the edited version to replace the old one after laurel does the swap.

 

[J_R_Ashunwhy]

Using this method you don't lose votes, views or comments either.

It might take a week to get the edited version up according to how many stories are submitted. It might also take a few days for the edited version to replace the old one after laurel does the swap.

Thank you for the assist, good sir

 

[TxRad]

Thank you for the assist, good sir

Glad to be of service.

 

[dansouthwest]

You don't have to delete the old one to replace it with an edited version. Instead, submit the edited version of the story with the same title followed by (EDITED) in the title line, and then in the author's notes section, add either what was edited or a quick blurb of why the edits were completed. The site will replace the original with the edited version without you losing any favorites on the story, but if I understand correctly, edits end up at the back of the story queue, so it may take a few days to see the story updated.

Great stuff! Thank you for clearing that up!

 

[ChloeTzang]

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