JenniferSmithJones
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"non-sequitur," maybe?I've said many times I see myself more as a storyteller than a complete writer. I quit school in 10th grade, always sucked at English when I did go, have taken no classes, have had no one work with me other than an occasional beta reader. My grammar has come a long way, but still sketchy at times, and most of all for the point of this thread, I don't know much beyond "Yeah, I write stories." My best example which I've used here several times is a few years ago someone told me they were blown away by my use of unreliable narrator and I had to look up what that meant. If I do a certain 'thing' in a story, it was just instinct or how the story came out of me.
Having said that, I wrote a line yesterday that made me stop and think because I do this particular thing quite often, so it made me wonder if there is some type of official term for this, or there's really nothing to it.
"Yeah, okay, like you weren't fucking hard while watching your wife fucking hard."
Same combination of words, two meanings, used in the same sentence. In my unprofessional mind I refer to this as a "turnaround" or the joke I see what you did there" Some of them are not the same exact two words in the same order. I could also play it as "You were fucking hard watching your wife fuck hard"
Curious if this is some type of concept like a Colloquialism?
And for this line: "You were fucking hard watching your wife fuck hard"
I might have written it like this:
"You were fucking hard watching your wife hard fucking."
But I constantly have to fight with myself about "getting too cute with the wordplay." Your way is probably the best way. It perfectly conveys your meaning in a whimsical, clever, visually engaging way.