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[WildAngel4U]

I'm a 1st time poster here on Lit, but a long time reader. I'm just looking for some feedback and maybe someone who would like to help me with ideas or suggestion, but not editing as I have an editor that I absolutely love. Its a Paranormal story posted in the Nonhuman category. The title is Come with Night under Wildangel4u. I'm just looking to improve my writing so constructive criticism is greatly appreciated. Thanks

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=363972
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=366473

 

[The_Fractal_King]

A parapgraph longer than five lines is very difficult to read on a computer screen.
Some of the details about Chastity's husband were excessive considering he never did anything but get murdered.
There were one or two mistakes in grammar but beyond that I didn't notice anything wrong.

I'm not a fan of vampire stories, the angst irritates me, but this was nice and the twist you put on it was interesting.