Trombonus
A bit older, a lot wiser.
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- Jul 17, 2006
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So after several days of "Too Damn Lazy to Get Off My Ass and Do Anything" syndrome, I finally finished my latest story. Now I'm hoping to get some people to read it and give me some feedback. I also need someone to edit it for me.
So it's the latest submission for the "Virtual Reality" chain, and is set in the Pokemon world. I know what you're thinking, but I can assure you that everyone in the story is of age, and no it's not some kiddy tale.
Most of the story is made up of Pokemon battles. I'm not worried about that part so much. What I am worried about is the sex scene. I have never been so frustrated and displeased with a sex scene that I wrote. I'm hoping you guys will let me know what you think. Also I'm not real happy with the ending.
Hope to hear from some of you.
So it's the latest submission for the "Virtual Reality" chain, and is set in the Pokemon world. I know what you're thinking, but I can assure you that everyone in the story is of age, and no it's not some kiddy tale.
Most of the story is made up of Pokemon battles. I'm not worried about that part so much. What I am worried about is the sex scene. I have never been so frustrated and displeased with a sex scene that I wrote. I'm hoping you guys will let me know what you think. Also I'm not real happy with the ending.
Hope to hear from some of you.
