Looking for Feedback

[Bill Dada]

Hi, my I'm Bill Dada and am fairly new to this site. I recently posted my third story (The Vacation) and would love to get some feedback on it

The Vacation

 

[falcon29]

Didn't work.

I tried but I couldn't get there from here. Check the URL.

 

[msboy8]

I'll read it and V.C. on it too. Keep writing.

 

[Bill Dada]

Thanx for the V C and the kind words here as well.

Just finished reading 'It's Just Sex Chapter 08' and it made want to read more of the other chapters and more of your stories.

What four words were mispelled?

 

[msboy8]

Thanx for the V C and the kind words here as well.

Just finished reading 'It's Just Sex Chapter 08' and it made want to read more of the other chapters and more of your stories.

What four words were mispelled?

Just little things that I have a problem with also. This is gonna cost you, hehehe.

See the lady riding her man on you

Missing the 'r' for "your".

let Donna see you're stiffy!"

Should be "Your".

middle of fucking and sucking they quite being my breasts and become my tits.)

Should be "quit".

Sam said, "Donna you slut, can you take her tit out of your mouth long enough to introduce me to the fuck Queen of the night."

I think you meant one of the two other women here.

All minor mistakes, great fucking story though. I get hard everytime I read it!

 

[Bill Dada]

This is gonna cost you, hehehe.

Since it is going cost me anyway, I'll runs the bill up by asking another question. So is it possible to edit stories or poems once they have been posted to the site? Say like going back in and correcting the errors you found.

Thanks so much for pointing out those errors and for the very kind words.

 

[msboy8]

Since it is going cost me anyway, I'll runs the bill up by asking another question. So is it possible to edit stories or poems once they have been posted to the site? Say like going back in and correcting the errors you found.

Thanks so much for pointing out those errors and for the very kind words.

Amazingly, for me anyway, I don't know. You are very welcome, thanks for sharing your stories with us.

 

[Bill Dada]

So is it possible to edit stories or poems once they have been posted to the site? Say like going back in and correcting the errors you found.

Amazingly, for me anyway, I don't know.

It took me awhile, but I was able to find out how to edit stories after they had been posted. It was pretty hard to find, it was in FAQ under submissions. It is so easy, you just resubmit the story with -EDITED after the title.

e.g. The Vacation-EDITED

Hey thanks again for the corrections and you never did say what exactly I owed you.