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[destinie21]

I've got a new story posted. It's part two of a lesbian incest story,
if you have the time please check it out.

thanks.

Regards D21



Raine & Sheri 2

 

[KWG]

story feedback

Whoa! Didn't see that coming.

But I have to admit I like where this story is going. Can't wait for part three.

And let me say I have enjoyed all your submissions so far. Very good writing. And nice avatar.

(Also eagerly awaiting The Bitch, chapter 7)

 

[dr_mabeuse]

I didn’t read part1, so there’s some stuff that wasn’t clear to me. I take it that Sheri is some sort of rock star back home for the holidays, which is where the incestuous lesbian relationship with her sister suddenly begins?

It was very well written. My only complaint is that they sure didn’t seem like sisters to me. There was none of that sense of shared history and intimacy that sisters have in real life, and they just don’t seem to know each other very well. If you hadn’t told us they were sisters, I would have assumed that Sheri was just some lover that Raine had brought home, the sex is all so casual and taken-for-granted.

I don't understand how sisters could grow up and not know that each other was gay? Or maybe they did know, but never got it on with each other before? In any event, it seems like very sanitized incest. But maybe I missed something in Part 1?

---dr.M.

 

[destinie21]

part one goes into their history or rather gives background on they're lack of sisterly knowledge.

 

[gerardo]

Yummmmy

Destinie,
I really enjoyed your story and recorded a 5 rating because it was so well written. The part where Raine eats Sheri was sooo descriptive....sooo steamy. I gotta be honest with you after reading it, I'm dying to eat pussy! It just sounded so damn good.
Now that is effective writing !
I only wish that little picture you have on your posts were real live ! Yummy