Looking for Feedback! (mom/son taboo)

[nexus_ausguy]

I only have the first chapter right now, however I'd love any notes relating to what I have so far. This IS an incest story, so the focus is on the mom/son relationship

Please give me a pm if you're interested!

LOGLINE: A struggling young-adult returns home to visit his aging mother on her birthday, where sexual tensions reach their boiling point.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

I only have the first chapter right now, however I'd love any notes relating to what I have so far. This IS an incest story, so the focus is on the mom/son relationship

Please give me a pm if you're interested!

LOGLINE: A struggling young-adult returns home to visit his aging mother on her birthday, where sexual tensions reach their boiling point.

where's the link?

 

[nexus_ausguy]

where's the link?

It's not published, but I'd be happy to send you the text in a pm. That's how I'd prefer to do it anyway..

 

[geronimo_appleby]

It's not published, but I'd be happy to send you the text in a pm. That's how I'd prefer to do it anyway..

that's not really how this forum works. you might be better off trying an editor. There's a forum for that.

how many words is it?

 

[nexus_ausguy]

that's not really how this forum works. you might be better off trying an editor. There's a forum for that.

how many words is it?

only around 800.

 

[geronimo_appleby]

only around 800.

okay. send it.

what are you looking for in feedback terms? an editor, i ain't.

 

[nexus_ausguy]

okay. send it.

what are you looking for in feedback terms? an editor, i ain't.

general thoughts, if you think the writing should be tighter, pacing, word choice...stuff like that mostly.

I'll send it through.