Looking for Feedback/Constructive Criticism on my stories.

[MidnightLothario]

Hello, I'm a fairly new author, with seven stories published so far. Unfortunately I can't seem to get a lot of traction here. Like anyone else, I'd like to be successful, a novelist eventually. So I'd greatly appreciate any and all feedback and/or constructive criticism concerning my stories. Thank You.

 

[SyleusSnow]

Help potential readers out... include a link to your stories.

 

[AlinaX]

I just read the first few paragraphs of Thistles in the Garden and, honestly, it’s so convoluted I lost the will to continue.

I get the desire to be atmospheric, but… this is extreme.

 

[MidnightLothario]

Help potential readers out... include a link to your stories.

https://www.literotica.com/my/#/works/stories/published

Hope that works. I am such a n00b.

 

[MidnightLothario]

I just read the first few paragraphs of Thistles in the Garden and, honestly, it’s so convoluted I lost the will to continue.

I get the desire to be atmospheric, but… this is extreme.

Thank You. I am trying too be a better author. Might I suggest you try Tear You Apart.

I can, work at dialing back the atmosphere.

 

[WCSGarland]

https://www.literotica.com/my/#/works/stories/published

Hope that works. I am such a n00b.

That will only bring anybody to their own works.

 

[Voyeurkenneth]

https://www.literotica.com/my/#/works/stories/published

Hope that works. I am such a n00b.

You’ve gotta grab the url for your story. The one you shared goes straight to a user’s control panel.

 

[MidnightLothario]

That will only bring anybody to their own works.

Well, just go to the search bar and enter my name under members. I am not sure what else to do.

My stories are called "The Thorns In Our Hearts", "Thistles In The Garden", "Deep In The Forest", and "Tear You Apart"

 

[WCSGarland]

All you have to do is click on the title of the story you want reviewed from your control panel and grab the url from the page it brings you to. Easy peasy.