Looking for editor: first time, non-con, novella

[frozen_north]

Greetings, I'm looking for someone to edit a peice that I just had rejected. I thought that I had edited the peice fairly well but the staff didn't think so.
In the original form the main character is 16 but I had edited the story for age and thought that I had done a fair job. Can someone look it over and tell me what I missed, I can't find it.

 

[CopyCarver]

Greetings, I'm looking for someone to edit a peice that I just had rejected. I thought that I had edited the peice fairly well but the staff didn't think so.
In the original form the main character is 16 but I had edited the story for age and thought that I had done a fair job. Can someone look it over and tell me what I missed, I can't find it.

I'm seriously overloaded--both vocationally and avocationally--at the moment. I'd be happy to take a look at your ms. in a week or so, if you don't find someone before then.

 

[frozen_north]

I'm seriously overloaded--both vocationally and avocationally--at the moment. I'd be happy to take a look at your ms. in a week or so, if you don't find someone before then.

Sigh, story of my life...

 

[AsylumSeeker]

I can help.

 

[rozezwild]

Greetings, I'm looking for someone to edit a peice that I just had rejected. I thought that I had edited the peice fairly well but the staff didn't think so.
In the original form the main character is 16 but I had edited the story for age and thought that I had done a fair job. Can someone look it over and tell me what I missed, I can't find it.

I can hlep if you need it still

 

[frozen_north]

Thank you Roze and Assylum, I think I got a couple of people to look at it. We'll see how it goes from there.

 

[JRaven]

Frozen_North had sent it to me. I found a few things that may have caused the rejection. But then, I'm no editor.

Unfortunately, I haven't heard from him since.

Jenny

 

[frozen_north]

Working on it. I need to completely rewrite chapter 1 and revise ch.9. Life took a left turn at albaqurci(sp?), recently so the rewrite is going to take a little time. I managed to post the story in its original form at storiesonline.net under the same author name. I am still planning on editing it so I can post it here but anyone interested can check it out there. The story is titled "Rite of Passage."