Looking for Editor - Female Perspective

[jandavidhunt]

I am new to this site (but not the art form of writing erotica). I’d appreciate input on a story. I guess what I’m looking for are opinions on the story and recommendation on how to make it better. Would love to hear “what works” or “does it for you” and what does not.

I’d love to know when you read something but “really wish I would have said XXXX”.

Oh, and I’m horrible at coming up with metaphors or similes, but I love to read them. If you have one… let me steal it .

My grammar should be pretty good, but the style I write in doesn’t lead to perfect sentence structure. Opportunities for improvement on grammar is appreciated.

If you're interested reply here or PM. I can email or paste text, or send a Word file.

Thanks much,

David!

 

[elfin_odalisque]

I'd be happy to give you a read and my opinionated comments. I'll need to claim about a week or so to get back to you because of my schedule.

To get the great male take on female erotica, try Paco Fear or Evil Alpaca.

Email on my member site.