Looking for assistance

[The Erotic Quill]

Basically, I'm looking for someone who can take my stories and add the "Spice" to them as well as help me turn my Characters into something "real". I have had a lot of people read my stories and tell me they are good. However, I find them to be lacking and I don't know how to improve on them. I have one story that is already many Chapters long and I'd like to have someone take it and turn the erotic parts into something that will get guys hard and gals wet.

If you want to see some of my work, please visit my Yahoo site, http://groups.yahoo.com/group/eroticwriting/ in in the "Files" section you will find Folders for different Authors and as you may guess, I write under the name of The Erotic Quill.

Thanks for your time and anyone who thinks they would be interested in working with me, please contact me at the address of theeroticquill@operamail.com


NOTE: To those of you who read this for the first time, as you read the replys below you will find mention of a wrong link and they are correct. I have, however, since then, gone back and changed the above link to the correct one.


Warren aka The Erotic Quill

 

[Colleen Thomas]

You have a few options here Eq.

The first suggesstion I have would be to join the SDG, participate some, get a feel for what goes on there and then ask Muffie to workshop a chapter of your story.

Another option would be to submit a chapter and then ask for feedback onthe feedback thread. While youmight get a response from someone here willing to help is that really what you want? Someone to do the sex scenes up for you? You would be much better off trying and learning how to do themyourself, even if it means having to learn from making mistakes.

-Colly

 

[dr_mabeuse]

I took your link and joined your group, but I didn't see any stories in your "Files" section at all.

---dr.M.

 

[wildsweetone]

I think maybe it's the wrong link somehow... that one leads to a photographer's and model's group...?

 

[Boxlicker101]

Basically, I'm looking for someone who can take my stories and add the "Spice" to them as well as help me turn my Characters into something "real". I have had a lot of people read my stories and tell me they are good. However, I find them to be lacking and I don't know how to improve on them. I have one story that is already many Chapters long and I'd like to have someone take it and turn the erotic parts into something that will get guys hard and gals wet.

If you want to see some of my work, please visit my Yahoo site, http://groups.yahoo.com/group/bodyshotsinc/ in in the "Files" section you will find Folders for different Authors and as you may guess, I write under the name of The Erotic Quill.

Thanks for your time and anyone who thinks they would be interested in working with me, please contact me at the address of theeroticquill@operamail.com

Warren aka The Erotic Quill

This same message was emailed to me today and the URL led, like Sweet One said, to some kind of artist's and model's group. This might be the old phonus-balonus. If it is not, I or probably anybody here would be glad to help this guy out.

 

[wildsweetone]

FIVE emails later I am now unsubscribed from that yahoo group.

Man, there's as much red tape with those groups as there is in joining the local library.



Warren, here's a couple of quick ideas.


1. In the heat of the moment of your sex scene, try calling on all the senses... what sounds can your characters hear, what smells etc...

2. Check that you're 'showing' the reader what's going on and not 'telling' them. Sometimes a subtle change can make a huge difference.

3. Is the dialogue (if any) realistic? Too many 'Oooohhhhh's and 'Aaaaaaaaah' can seem over the top for some readers.

Hope those few ideas help.

wso

 

[gauchecritic]

Sexing up documents? I think you need a spin doctor or an MP.

Gauche

 

[lewdandlicentious]

Nice one Gauche, although I disagree.

MORE sexed up documents is what we DON'T need!

 

[pop_54]

Hehe!!

FIVE emails later I am now unsubscribed from that yahoo group.

Man, there's as much red tape with those groups as there is in joining the local library.



Warren, here's a couple of quick ideas.


1. In the heat of the moment of your sex scene, try calling on all the senses... what sounds can your characters hear, what smells etc...

2. Check that you're 'showing' the reader what's going on and not 'telling' them. Sometimes a subtle change can make a huge difference.

3. Is the dialogue (if any) realistic? Too many 'Oooohhhhh's and 'Aaaaaaaaah' can seem over the top for some readers.

Hope those few ideas help.

wso

Sweetone darling, one 'Oooooooooooohhhh,' and 'Ahhhhhhhhhhhh,' is over the top in my book, anyone who can't portray emotion without such crap, needs a serious think about their future as an author.

Warren mate, forget the pop-up infested yahoo site and post a snippet or two here, I didn't bother with your link I know the pitfalls of old. I don't even visit my own old yahoo pages anymore.

We'll all give support and assistance if you need it, well most of us anyway.

pops...............

 

[Boxlicker101]

Originally posted by wildsweetone
3. Is the dialogue (if any) realistic? Too many 'Oooohhhhh's and 'Aaaaaaaaah' can seem over the top for some readers.

Response by Pop54

Sweetone darling, one 'Oooooooooooohhhh,' and 'Ahhhhhhhhhhhh,' is over the top in my book, anyone who can't portray emotion without such crap, needs a serious think about their future as an author.

Personally, I think we need some "sound effects". "Oooo," she said. "That feels good." seems okay to me.

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH," she screamed. is over the top.



A certain amount of moderation is always called for.

 

[pop_54]

Hmmmmmm

Originally posted by wildsweetone
3. Is the dialogue (if any) realistic? Too many 'Oooohhhhh's and 'Aaaaaaaaah' can seem over the top for some readers.

Response by Pop54

Sweetone darling, one 'Oooooooooooohhhh,' and 'Ahhhhhhhhhhhh,' is over the top in my book, anyone who can't portray emotion without such crap, needs a serious think about their future as an author.

Personally, I think we need some "sound effects". "Oooo," she said. "That feels good." seems okay to me.

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH," she screamed. is over the top.



A certain amount of moderation is always called for.

Ohh! and Ooo! or the occasional Ahh, Hmm, Mmm, is my maximum, I couldn't bring myself to post a story with any more multiples than that, barring a piss take parody of course.

I have been known to reach the dizzy heights of your example, Oooo, but only once I think, and that was to describe a mind bending spine twisting Earth moving orgasm that broke the bed.

 

[Uther_Pendragon]

I'll take a pass.
I'll admit that everybody goes through different processes
in writing. I even go though differnet processes in
witing different stories, myself.
That said, I'm very suspicious of rewriting an already
written story to "make the characters more real."
It seems to me that having realistic characters is the
first thing you'd have to do. At most, your writing
might not express the insights you have into why those
characters behave that way. If so, another person
would have one HELL of a time expressing it -- they'd not
have access to those insights.

 

[The Erotic Quill]

Wrong Link Posted

To everyone,

I realize that my mistake definately makes me look extremely stupid and all I can say is, "Sorry, about my mistake and not realizing my mistake till now."

The link posted is, my web site. I own a Modeling Agency just outside of Indianapolis but I did not post the link as a means of advertisement.

The correct link should of been ......

http://groups.yahoo.com/group/eroticwriting/

and it is very easy to join.

Now, several of you have posted helpful information and it is appreciated. I guess my biggest problem is getting what is inside my head on paper so that it reads what I am thinking. You would not believe the number of times that I write something and then rewrite it a dozen times before setting it aside and never working on it again.

Some time back I used to read a series of books and at one point read an article about the author who said that he lockes himself in a room and starts to write, at some point the story begins to form and when he finishes he cuts off everything he wrote before the beginning part and what he has left is his next book. He also stated that it takes him three or four days to write a book.

For me, I work on something for months and still am not happy with them.

OH, and to all of you who have offered your assistance, "Thank You".




Warren aka The Erotic Quill
http://groups.yahoo.com/group/eroticwriting/