Looking for an editor?

[Thabes]

I decided to start writing again, even looking toward an adult novel, and on the re-read of what I'd done I caught numerous errors. And I thought I was a decent writer <sigh>.

I'd love to have someone take the time to review/critique/correct/chastise before I actually post.

I'm looking at more of an emotional work than the previous stories I've posted here. Longer, with a lot more character development, and maybe more romantic and less straight out porn.

What I have so far on the current story is more... Well. How do I include a sample so that interested editors might preview without having to slug through the whole thing? And I don't have to choose from too many editors that show interest (assuming more than one is foolish enough to do so... <smiling>)

No, sorry. No Mustangs.. Though my wife wants a Dodge Charger, I'm still nervous about letting her drive my new Jeep.

- Thabes

 

[Thabes]

Sample page

Figured I should probably include at least a sample... You may not get any plot info, but at least it shows my writing style? Strange writing from a woman's perspective rather than 3rd person. Like I can pretend to know how she really feels.

If anything, pasting here showed me I have to reformat with double-spacing... Done!

(Revised - It was explained to me that a normal sample only included 3 paragraphs? So, I've selected a simple, short set of 5, because I'm a rule breaker like that.. Thanks for the heads-up, Mistress Lynn!)
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She had what looked like a spreadsheet up on the bulky laptop and was typing occasionally with quick little pecks. It would have been faster if she had removed the false nails she wore, but the nails really completed her look. I chuckled to myself as I leaned back in my seat.

The plane was nearly full, and the aisle was open in the front section. A couple of stragglers quickly made their way onto the plane without even glancing at us.

Brad leaned toward me, dropping his hand to the inside of my leg and sent sparkling tingles up to my core. "Her perfume is burning my eyes," he whispered as he kissed my cheek.

"Your naked hand is burning my thigh," I whispered back hotly as I covered his hand with mine. "I'll let you finger me if you try. To make me cum so hard I cry?"

My little poem made him snicker, and he slid his hand up so the edge and little finger of it pressed into the center of my crotch. I tried to hold it there but he slipped it away before my fingers could close. I couldn't help the whimper that sounded in my throat, and he gave me a wicked little laugh that flooded me more than his hand had.
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That's a quick middle selection...

 

[Thabes]

And even the sample...

Please, if you're interested in helping me, drop me a note? I'd love any help you can provide, even if it's flat out painful. Half my issue with writing is indifference, and the other half is praise from illiterates. Everything else is helpful, no matter if it hurts or not.

- Thabes

 

[_Lynn_]

Please edit your example to approximately three paragraphs, the maximum amount allowed by site owners.

 

[LadyVer]

You should have no problem finding an editor. From what I see, it's definitely editor-ready. The only thing I noticed was a double "very." It's unnecessary but no biggie as your writing and mechanics overall are really good.

 

[LaRascasse]

Could you supply a few more metrics, such as word count and the themes involved (lesbian, BDSM, incest etc.)? It would also help if you could give a potential editor the turn-around time you want from them.