Looking for an editor

[2easy2]

I'm in need of an editor. The story I submitted has been rejected twice. The reason they gave was: (Please break up the dialogue)

The story is about a woman with a strapon dressing her B/F up in lingerie then making him suck a guys dick while she does his ass.

Please help!

 

[JackLuis]

I'm in need of an editor. The story I submitted has been rejected twice. The reason they gave was: (Please break up the dialogue)

The story is about a woman with a strapon dressing her B/F up in lingerie then making him suck a guys dick while she does his ass.

Please help!

Probably the reason is not enough spaces between the various characters lines. Leave a space between each characters lines and make each Characters lines a seperate paragraph.

Tey to put the discriptive passages with hte characters lines taht they apply to.

Hope that helps.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... The reason they gave was: (Please break up the dialogue) ...

As JL said, every time I have seen this it is because the author has forgotten that every separate and distinct direct speech should be in a separate paragraph, especially if said by a different person from the preceding one.

 

[2easy2]

Thank you both

I seperated my paragraphs after my first rejection. I'll go back through it again & see if I may have missed something.

Thank you both.

 

[A-Heart-On]

Did you find an editor?

I looked for your story but there didn't seem to be one. I can see it has been some time since you posted this; did you find an editor?

I have several pantie stories posted on Lit. My wife is an editor and worked on mine......she like guys in panties so I'm sure she would be interested if you haven't found one yet.

 

[2easy2]

I looked for your story but there didn't seem to be one. I can see it has been some time since you posted this; did you find an editor?

I have several pantie stories posted on Lit. My wife is an editor and worked on mine......she like guys in panties so I'm sure she would be interested if you haven't found one yet.

I did but I'm almost ready for another. Would your wife mind looking it over for me?