oldmantang
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Its a mostly a reluctance story. It's got lezdom, interracial, manipulation and coercion, group(no mm), and public and exhibition themes. It’s not written to please everyone. It’s written for the specific audience that enjoy this type of stories. I consider this smut. 100% smut. There is no good, bad or morality to the story or any smut I write. It’s not supposed to be realistic, it’s smut. This is fantasy. I 120% do not condone anything like this in the real world. Everything in this story that is not smut is used in the setup and support of the smut. In other words, the non smut was created for the smut and not the smut for the non smut lol.
Will prefer (but not absolutely necessary) a woman (30+) for perspective on the view point and voice of my (30+) female characters (I like to write female (30+) characters who have no scruples).
Thanks.
EDIT: Some more info:-
What I am looking for is mostly beta reading and grammar. I Have already gone over the story once and edited, so it should not need a crazy amount of corrections. The story is ~23300 words. Its about a girl who comes to school in the U S of A and has some misadventures. Here are some things that have been said about the story,
"Its a masterpiece!" - Me
"Its a classic and a wonderful masterpiece!" - Myself
"Classic and a wonderful masterpiece it is!" - Myself (talking like Yoda)
Here is an excerpt:
”Come in”, Sheila Fitzgerald called out in response to the knock on her office door.
Sheila Fitzgerald was a quite attractive forty-year-old black woman. Her smooth mocha skin was flawless and she kept her curvy body firm, fit and in shape thanks to her work out regiments. She was always dressed in attires that both accented her figure handsomely while also commanding respect. It made her sexy, alluring and respectable all at the same time. It was what her students and co-faculty at the all girls college of Margaret Green thought about her. At five feet nine inches, and her usual high heeled pumps on her feet, she could also be an imposing figure. She however had an easy smile that usually made her approachable to the girls.
She already knew it was Ria, a sophomore and her trustworthy student confidant, at the door,.
Putting the papers in front of her to the side, she smiled at the pretty caramel-skinned twenty-two year-old girl as she walked into her office. She was in a form fitting T-shirt and jeans and had a big Cheshire's Cat grin on her face.
“Sup Prof. Fitzgerald! Got some juicy news for you! You are just going to love it”, she said flopping herself into the comfy cushion sofa that was to one side of the office.
“Yeah? Juicy? You know I like juicy”, Sheila smiled calmly at the girl.
“Chloe Martin”, Ria said, her smile getting bigger.
“Chloe Martin...”, Sheila repeated, “...as in Chloe Martin, the freshman in my feminism studies class?”
“Yup!”, Ria replied still smiling
“Okay, what about her?”, she asked giving the girl the opening she knew she was looking for to divulge the information she was so excited to share.
“So, like under all those baggy clothes she puts on, she is a total hottie. I mean like a cute banging body and all. 34D tits on her small cute frame and a full heart shaped butt like you would not believe. And that’s not all…”
Sheila continued to gaze at her steadily so she continued.
“So, she is like an international student, right? From a small village in some small country in Europe, like poor. She and her family actually thought America was some kind of free money land and that when she got here, she would automatically be rich and start sending money home for the family.” Ria said laughing
“Now she is here, dead broke and desperate. She can’t even work. She does not know how to tell her hopeful family and their whole village, all who are like expecting loads of money, that America is not what they thought it was and that she will not be sending home bags of cash”, she said laughing again.
“And how do you know all this?”, Sheila asked
Will prefer (but not absolutely necessary) a woman (30+) for perspective on the view point and voice of my (30+) female characters (I like to write female (30+) characters who have no scruples).
Thanks.
EDIT: Some more info:-
What I am looking for is mostly beta reading and grammar. I Have already gone over the story once and edited, so it should not need a crazy amount of corrections. The story is ~23300 words. Its about a girl who comes to school in the U S of A and has some misadventures. Here are some things that have been said about the story,
"Its a masterpiece!" - Me
"Its a classic and a wonderful masterpiece!" - Myself
"Classic and a wonderful masterpiece it is!" - Myself (talking like Yoda)
Here is an excerpt:
”Come in”, Sheila Fitzgerald called out in response to the knock on her office door.
Sheila Fitzgerald was a quite attractive forty-year-old black woman. Her smooth mocha skin was flawless and she kept her curvy body firm, fit and in shape thanks to her work out regiments. She was always dressed in attires that both accented her figure handsomely while also commanding respect. It made her sexy, alluring and respectable all at the same time. It was what her students and co-faculty at the all girls college of Margaret Green thought about her. At five feet nine inches, and her usual high heeled pumps on her feet, she could also be an imposing figure. She however had an easy smile that usually made her approachable to the girls.
She already knew it was Ria, a sophomore and her trustworthy student confidant, at the door,.
Putting the papers in front of her to the side, she smiled at the pretty caramel-skinned twenty-two year-old girl as she walked into her office. She was in a form fitting T-shirt and jeans and had a big Cheshire's Cat grin on her face.
“Sup Prof. Fitzgerald! Got some juicy news for you! You are just going to love it”, she said flopping herself into the comfy cushion sofa that was to one side of the office.
“Yeah? Juicy? You know I like juicy”, Sheila smiled calmly at the girl.
“Chloe Martin”, Ria said, her smile getting bigger.
“Chloe Martin...”, Sheila repeated, “...as in Chloe Martin, the freshman in my feminism studies class?”
“Yup!”, Ria replied still smiling
“Okay, what about her?”, she asked giving the girl the opening she knew she was looking for to divulge the information she was so excited to share.
“So, like under all those baggy clothes she puts on, she is a total hottie. I mean like a cute banging body and all. 34D tits on her small cute frame and a full heart shaped butt like you would not believe. And that’s not all…”
Sheila continued to gaze at her steadily so she continued.
“So, she is like an international student, right? From a small village in some small country in Europe, like poor. She and her family actually thought America was some kind of free money land and that when she got here, she would automatically be rich and start sending money home for the family.” Ria said laughing
“Now she is here, dead broke and desperate. She can’t even work. She does not know how to tell her hopeful family and their whole village, all who are like expecting loads of money, that America is not what they thought it was and that she will not be sending home bags of cash”, she said laughing again.
“And how do you know all this?”, Sheila asked
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