Hello,
I'm looking for editor feedback on a few stories I've written.
After reading porn for years, my head was filed with stories to be told.
So far the efforts have resulted in over 250 pages of my musings broken into some 40 plus story segments. Half of it might be ready for someone else to critique. The rest need more work.
Some parts are memories, some are slightly enhanced with fantasies.
I had a lot of fun in the 70's. Yeah, I'm an old fart. Not dead yet though.
So, looking for an editor who can help with feedback on general grammar and story quality.
An opposite sex comment on erotic effect would be appreciated. Does the writing appeal to women? Should something be added? Taken away?
If you are interested, we would begin working one of the more polished pieces.
Three stories are in the best shape for input. Don't freak on the length, I'm looking for help on a segment at a time. Plus, I won't go nuts on you, when you give feedback.
So look over these outlines and give me your thoughts.
Title: Spanking the naughty house guest – You call this abuse?
Summary: Molly is couch surfing and finally gets her act cleaned up.
Can Dave clean up his housemates guest, bounce her bones and
move her to another location before his girlfriend returns from Spring Break?
Insight – Depression, abuse and homelessness can be pretty unappealing. Sometimes all it takes is a little kindness.
11K words - 26 pages in .rtf format - Three segments are good, one weaker.
Category: Erotic Couplings
Title: One Spring Morning - Sandy shares her friends starting with a Spring Morning Threesome.
Summary: Can a man and a woman be friends and have sex? I don't know but, it's fun to try.
Story elements; flash backs tell the story of sexual encounters. Multiple sex partners.
19K words – 39 pages in .rtf format – Perhaps 8 segments
Category: Group Sex, Erotic Couplings, Exhibitionist
Title: Friday five o'clock club – It takes teamwork to scratch that itch.
Summary: On Friday at five o'clock the guys get together and smoke dope. In a separate venue, some gals like the soft touch of a woman to relieve that special itch. Then they can go out to play. Do you want to play? Three housemates; Kathy, Laura, Susan bed the same guy. Themes FM, FF, FFM, jealousy, cheating.
18K words – 37 pages in .rtf format. Perhaps 3 or 4 segments
Insight – one of the women involved was sexually abused by her family. The experience is held a deep secret but colors her behavior.
Category: Group Sex, Erotic Couplings
Some story facts were adjusted to bring them up to date, should they be entirely modernized? Examples; Our concerns were more about avoiding pregnancy than STDs. We didn't have cell phones.
Let me know your interest and availability. I can send a chapter, you read it. Give me an opinion on how much work it needs and what you are interested in doing.
I work at this a little at a time in between other work. I'm not in a hurry.
I'm looking for editor feedback on a few stories I've written.
After reading porn for years, my head was filed with stories to be told.
So far the efforts have resulted in over 250 pages of my musings broken into some 40 plus story segments. Half of it might be ready for someone else to critique. The rest need more work.
Some parts are memories, some are slightly enhanced with fantasies.
I had a lot of fun in the 70's. Yeah, I'm an old fart. Not dead yet though.
So, looking for an editor who can help with feedback on general grammar and story quality.
An opposite sex comment on erotic effect would be appreciated. Does the writing appeal to women? Should something be added? Taken away?
If you are interested, we would begin working one of the more polished pieces.
Three stories are in the best shape for input. Don't freak on the length, I'm looking for help on a segment at a time. Plus, I won't go nuts on you, when you give feedback.
So look over these outlines and give me your thoughts.
Title: Spanking the naughty house guest – You call this abuse?
Summary: Molly is couch surfing and finally gets her act cleaned up.
Can Dave clean up his housemates guest, bounce her bones and
move her to another location before his girlfriend returns from Spring Break?
Insight – Depression, abuse and homelessness can be pretty unappealing. Sometimes all it takes is a little kindness.
11K words - 26 pages in .rtf format - Three segments are good, one weaker.
Category: Erotic Couplings
Title: One Spring Morning - Sandy shares her friends starting with a Spring Morning Threesome.
Summary: Can a man and a woman be friends and have sex? I don't know but, it's fun to try.
Story elements; flash backs tell the story of sexual encounters. Multiple sex partners.
19K words – 39 pages in .rtf format – Perhaps 8 segments
Category: Group Sex, Erotic Couplings, Exhibitionist
Title: Friday five o'clock club – It takes teamwork to scratch that itch.
Summary: On Friday at five o'clock the guys get together and smoke dope. In a separate venue, some gals like the soft touch of a woman to relieve that special itch. Then they can go out to play. Do you want to play? Three housemates; Kathy, Laura, Susan bed the same guy. Themes FM, FF, FFM, jealousy, cheating.
18K words – 37 pages in .rtf format. Perhaps 3 or 4 segments
Insight – one of the women involved was sexually abused by her family. The experience is held a deep secret but colors her behavior.
Category: Group Sex, Erotic Couplings
Some story facts were adjusted to bring them up to date, should they be entirely modernized? Examples; Our concerns were more about avoiding pregnancy than STDs. We didn't have cell phones.
Let me know your interest and availability. I can send a chapter, you read it. Give me an opinion on how much work it needs and what you are interested in doing.
I work at this a little at a time in between other work. I'm not in a hurry.
