Sirs_subbie
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- May 10, 2010
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I'm working on a story and I'd love a little help from someone with some real life experience with BDsM (Dom or sub). I used to write a lot when I was with my last Dom, well over five years ago and just recently started getting back into it.
The crux of this story is pushing a sub to a slave mind-set, where her desires don't matter at all to her, only his, for the first time. Once he takes her there, the reward is delightful and depending on your opinion, simply a pleasurable continuation of his control over her and she loves it.
I think that I'll have it mostly done by the end of the evening. I'm working on filling in some places where I think that it drags and is "He did," "she did" and correcting the tense. I started w/ a rough outline of what I wanted to happen, filled it in over a short period of time and am adding the descriptions now and working on making it all present tense ~ writing on different days sometimes means that Tuesday is present and Wednesday is past. LOL! If you're not much for grammer, that's no big deal. I'm really good w/ that. I'm more wondering if what I end up with at the end of the evening tonite conveys what I explained above ~ not just an interesting session.
I'm currently at about 6500 words.
Any offers would be appreciated.
Thank you!!!
The crux of this story is pushing a sub to a slave mind-set, where her desires don't matter at all to her, only his, for the first time. Once he takes her there, the reward is delightful and depending on your opinion, simply a pleasurable continuation of his control over her and she loves it.
I think that I'll have it mostly done by the end of the evening. I'm working on filling in some places where I think that it drags and is "He did," "she did" and correcting the tense. I started w/ a rough outline of what I wanted to happen, filled it in over a short period of time and am adding the descriptions now and working on making it all present tense ~ writing on different days sometimes means that Tuesday is present and Wednesday is past. LOL! If you're not much for grammer, that's no big deal. I'm really good w/ that. I'm more wondering if what I end up with at the end of the evening tonite conveys what I explained above ~ not just an interesting session.
I'm currently at about 6500 words.
Any offers would be appreciated.
Thank you!!!
