Lit Dialog

[TxRad]

I looked her up and sampled her dialogue as you suggested. Her descriptions are superior, and I find her dialogue dissociated, reminds me of high school drama club actors, and friends thinking what theyre gonna say rather than saying whats on their minds. Rehearsed. But she knows how to paint scenes.

That is what dialog is for when you don't have body language for cues.

 

[Hypoxia]

Unedited recorded reality is boring. Most of people's lives are 1) boring or 2) nasty or 3) scary or 4) fucking hard work. Very little in life is worth repeating. So we dramatize and glamorize and edit and lie and try to be entertaining or at least not boring.

But remember, "the [person] who laughs has not yet been told the terrible news." Some focus on and highlight terrible news, and laugh cynically. Some fantasize about sex and power and money and sex and maybe their own questionable creative abilities. Some just slog through life.

We do not report here; we write fantasy. Fantasy is not realistic. Fantasy dialogue is not realistic. If you want real dialogue, read wiretap transcripts.

 

[patientlee]

No, and stick the snark up your ass, por favor. Let me be clear. All you get from me is a fair appraisal of your wares, apart from my contempt for you as a human..

I was aiming for polite. If you can't tell the difference, that's your problem.

 

[MSTarot]

I would, if I took an honest look at my own work, have to categorize myself as a dialog writer.

I seriously try to bring an edge of reality to the dialog between characters. My only real compromise is I have people say the name of the person they are talking to far more often than we do in real life conversations.

After all when you walk up to someone you know you, more often than not, just say "Hey, how's it going?"

Not "Hey, Philip, how's it going?"

I use that to direct the reader, guide them as to who they are hearing speak, without so many (he said) (she saids) tacked on the end of the sentence.

Probably the best I have dialog wise would be "Okay Now What." or "Southern Heritage"

http://www.literotica.com/s/okay-now-what

http://www.literotica.com/s/southern-heritage

There are others on my list that might given them a run but those two stand out to me as dialog used well.


MST

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

I was aiming for polite. If you can't tell the difference, that's your problem.

You need lots more work, start with civil.

 

[sr71plt]

I think that, as with many aspects of writing that you couldn't find spoon fed to you in your reading, you're just out of your depth on the question of writing dialogue, James. It's to be understood. You've only begun writing yourself and are overstretching on what you know or have had time to figure out by practice and personal experience.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

I think that, as with many aspects of writing that you couldn't find spoon fed to you in your reading, you're just out of your depth on the question of writing dialogue, James. It's to be understood. You've only begun writing yourself and are overstretching on what you know or have had time to figure out by practice and personal experience.

Go admire my green E.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

I would, if I took an honest look at my own work, have to categorize myself as a dialog writer.

I seriously try to bring an edge of reality to the dialog between characters. My only real compromise is I have people say the name of the person they are talking to far more often than we do in real life conversations.

After all when you walk up to someone you know you, more often than not, just say "Hey, how's it going?"

Not "Hey, Philip, how's it going?"

I use that to direct the reader, guide them as to who they are hearing speak, without so many (he said) (she saids) tacked on the end of the sentence.

Probably the best I have dialog wise would be "Okay Now What." or "Southern Heritage"

http://www.literotica.com/s/okay-now-what

http://www.literotica.com/s/southern-heritage

There are others on my list that might given them a run but those two stand out to me as dialog used well.


MST

You don't run with my associates, do you?

If we let you finish a thought this is what usually follows: MEMBER WHAT I SAID TO YOU THE LASS TIME YOU TALKED THAT SHIT? Uh you toll me to go fuck myself. ITS STILL MY RECOMMENDATION.

 

[allamagione]

I would, if I took an honest look at my own work, have to categorize myself as a dialog writer.

Me too. Not that I think I'm all that great at it, but if we're comparing my dialogue with my description, I know where my strength lies.

Everything I write begins as bare dialogue. I've always heard people talking in my head, having conversations. And wow. That doesn't sound right when I type it out, but there it is. LOL.

I do have a dialogue pet peeve when I'm reading, and that's characters not using contractions.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

99.99% of folks are boring or crazy as outhouse rats. Higgns said you gotta put it together so it makes sense where its s'posed to make sense, and funny where its s'posed to be funny.

 

[sr71plt]

Go admire my green E.

You keep bring up the nonexistent in all sorts of ways. Of course, you could go admire my 11 Green Es that actually exist and can be seen on my account list--since you brought it up.

The bottom line is that you don't really have much, if any, more writing experience than those you are trying to fool into thinking you're some sort of writing guru. Threads like this evidence that.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

You keep bring up the nonexistent in all sorts of ways. Of course, you could go admire my 11 Green Es that actually exist and can be seen on my account list--since you brought it up.

The bottom line is that you don't really have much, if any, more writing experience than those you are trying to fool into thinking you're some sort of writing guru. Threads like this evidence that.

You've been talking shit for 7 years, starting with the YOU NEVER WROTE NUTHIN nonsense. You don't impress me, youre mostly wrong, and you don't impress many (from what they tell me), so let FO guide you.

 

[sr71plt]

You've been talking shit for 7 years, starting with the YOU NEVER WROTE NUTHIN nonsense. You don't impress me, youre mostly wrong, and you don't impress many (from what they tell me), so let FO guide you.

Oh, dear. I spend most of my waking hours trying to impress you, James.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Oh, dear. I spend most of my waking hours trying to impress you, James.

I know, but its futile.

 

[sr71plt]

I know, just reading the advice of two print books is enough to muddle you on what to believe.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

I know, just reading the advice of two print books is enough to muddle you on what to believe.

Let it go before I pretend to be a proctologist and call you an asshole.

 

[sr71plt]

Let it go before I pretend to be a proctologist and call you an asshole.

And I should care whether you stay true to form or not?

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

And I should care whether you stay true to form or not?

I suspect LC hacked your nervous system and is at fault for the GIGO we're observing.

 

[patientlee]

You need lots more work, start with civil.

No, thank you.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

The next time you show up on my lawn I'm turning on the sprinkler.

 

[sr71plt]

I suspect LC hacked your nervous system and is at fault for the GIGO we're observing.

We? Would that be like in what Tonto said to the Lone Ranger when the Apaches were circling around: "What do you mean 'we,' white man?"? As usual, your wriggling around without anything to say has quickly reduced to irrelevancies.

 

[JKendallDane]

Sheesh!

The least you two could do is fill up the popcorn machine before you start one of these afternoon matinees.

Wouldn't hurt to run a special on the strings of red licorice too.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Sheesh!

The least you two could do is fill up the popcorn machine before you start one of these afternoon matinees.

Wouldn't hurt to run a special on the strings of red licorice too.

And you could stick a feather duster up your ass, and we'd all be tickled. Get off my lawn.

 

[Hypoxia]

Online arguments are like the Special Olympics: the winners are still retards.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Online arguments are like the Special Olympics: the winners are still retards.

Speaking of retards, pay a visit to your dictionary and see if theres a difference between argument and quarrel.