Let me have it!

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Let me have your feedback on my latest story. I think alot of horny housewives have this fantasy but I want to know what you think. Your feedback would be greatly appreciated.
Wicked




Seduction of a Repairman
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=59345



My other stories


One Night of Passion (At a hotel with someone you just met)
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=59095


Pleasures of the Flesh
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=56757


My First Taste of a Woman
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=58131

 

[kristydoll]

Hi...

Read your story and enjoyed the premise. You have good ideas and detail. My biggest criticism would be the length of the sentences. They tend to be very long and make quick reading difficult to do. Short sentences allow the reader to read at a quicker pace and stay involved in the story. Just my thoughts but good job!

kristy

Janice - Tasty Best Friend
http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=59191

Lesson Well Learned
http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=59188

 

[Wicked-N-Erotic]

Thank you so much for your thoughts. It really gives me something to think about on future stories. I tend to get lost in the writing and forget about what it would look like to the readers.
Thanks again
Wicked