Lesbian Love

[Fantasies_only]

Every time there's a lesbian sex scene, there is little to no motivation (as in relationship) behind it.
It would be nice for a change to get a double girl romance going before going straight into sex or foreplay (hopefully in a voyeur setting).
Will anyone write this in a future story for me?

 

[Carnevil9]

Why would you want fiction to be as tedious as reality?

 

[lipsofanangel]

Every time there's a lesbian sex scene, there is little to no motivation (as in relationship) behind it.
It would be nice for a change to get a double girl romance going before going straight into sex or foreplay (hopefully in a voyeur setting).
Will anyone write this in a future story for me?

I'm planning on writing a romantic story with a lesbian couple that have been together for awhile. It's actually my Valentine's Contest submission and I hopefully will have a good handle on it before the end of the night.

 

[Captain Midnight]

Go for it!

I'm planning on writing a romantic story with a lesbian couple that have been together for awhile. It's actually my Valentine's Contest submission and I hopefully will have a good handle on it before the end of the night.

I've tried to write FF sex scenes with couples a lot. Sometimes I write whole stories around FF couples, and often don't include any sex at all because the couple are called on (separately or together) to advise their friends on long-term relationships.

I think you'll turn out a beaut of a story.

 

[lipsofanangel]

I've tried to write FF sex scenes with couples a lot. Sometimes I write whole stories around FF couples, and often don't include any sex at all because the couple are called on (separately or together) to advise their friends on long-term relationships.

I think you'll turn out a beaut of a story.

Why thank you, doll. Here's hoping it actually turns out well!

 

[Fantasies_only]

I'm planning on writing a romantic story with a lesbian couple that have been together for awhile. It's actually my Valentine's Contest submission and I hopefully will have a good handle on it before the end of the night.

Great!
Looking forward to reading it.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Every time there's a lesbian sex scene, there is little to no motivation (as in relationship) behind it.
It would be nice for a change to get a double girl romance going before going straight into sex or foreplay (hopefully in a voyeur setting).
Will anyone write this in a future story for me?

Fantasies. . . I have a story called Rx:Love.

I think you may like it. It is about a divorced woman who falls in love with her female pharmacist. It starts out slow and I think it is very romantic.

 

[Fantasies_only]

Fantasies. . . I have a story called Rx:Love.

I think you may like it. It is about a divorced woman who falls in love with her female pharmacist. It starts out slow and I think it is very romantic.

I haven't read it all yet, but I do like where it's headed, and I love the fact you are establishing a relationship first before even talking about sex.

In the drug store, I was thinking they must be talking about sex toys, vibrators, or dildos.
I was happily surprised it was just hair dye.

Funny thing is I usually hate long intros, but for love it's a different story.
I'll get back to it a little later today.

I can't wait to see what happens.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

I haven't read it all yet, but I do like where it's headed, and I love the fact you are establishing a relationship first before even talking about sex.

In the drug store, I was thinking they must be talking about sex toys, vibrators, or dildos.
I was happily surprised it was just hair dye.

Funny thing is I usually hate long intros, but for love it's a different story.
I'll get back to it a little later today.

I can't wait to see what happens.

I'm glad you are enjoying it so far. It is a bit longer than some folks want to read, but when trying to make a story about more than a "fuck" session I find myself pouring in more emotion and bringing the couples a bit more substance.

I look forward to your comments.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

I think you'll turn out a beaut of a story.

Her other ones were sexy, so I can only imagine that a romantic tale would be a beauty.

 

[Fantasies_only]

I'm glad you are enjoying it so far. It is a bit longer than some folks want to read, but when trying to make a story about more than a "fuck" session I find myself pouring in more emotion and bringing the couples a bit more substance.

I look forward to your comments.

Amber chuckled, "Look, take care of the dog. I'll clean this up and don't bother getting dressed. It'll be easier to do your hair without worrying about getting coloring on your clothes. Is that robe okay to get dirty? I doubt we'll have to worry about it, but incase the coloring drops onto the material I'd hate to have something you like ruined."

Gee, I wonder what's going to happen now?

Ok, it's not what I thought which is just as good if not better.
I don't like realisim in erotica that much, but sometimes it makes it much better.

"I've been watching you. You're not seeing anyone. I think its time you realized you fucked up and you let me back in." His other hand came up to grab her chin and he held it firmly with his fingers. "You don't have to go and fuck girls. I'll take you back. It'll be good baby," he rubbed against her, his cock rising at the friction. "Hell, I may consider letting your new fuck buddy join us."

Beth's fingers curled into his shirt and she stared up at him. "Adam, let go of me and get out. You and I are so over. I don't want it to be like it was and if I were fucking Amber, as you seem to want to believe, I'd not share her with a man like you."

If I was a woman being stalked by my ex husband, I would not talk so calmly as indicated by periods instead of exclamation marks.

This is turning out more like a TV special.

 

[lipsofanangel]

Her other ones were sexy, so I can only imagine that a romantic tale would be a beauty.

Just for you!

 

[Fantasies_only]

Beth studied the woman in the mirror. She could see the difference in her hair and her face she barely recognized. "Wow." She reached out and touched her reflection, not quite trusting it was really her. "It's really me?" she asked, her fingers trembling as they came away from the glass and she caressed her face. "Amber, thank you so much."

This is another place I would put exclamation marks.
Beth is really excited to see her new look: "Wow!"
She appreciates it greatly for a not quite good friend to do this for her: "Amber, thank you so much!"
You could optionally use one with a question mark if the sentence calls for it: "It's really me?!"

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Ok, it's not what I thought which is just as good if not better.
I don't like realisim in erotica that much, but sometimes it makes it much better.

I enjoyed that surprising twist.

If I was a woman being stalked by my ex husband, I would not talk so calmly as indicated by periods instead of exclamation marks.

I saw this as more of a sarcastic conversation with him. . .flippant perhaps? But I can see where exclamation marks would add to this.

This is turning out more like a TV special.

Hmm. . .I like TV specials? Is this a good thing or bad?

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

This is another place I would put exclamation marks.
Beth is really excited to see her new look: "Wow!"
She appreciates it greatly for a not quite good friend to do this for her: "Amber, thank you so much!"
You could optionally use one with a question mark if the sentence calls for it: "It's really me?!"

I don't see an exclamation mark after "Wow." or the "It's really me?" They were "awe" moments, a quiet serene one where she was quietly stunned. . . sigh kinda wow.

The other: Amber, thank you so much!" - Yeah, I can see that.

 

[Fantasies_only]

Hmm. . .I like TV specials? Is this a good thing or bad?

Very good!

"That color compliments you very well."

"Gold usually works well on African-Americans. I love it," Amber grinned.

"I enjoy it on jewelry, does that count." Beth giggled and settled quietly into her seat. "I look forward to enjoying our night out."

This was probably an accident on the part of the editor you chose, but names and descriptions are being mixed up throughout the story.

Amber (the drugist) is black.
Bethany (formally married) has the home this was set in.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Very good!

Thanks very much.

This was probably an accident on the part of the editor you chose, but names and desciptions are being mixed up throughout the story.

Amber (the drugist) is black.
Bethany (formally married) has the home this was set in.

Hmmm...but Beth is giving Amber the compliment. Amber is telling her that it looks good on her and she loves it.

Beth is saying she likes it on jewelry, not clothing.

 

[Fantasies_only]

Confusing!
Whew! I'll have to read the rest tomorrow.
Sorry it took so long...
So long.

 

[RedHairedandFriendly]

Confusing!
Whew! I'll have to read the rest tomorrow.
Sorry it took so long...
So long.

No need to apologize, I appreciate you reading it and taking the time to point out some really good suggestions. Thanks.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Just for you!

Keep that up and I may join you and your girlfriend. But that's a different story, not two romantic lesbians.

 

[lipsofanangel]

Keep that up and I may join you and your girlfriend. But that's a different story, not two romantic lesbians.

You just made my morning.

Got just under 700 words in while I was on my lunch break at work yesterday. There's a lot going into the build-up of this story (and therefore it won't be so darn short).

There is a part 2 to Kismet's saga that's waiting to be approved as well. I couldn't just leave it hanging!

 

[Vail_Indigo]

All this is dead-on!

I agree with most of whats been said here.
I want the characters to be ready to die if they don't finally touch, and I want to feel the same
Fingers should twich,
knees go weak,
mouths water,
hearts race or stop

 

[AussieAngel]

you want build up..
you could use what has been happening between me and a friend over the last few months.. the tension is there... unbearable... everytime i see her i want her more and more..
its a pretty decent story. if i get my act together i might put it on paper and get someone to use it..

nothing sexual has even happened yet.. its all down to touching.. and snuggling.. and looks and hand holding..

i cant wait to see her again

 

[invisiblex1]

wow excellent

 

[lipsofanangel]

Great!
Looking forward to reading it.

Finally, finally, FINALLY have conquered the story and it is submitted. Here's hoping that it goes over as well to the general public as it did with my girlfriend.