Leaving a sex scene to the imagination?

[Rob_Royale]

On my latest project, I've created a setting for a sexual extravaganza. A type of dream sequence. Lots of characters and locations. I try to keep my stories at 20K words or less, with at least six sex scenes.

Now I intended to write a short descriptive piece with a cameo character and my imagination got the best of me and the cameo character became a sexual participant. So adding another sex scene, would be in between two rather major sex scenes and would sort of make the story crowded. If you understand my meaning. I plan the sex scenes carefully and allow time for the story to develop a bit, between them.

So do you think doing something like this might be okay? In an erotic story where you sort of expect to read each sex scene?

As Jessica bathed she let her mind wander and her hand drifted down to her pussy.
A knock on the door startled Jess from her reverie. "Yes? Who is it?"
From the door, Jessica heard Magda's sultry voice. "It's Magda. Can I come in?"
Without waiting for a response, Magda opened the door and poked her head in. "I've brought my dress and makeup case. I thought we could get ready for the party together?"
Jessica smiled wickedly. "Get in here."
Magda slid into the bathroom and shut the door as she began to unbutton her blouse.
Jessica sighed appreciatively. "Oh yes baby, come to Jessie."

Boom. Scene ends. The story picks up an hour later when Oscar comes to pick up Jessica for the party and finds he has two dates for the evening. In any other kind of fiction, this would be perfect. But in erotica? Thoughts, please?

 

[NotWise]

Boom. Scene ends. The story picks up an hour later when Oscar comes to pick up Jessica for the party and finds he has two dates for the evening. In any other kind of fiction, this would be perfect. But in erotica? Thoughts, please?

You can do anything you want.

I did something similar in "No Brand on My Pony," and that story only contains two sex scenes in something like 18K words. Then again, that story is in Romance. Then again, those sex scenes are long. Then again, maybe readers would have liked it even more if I included the third scene, but I'll never know.

 

[SimonDoom]

On my latest project, I've created a setting for a sexual extravaganza. A type of dream sequence. Lots of characters and locations. I try to keep my stories at 20K words or less, with at least six sex scenes.

Now I intended to write a short descriptive piece with a cameo character and my imagination got the best of me and the cameo character became a sexual participant. So adding another sex scene, would be in between two rather major sex scenes and would sort of make the story crowded. If you understand my meaning. I plan the sex scenes carefully and allow time for the story to develop a bit, between them.

So do you think doing something like this might be okay? In an erotic story where you sort of expect to read each sex scene?

As Jessica bathed she let her mind wander and her hand drifted down to her pussy.
A knock on the door startled Jess from her reverie. "Yes? Who is it?"
From the door, Jessica heard Magda's sultry voice. "It's Magda. Can I come in?"
Without waiting for a response, Magda opened the door and poked her head in. "I've brought my dress and makeup case. I thought we could get ready for the party together?"
Jessica smiled wickedly. "Get in here."
Magda slid into the bathroom and shut the door as she began to unbutton her blouse.
Jessica sighed appreciatively. "Oh yes baby, come to Jessie."

Boom. Scene ends. The story picks up an hour later when Oscar comes to pick up Jessica for the party and finds he has two dates for the evening. In any other kind of fiction, this would be perfect. But in erotica? Thoughts, please?

There's no need for every single sex scene to be drawn out. I think it's generally good to have a "climactic" sex scene near the end of the story, but before that you can do whatever ou want, and in many ways it's better to make sure the early sex scenes don't outweigh the last one.

 

[Voboy]

I've done this a million times. I'd listen to your instincts: if you don't need more sex, don't add more sex.

 

[Seadog777]

First of all.....IT'S YOUR DAMN STORY, do whatever you want with it.

Secondly, I think leaving things to the readers imagination, makes them more invested in the story. Even if they don't like it. LOL.

 

[Rob_Royale]

First of all.....IT'S YOUR DAMN STORY, do whatever you want with it.

Secondly, I think leaving things to the readers imagination, makes them more invested in the story. Even if they don't like it. LOL.

Of course. I just hate to leave a reader disappointed.

 

[Seadog777]

Of course. I just hate to leave a reader disappointed.

You're never going to please every reader, so the writing should always be pleasing to you.

 

[RejectReality]

Do those two characters have sex in the upcoming scenes? The main problem I can anticipate is if you tease it and then don't pay off them getting it on later. Otherwise, that's a reasonable fade-to-black transition setting up the next scene.

 

[JuanSeiszFitzHall]

It sounds like the rest of the story is a sexual banquet, so readers might not complain about the omission. I'd see this as an opportunity for the women, in the next scene, to share winsome looks, exchange comments that amuse them and confuse Oscar, and gradually, build up in the reader's mind what might actually have happened in the bathroom.

 

[Rob_Royale]

Do those two characters have sex in the upcoming scenes? The main problem I can anticipate is if you tease it and then don't pay off them getting it on later. Otherwise, that's a reasonable fade-to-black transition setting up the next scene.

Yes. The very next sex scene is the orgy after the party. I'm going for an epic Roman bath style sexual free for all. It will be a challenge to write. My first story in the third person as well.

 

[Cindy027]

Leaving a sex scene to the imagination​

It’s what my gf suggested I do.

 

[Rob_Royale]

Leaving a sex scene to the imagination​

It’s what my gf suggested I do.

Ouch. That is disheartening. My condolences.

 

[Rob_Royale]

A scene should always serve some narrative purpose.

Thank you. Excellent advice. I did end up leaving it at a closed door. The reader will have to imagine what happened in that bathtub.

After Jessica’s gear was set, she returned to her room and took a luxurious bath. The old claw-foot tubs were so big and deep. She relaxed in the bubbles and hot water. As Jessica thought about what the night could bring, her hand slipped down between her legs. Just before her fingers found their target, there was a knock on the front door.

“Who is it?”

Jess heard the front door of the suite open. “It is Magda.”

Jessica smiled. “Please come in. I’m in the bath.”

Jess heard Magda close the door and set something down. Magda popped her head around the door frame. “I have brought my dress and makeup. I thought maybe we could get ready for the party, together?”

Jessica shivered. “Oh, that’s a wonderful idea. Come ... join me,” Jess said breathlessly.

Magda stepped into the bathroom, in just a robe. With a wide smile, Magda let it slip to the floor revealing her round, womanly naked body. Jessica’s breath caught in her throat. Magda turned with a seductive smile and closed the bathroom door.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

The imagination is the ultimate sex organ.

Picture watching a glass shower stall. The water is running; the insides filled with steam, the glass walls covered with beaded water. One can see nothing inside; it’s a grey cube.

Suddenly a pair of hands appear pressed against the glass, high up and spread. The back of a head appears, hair flowing down. The hands disappear, to be replaced by a pair of buttocks pressed against the glass. They relax, are pressed against the glass harder, then less, then harder.

All one can see are relatively innocuous body parts, yet it it is clear than somebody is having great fun with someone… Imagination and solid writing would make it super hot.

 

[SimonDoom]

A scene should always serve some narrative purpose.

I agree, but a legitimate narrative purpose in an erotic story is getting the reader off.

I write sex stories, for the most part, rather than stories with sex. What I mean by that is that the essence of the story is a sexual experience. I start with the introduction of the characters and a sexual need or situation, then a buildup that usually involves obstacles and resistance, and a "climax" (in both senses) in which the obstacles are overcome and the desire is fulfilled. In most cases it wouldn't work if I skimped on the climactic sex scene. Earlier sex scenes can be given shorter treatment, but not, usually, the final scene. It just wouldn't be satisfying.

 

[PastMaster]

I have found that I get feedback that says there is too much sex in my stories - they get in the way of the plot - and of the same story there is not enough sex. so whatever you choose will be right for some and wrong for others.
Sometimes the fade to black - or camera panning to the roaring fire is the way to go, but it depends on the story - its your story you write it as you think it should be. there is no right or wrong in most cases.

 

[alohadave]

On my latest project, I've created a setting for a sexual extravaganza. A type of dream sequence. Lots of characters and locations. I try to keep my stories at 20K words or less, with at least six sex scenes.

Now I intended to write a short descriptive piece with a cameo character and my imagination got the best of me and the cameo character became a sexual participant. So adding another sex scene, would be in between two rather major sex scenes and would sort of make the story crowded. If you understand my meaning. I plan the sex scenes carefully and allow time for the story to develop a bit, between them.

So do you think doing something like this might be okay? In an erotic story where you sort of expect to read each sex scene?

As Jessica bathed she let her mind wander and her hand drifted down to her pussy.
A knock on the door startled Jess from her reverie. "Yes? Who is it?"
From the door, Jessica heard Magda's sultry voice. "It's Magda. Can I come in?"
Without waiting for a response, Magda opened the door and poked her head in. "I've brought my dress and makeup case. I thought we could get ready for the party together?"
Jessica smiled wickedly. "Get in here."
Magda slid into the bathroom and shut the door as she began to unbutton her blouse.
Jessica sighed appreciatively. "Oh yes baby, come to Jessie."

Boom. Scene ends. The story picks up an hour later when Oscar comes to pick up Jessica for the party and finds he has two dates for the evening. In any other kind of fiction, this would be perfect. But in erotica? Thoughts, please?

That works for me, if the story is more than stroke story. If the goal is to get off, detailed scenes.

If you deleted the scene and the story still works, then being non-descriptive is fine.

 

[Rob_Royale]

I have found that I get feedback that says there is too much sex in my stories - they get in the way of the plot - and of the same story there is not enough sex. so whatever you choose will be right for some and wrong for others.
Sometimes the fade to black - or camera panning to the roaring fire is the way to go, but it depends on the story - its your story you write it as you think it should be. there is no right or wrong in most cases.

That works for me, if the story is more than stroke story. If the goal is to get off, detailed scenes.

If you deleted the scene and the story still works, then being non-descriptive is fine.

Thanks, guys. The story is completed and posted. I did leave the fade to black in this case but I do imagine those two ladies together, frequently. Feel free to check it out if you'd like.
https://literotica.com/s/the-hedonism-house

 

[Djmac1031]

I have a long running series where the focus is, mostly, on exhibitionism and voyeurism.

The two main characters do also have sex, but I don't always feel the NEED to write their full on sex scene every time either.
In two different chapters, I wrote of scenarios where the female character was involved in some exhibition, showing off her body in front of others. Afterwards, I implied sex was pending between her and her boyfriend. But I didn't actually write those scenes.

Why? Because that wasn't integral to the story.

I suppose the reaction to your particular story will depend in reader expectations. If they were really hoping to read the juicy details between these two particular characters, you might wind up disappointing a few.

But that's a risk you as the author need to decide is worth taking or not.

Tell a good story. If the sex fits, write it. If you're only writing it because you think readers expect it, don't.

Write what works for YOUR story, not theirs.

 

[EmilyMiller]

On my latest project, I've created a setting for a sexual extravaganza. A type of dream sequence. Lots of characters and locations. I try to keep my stories at 20K words or less, with at least six sex scenes.

Now I intended to write a short descriptive piece with a cameo character and my imagination got the best of me and the cameo character became a sexual participant. So adding another sex scene, would be in between two rather major sex scenes and would sort of make the story crowded. If you understand my meaning. I plan the sex scenes carefully and allow time for the story to develop a bit, between them.

So do you think doing something like this might be okay? In an erotic story where you sort of expect to read each sex scene?

As Jessica bathed she let her mind wander and her hand drifted down to her pussy.
A knock on the door startled Jess from her reverie. "Yes? Who is it?"
From the door, Jessica heard Magda's sultry voice. "It's Magda. Can I come in?"
Without waiting for a response, Magda opened the door and poked her head in. "I've brought my dress and makeup case. I thought we could get ready for the party together?"
Jessica smiled wickedly. "Get in here."
Magda slid into the bathroom and shut the door as she began to unbutton her blouse.
Jessica sighed appreciatively. "Oh yes baby, come to Jessie."

Boom. Scene ends. The story picks up an hour later when Oscar comes to pick up Jessica for the party and finds he has two dates for the evening. In any other kind of fiction, this would be perfect. But in erotica? Thoughts, please?

I think I’m writing porn (not erotica) and so it makes sense to describe things most of the time.

I have an exception in Fishing Trip where I sort of sketch things out as I think I had already had more than enough girl on girl sex and it was time to move on to a threesome.

An hour and a half later, Amy and I pored over my 'phone screen, Messages open. The first 45 minutes had been sticky and satisfying, The second 45 minutes had involved a very pleasant communal shower and an inspired idea from Amy.

Em

 

[Rob_Royale]

I think I’m writing porn (not erotica) and so it makes sense to describe things most of the time.
Em

I know what you mean. I think my stories ride the fence between those as well. I'll be checking out your work.

 

[EmilyMiller]

I know what you mean. I think my stories ride the fence between those as well. I'll be checking out your work.

Tell me what you think. I have only been writing a few months.

Em

 

[YANKEE DAN]

I like little scenes that conjure the imagination, I think it is particularly good to have these early in the story and build up to the big explicit sex scenes. Especially things that happen just out of the characters sight, maybe on the other side of a door. If the main character is wondering what happens, then I will too.

 

[EmilyMiller]

I like little scenes that conjure the imagination, I think it is particularly good to have these early in the story and build up to the big explicit sex scenes. Especially things that happen just out of the characters sight, maybe on the other side of a door. If the main character is wondering what happens, then I will too.

That sounds way too grown up for me. My stuff tends to be lick, lick, suck, suck, fuck, fuck, cum .

Em

 

[Djmac1031]

That sounds way too grown up for me. My stuff tends to be lick, lick, suck, suck, fuck, fuck, cum .

Em

The good news is, there's an audience for both kinds of stories here. Sometimes it's even the same audience. Depends on a reader's mood and tastes on any given day.

As a reader myself, there are times I want a complicated, or at least fleshed out, realistic story.

Other times, fuck and suck do just fine.

So there's no reason both can't coexist nicely.