Keep getting rejected for punctuation errors

[macsporran]

And I can't see why !

Anyone willing to help me by looking and correcting my errors....HELP !!!

 

[sr71plt]

Provide two or three paragraphs here of dialogue and chances are good the issue can be seen. The U.S. and UK systems treat punctuation of dialogue differently and sometimes the Web site rejects what would be proper UK usage.

 

[may_I_please]

and I can't see why.

Anyone willing to help me by looking and correcting my errors? HELP!

I just corrected 3 punctuation errors in 2 lines, completely ignoring syntax.

 

[johnnieblue44]

I just corrected 3 punctuation errors in 2 lines, completely ignoring syntax.

That good deed deserves a reward, M_I_P.

Spread your legs...

 

[may_I_please]

That good deed deserves a reward, M_I_P.

Spread your legs...

<-- Anything you say baby

 

[johnnieblue44]

<-- Anything you say baby

I have a few strategically placed exclamation points designed to punctuate you. Then I plan to comma all over you.

 

[macsporran]

A few paragraphs from my story as requested...

"You can just tell," she replied..."plus I saw you in the Louvre and heard you asking for an English guide."

That's it!! I thought I could remember seeing her before, albeit briefly as I was going into the Louvre. I did think at the time she looked attractive, but that was it. So....what is she doing down here? "Oh yeah" I smiled "very good and observant of you. As you know the lie of the land, do you know the nearest place for a coffee...I'm parched?" I asked.

"Of course I do, I'm going there now ..do you want to come with me?". I joked about how could I possibly refuse and I followed her to a path at the side of the square bordering the gardens . The trees at this time of year were turning red and gold, the gardens looked stunning. Paris in autumn is amazing, and on a spectacular day like this it feels like paradise.

We walked to the pavement cafe about 300 yards away making small talk. I still hadn't found out why she was there and the Louvre but I wasn't complaining. I'd clocked a wedding ring and some nice jewellery ..she really was classy. She kept an amused look on her face as we spoke, and she gently probed on what I was doing in Paris. She was surprised to find I lived in the Montmartre and that kept us busy till we reached the cafe.

We ordered coffees, sat down outside. I reached for my cigarettes ...she looked and asked if she could have one. I offered her one and she asked me to light it for her. As I passed the lit cigarette to her, she ran her tongue round her lips to accept which I found amazingly sexy.This was one hot lady, where is this going?.....

We chatted for around 20 minutes, she was easy company. She had taken her coat off in the warm sun and revealed a nice red jumper which outlined her full figure. She kept looking at me with piercing blue eyes as we spoke, I was beginning to feel a stirring. I suppose we were gently flirting as she played with my lighter on the table with her long fingers and red nails. Our coffees were long finished, she looked at me and asked what my plans were for the rest of the day. I told her I was planning some lunch and more general sightseeing as I didn't get the chance very often. She then dropped the bombshell ..."Well,I have an apartment on the other side of the gardens.I have salad and nice ham,I'm sure I could rustle up something you'd like."

 

[may_I_please]

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[jaF0]

Well, aside from the obvious spacing before and/or after commas and periods, I see periods outside quotes after question marks.

 

[macsporran]

Thanks

For the feedback, there is clearly a lot of work to be done ...this being a relatively small sample of my story.

Can anyone recommend an editor who can look at the story in full and help make it passable for publication?

Thanks for your help

 

[sr71plt]

Yes, a significant number of punctuation errors going on:

"You can just tell," she replied..."plus[replied. "Plus] I saw you in the Louvre and heard you asking for an English guide."

That's it!! I thought I could remember seeing her before, albeit briefly as I was going into the Louvre. I did think at the time she looked attractive, but that was it. So....what is she doing down here? "Oh yeah[comma]" I smiled "very[smiled. "Very] good and observant of you. As you know the lie of the land, do you know the nearest place for a coffee...I'm parched?" I asked.[place for coffee?" I asked. "I'm parched."]

"Of course I do,[period, not comma] I'm going there now ..do[now. Do] you want to come with me?".[delete extraneous period] I joked about how could I possibly refuse and I followed her to a path at the side of the square bordering the gardens .[no space before punctuation] The trees at this time of year were turning red and gold,[comma improper. Semicolon or two separate sentences] the gardens looked stunning. Paris in autumn is amazing, and on a spectacular day like this it feels like paradise.

 

[macsporran]

Thanks for that

I've implemented the changes you have suggested.

My story is around 3500 words, can you recommend an editor for me?

 

[sr71plt]

3,500 words isn't so long, so someone might come along shortly to help. Alas, not me, though, I'm up to my neck in deadline writing.

 

[macsporran]

Editing

Ok cheers, thanks for your help.

Anyone out there help me?

 

[jaF0]

Ok cheers, thanks for your help.

Anyone out there help me?

In the nearly 48 hours since you started this thread, you could have taken the opportunity to learn how to write things out properly.