I've never written a comic one before...

[p_p_man]

...what do you think?

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=12243

 

[Ulyssa]

Hero

You have mail.

 

[Merelan]

Hahaha... You got me. I didn't get it till the end. Lewis Carrol would have been proud of you boy.
Excellent.

 

[Adrian_Osterman]

Interesting idea, but I found that the nature of the personalised nature of storytelling--like you were telling the story to a friend in a pub or something--was a distraction and caused detachment between me and what was going on in the story. I think a straight third person telling would have better served your purposes.

 

[JUDO]

Prequel?

Loved it. I really enjoyed the way everything came together resolving more issues than I realized were available at the end.

- Judo