eroticstoryspinner
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I have a statement that a judge made in a sentencing hearing that I really want to use in a story. In a lot of ways its a generic statement that a lot of judges make in sentencing hearings. The passage is as follows: “Here you are an admired, successful, professional actor with a long-lasting marriage, two apparently healthy, resilient children, more money than you could possibly need, living in sunny Southern California – a fairy tale life. Yet you stand before me a convicted felon. And for what? For the inexplicable desire to grasp even more. To have whatever prestige and instant gratification that comes from being able to show off the admission of your daughters to a preferred university."
I modified it slightly but it is pretty much word for word. At the same time in the story it is the statement of the fictional sentencing judge. I think why I am struggling with this is that I have heard a lot of judges use almost identical language in sentencing hearings. I have thought about changing the wording more to avoid the 5 word rule.
I modified it slightly but it is pretty much word for word. At the same time in the story it is the statement of the fictional sentencing judge. I think why I am struggling with this is that I have heard a lot of judges use almost identical language in sentencing hearings. I have thought about changing the wording more to avoid the 5 word rule.