Incest Urges of a Nymphomaniac

[Carl East]

I've just writen twenty-five of this series, and number one came out yesterday. Let me know what you think, and whether or not it's worth continuing.

Personally I find this category (Incest) quite erotic, even though I haven't got any true life experiences to draw upon. I suppose it's the forbidden fruit type scenario, that gets the old imagination going.

Thank you for any feedback, even negative.

Carl

 

[uh-huh]

Hi Carl, not sure which story you're referring to but I just read My Little Girl Ch. 2. I liked it. I'm not a writer but an illustrator so I may not know what I'm talking about here but I'd like to get a better feeling as to what they're feeling in the story. You're good with the facts and painting the picture but I didn't get the sense of the heat of what was happening as much as I would have liked. Not sure how to do that.

Hope that's of some help. I noticed on these boards there are a lot of writers asking for comments but they don't seem to be giving others comment so much. But I'm just a newbie here and it's a first impression.

 

[Carl East]

Hope that's of some help. I noticed on these boards there are a lot of writers asking for comments but they don't seem to be giving others comment so much. But I'm just a newbie here and it's a first impression.

I bought that story to an end, because I didn't like the way it was going. I'm glad you enjoyed it though.

As for not checking out other stories, for me there's a very good reason, I simply don't read anymore. There was a time I could read a fair sized book in a day, but the appeal of reading has died in me. I have no reason why, I think it maybe that I prefer to write.

Thx for the input.

Carl

 

[PorscheLynn]

I read one through three, the ones that were posted at the time I read them. But then I got all distracted and didn't leave feedback for ya. My comments may be coloured somewhat by the fact that I don't usually read incest stories, so don't think me harsh. I'm just giving my impressions.

First, I think uh-huh was right on target that you're good at painting the picture, setting the scene and so forth, but you falter a bit with conveying the heat of the sexual encounters. I think a bit more detail might help with that. That, and all the boys seem to be rather.. quick to finish. So there is little time to convey the heat. Which is fine. Especially in the context of the story, the encounters need to be brief. This doesn't mean that the description of them has to be though. Your dialogue is quite good, definitely captures the feel of banter between horny young men. Trying to convey more of a sense of guilt, and double guilt for not wanting to feel guilty at all, would be helpful. I absolutely love your concept for the story, the idea that something strange happened to her when she hit her head. This kept me very engaged, eager to find out what was going on, and what weird thing she would do next.

Again, sorry if I sound pretentious, it's not meant that way. It's not as if I have any stories of my own up yet. I just thought I'd offer my take on it. Basically, I think it's really great, just that old adage of "show, don't tell" is something to consider, especially with regard to the emotion in a scene or story.

 

[Lady Godavino]

 

[MagicFingers]

Nymph

I bought that story to an end, because I didn't like the way it was going. I'm glad you enjoyed it though.

As for not checking out other stories, for me there's a very good reason, I simply don't read anymore. There was a time I could read a fair sized book in a day, but the appeal of reading has died in me. I have no reason why, I think it maybe that I prefer to write.

Thx for the input.

Carl

So you won't read MY story, but want me to review YOUR story?
Reminds me of the TV actress who NEVER watches TV, or the Movie actor who NEVER goes to the movies. Why should I go see their movies or watch their shows when they don't even?
And why should I read your story when you won't read mine?

I don't mean this to be an attack. I just think you should not have said that, even though it may be brutally honest.

And I AM interested in reading your story. It is similar to the one I have going right now, and just released part 2. That is, an accident causes someone to become more sexual and incestous. I like that premise.

And, tell us the title or provide a link.

 

[Carl East]

Re: Nymph

So you won't read MY story, but want me to review YOUR story?
Reminds me of the TV actress who NEVER watches TV, or the Movie actor who NEVER goes to the movies. Why should I go see their movies or watch their shows when they don't even?
And why should I read your story when you won't read mine?

I don't mean this to be an attack. I just think you should not have said that, even though it may be brutally honest.

Where in this thread did I say you HAVE to read my stories, just because I don't read much anymore a lot of you do. And if I can't be honest I'd rather not exist.

Carl

 

[hiddenself]

+1 for being honest.
-1 for inflated ego and selfishness.
It's all a wash in the end.