Incest -need guidance/editor

[litmlove]

Hello

After accepting all the criticism of my first story, which was a very minor success, I have written the second chapter of my brother/sister incest story. It is 11.5k words written in the first person - past tense.

Punctuation and spelling is not the issue, I want guidance on:

- does it flow as a story?
- is it erotic?
- what do you like?
- what do you hate?

I am happy to cut out anything or add scenes that are needed. I already know of some scenes I might need to be develop with thoughts and senses (taste, touch, hearing, ...)


Regards,
M Love.

 

[ThatEditorGuy]

editing

i have read the first story on lit, and i would love to see how the characters develop!! i must admit, i am mainly a spelling/punctuation/grammar editor, but i'll have a look at the plot and gernal erotic-ness of the novel too

 

[Hypoxia]

Suggestion: Post a link here to the first story so interested parties can slurp it up. And add a link in your .sig to your submissions page, so all your postings become accessible. How to do this: At the top-left of this page is a USER CP link. Click that, then click on EDIT SIGNATURE, and paste-in your submissions-page address. Cheers!

 

[litmlove]

Thank you for your offer ThatEditorGuy, but I have found someone to help me.

Ok Hypoxia, I will - Although I don't feel like boasting about my writing oeuvre yet.

Is it possible you can delete your own thread once the thread has served its purpose?

 

[Hypoxia]

Ok Hypoxia, I will - Although I don't feel like boasting about my writing oeuvre yet.

Not as much boasting as access. If we can't easily find your stuff, we won't read it.

Is it possible you can delete your own thread once the thread has served its purpose?

No. You are now part of the permanent record.