I'm stuck with my story and need help.....
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Colleen Thomas
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sugarfoot said:
A lot depends on the story POV. Are you writing from first person? Or is it narrative? What are you shooting for, a descritption of the mechanics or a description of how it feels? I only write F/F, so i have writtena lot of oral scenes
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John, come to the bedroom, I want to show you something.
What is it honey? John asked.
I was sitting on the edge of the bed in my nightshirt. I placed on foot on the bed and spread my legs. John's eyes widened as he realized I wasn't wearing any panties. I was also very wet.
My tamale is hot, I said. What are you going to do about it?
He started undoing his belt.
No, I said, tossing a pillow to the floor between my knees. I want you down there. I want you to eat my hot tamale like a hungry mexican.
What is it honey? John asked.
I was sitting on the edge of the bed in my nightshirt. I placed on foot on the bed and spread my legs. John's eyes widened as he realized I wasn't wearing any panties. I was also very wet.
My tamale is hot, I said. What are you going to do about it?
He started undoing his belt.
No, I said, tossing a pillow to the floor between my knees. I want you down there. I want you to eat my hot tamale like a hungry mexican.
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K, sounds first person. I don't ever write first person, cause I suck at it.
In base terms, hot for me is more about how it feels & what's going through your head than how it's done.
Wish I could help more, but my first person attempts have been pathetic at best.
-Colly
In base terms, hot for me is more about how it feels & what's going through your head than how it's done.
Wish I could help more, but my first person attempts have been pathetic at best.
-Colly
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Re: Re: I'm stuck with my story and need help.....
It sounds to me like maybe you might follow the old rule about, "the best visual effects are on the radio!"
In other words, suggestion - so that readers can create the scene in their own minds - might do what you want better than graphic details.
No claims about how well I did it, but look at my post at https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=285731 (currently at the end).
What I was trying to do was to mention a few key points, but leave the details to the reader's imagination.
Of course, Vella's challenge gave a particular context to that, while your own story could well be very different.
My own theory is that there's a balance to be found between length and suggestion - if you're writing a 'stroke' piece (expecting the reader to masturbate and climax) then too few words means too little time to get it off: you want your reader and the story to climax at the same time. Where does this segment come within the whole story?
Like Colly said, it may well help to decide exactly what you want to achieve before you try do do it.
Hope that helps,
Eff
What Colly said...Colleen Thomas said:A lot depends on the story POV. Are you writing from first person? Or is it narrative? What are you shooting for, a descritption of the mechanics or a description of how it feels? I only write F/F, so i have writtena lot of oral scenes
It sounds to me like maybe you might follow the old rule about, "the best visual effects are on the radio!"
In other words, suggestion - so that readers can create the scene in their own minds - might do what you want better than graphic details.
No claims about how well I did it, but look at my post at https://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?s=&threadid=285731 (currently at the end).
What I was trying to do was to mention a few key points, but leave the details to the reader's imagination.
Of course, Vella's challenge gave a particular context to that, while your own story could well be very different.
My own theory is that there's a balance to be found between length and suggestion - if you're writing a 'stroke' piece (expecting the reader to masturbate and climax) then too few words means too little time to get it off: you want your reader and the story to climax at the same time. Where does this segment come within the whole story?
Like Colly said, it may well help to decide exactly what you want to achieve before you try do do it.
Hope that helps,
Eff
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I think you may need some more research. If you are willing to put in the added hours of background research, then you should probably enlist the services of your husband to help you in your efforts. With enough researching in this field, I am sure that you will be able to come up with appropriate wording.sugarfoot said:
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