I'm plugging my first story, what else?

[DrEction]

Hey everyone, I'm pretty new to site(as an active member, I've read the stories off and on for a couple years now), and I finally decided to write a story of my own. As you may have guessed, I'm hoping to get some feedback from anyone who has the time. It's called "Stepsucker", and is an Incest/Taboo story about a guy who receives his first blowjob from his older stepsister who he's had a crush on since childhood. Like I said, if you have the time, I would really appreciate for anyone interested to check it out. I'll try to put the link below(I'm bad with computer stuff, so I hope it works).

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=271486

 

[Flashlight7.5]

Good work

You build the story well. It's nice to read a story that has a good build-up to the sex.

However, while I appreciate the flashback after the first paragraph and how it fills in the backstory, the "I should bring this back to the beginning" sentence fell like an anvil in the middle of the story. It interrupted the flow of the story. I know you had to bring it back to the narrative, but it was an awkward transition.