DarkPhantomLynx
Really Really Experienced
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- Jun 8, 2007
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Wolfsister said:Heyya Phantom *waves*
I just read your latest post and I like it, though I have something to point out.
Strictly speaking, you god-modded in that post. The writing of another person's character or reactions of or effects made on another character is essentially god modding.
For instance: When you wrote that you picked up a log and threw it at Rylia (this part is okay) but then you wrote that you actually hit Rylia (which isn't). It would be my turn to post a reaction to this, thus bad things can't happen to characters unless their players want them to happen.
A suggestion would be:
Kat watched the Dryder, aware that the other could be far more dangerous than she seemed, but her words boiled her blood and make her shake with anger. She suddenly lashed out, her power picking up the log that lay previously discarded and with a growl she threw it towards Rylia. She waited for a result. If the Dryder was quick enough, she would dodge the log, if not it would likely knock her over. If it did knock her off her legs, then Kat would suddenly rush towards her and ask if she was alright, concern written on her features as plain as day.
She then.... (insert rest of post)
This gives me a chance, in the middle of your post, to post a reaction. I could either take the route that I dodged, and therefore continue on with the rest of the post, or that it hit her and then acknowledge Kat's concern. But it would be up to me.
For this post, I'll make an exception seeing as I would probably have let the log hit Rylia anyway, but I would like not to see it happen again in further posts please.
(don't worry if you make a mistake and accidently do it again. I won't yell at you. I'll just point it out and you can edit)
I promise I won't get mad.
Wolfy's honor!![]()
Ah thank ya WS,,and am sorry wasnt thinking ,,ill fix that here in a bit,,

