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Hi, I am not a native speaker of English language, but recently a friend asked me to help him write a letter of recommendation for his study in a US college, so I worried my head very much and got the following which might look like a joke in your eyes. Would you help give some feedback(comment, critique or your reaction if you are the enrolment officer of that college), or preferably revise it if possible, thank you very much in advance.
The letter:
Dear Sir:
So-and-so struck me as an enthusiastic and intelligent architect with keen sense of innovation and strong ability of effective solution during his internship in 20XX under my guidance in the Africa-based residential project. He was expected to gain experience in façade design, joint structure design and preparation of drawing. Aiming higher than the specification given, he kept improving the façade design by paying attention to details. For example, he achieved the balance of sunlight and sunscreen taking into account the wall-window ratio and the overhanging eave’s distance; he managed to coordinate the relation of building and environment by adopting appropriate finishing material. With works assigned to him completed on time, he also came up with new ideas to upgrade the design. For example, he proposed to use the local clay for wall material and made comparison of various building materials in terms of cost, heat insulation and other properties to produce the desirable effect. His problem-solving ability was fully displayed in the project, where coordination of indoor environment and the hot and dry weather was one of the challenges. Based on the careful research he conducted, he then proposed to modify the existing vent on the wall that was the usual practice of local residents. His proposal was not only good for preserving the characteristics of local residence but also instrumental in integrating the building into the environment.
Being a hard-working team player, he did not cease his efforts in learning from work. No fellow project workers had made complaints about his performance in public or in private. I shared with him a great deal of technical viewpoints and professional experience when consulted frequently. As a result, he made great contributions to progress of the project.
I highly recommend him to be included in your institute for further study.
The letter:
Dear Sir:
So-and-so struck me as an enthusiastic and intelligent architect with keen sense of innovation and strong ability of effective solution during his internship in 20XX under my guidance in the Africa-based residential project. He was expected to gain experience in façade design, joint structure design and preparation of drawing. Aiming higher than the specification given, he kept improving the façade design by paying attention to details. For example, he achieved the balance of sunlight and sunscreen taking into account the wall-window ratio and the overhanging eave’s distance; he managed to coordinate the relation of building and environment by adopting appropriate finishing material. With works assigned to him completed on time, he also came up with new ideas to upgrade the design. For example, he proposed to use the local clay for wall material and made comparison of various building materials in terms of cost, heat insulation and other properties to produce the desirable effect. His problem-solving ability was fully displayed in the project, where coordination of indoor environment and the hot and dry weather was one of the challenges. Based on the careful research he conducted, he then proposed to modify the existing vent on the wall that was the usual practice of local residents. His proposal was not only good for preserving the characteristics of local residence but also instrumental in integrating the building into the environment.
Being a hard-working team player, he did not cease his efforts in learning from work. No fellow project workers had made complaints about his performance in public or in private. I shared with him a great deal of technical viewpoints and professional experience when consulted frequently. As a result, he made great contributions to progress of the project.
I highly recommend him to be included in your institute for further study.