I wrote something weird

[MrHackerMan]

But strangely I'm a bit proud of it. This is only my second attempt at creative writing. You can see my first attempt on my profile. It didn't go so well. It would be nice to get a little feedback on where to improve.

https://www.literotica.com/beta/s/large-penis-humiliation

 

[ElectricBlue]

That was a fun twist, turning a trope on its head like that. Light hearted and an easy read, with a nice breezy style. Technically competent too, which makes a change.

Most people won't get it, but you probably know that already. You'll get more la la comments, I reckon, which will be good for a laugh.

 

[yukonnights]

I don't think you wrote something weird — I think you wrote something unique and that makes it great. Not only unique, but very well edited and crafted. Satire/Humor may have been a better category, if anything that might dampen the rating and prompt some negative comments. Kudos from me.

 

[Abbafan]

4.19 is where its at now. that's not so bad.

It's unconventional. So many stories kind of portray being bigger as the ideal, so maybe seeing their expectations reversed bothered some readers.