I would love input on my first story

[bgb]

This is my first submission and I was wondering if I should keep writing or not? Any comments or criticism is welcome. Thanks.

bgb

Letter To My Lover
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=40890

 

[CarolineOh]

Of course you should keep writing!
Personally, I think you ought to try something from a third person perspective. The format you used, of a person talking to their lover, is nice, but limiting. But I think it is a respectable first try. I would encourage you to give us more