I would like your feedback please

[Guest]

Please offer up any comments you might have on this one.

Thanks for taking the time to read it.

Jmt

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=84151

 

[English Lady]

overall a good, well written story.

i noticed one typo, begging instead of beginning but otherwise the spelling and grammar were good.

It was easy to read even though it was obviously part of a series, and some of the references to earlier chapters confused me but then i guess you're meant to read it in order


I thoughtit was a good story, not my usual cup of tea but good all the same!


Hope my comments have helped