I received some good advice. . .

[shawnkeith]

from Josh Griefer, Killer Muffin, and kristydoll. So. . . I edited my stories, removed many "she thought"s and axed a few black dildoes (josh's recommendation), limited POVs to one per paragraph, and by and large improved my stories and my writing. So thanks, you three, I appreciate your contribution to my writing. I am still open to further FB regarding the stories and my writing. I am also open to FB from fresh eyes.

Yours truly,

sk

 

[Couture]

You can also remove every little bit of soul from your story by trying to please *everyone*.

I'm not saying the advice you received wasn't good, but like strong liquer, it is best taken in small sips. And you can definitely drink too much of it.

 

[shawnkeith]

I am assuming you read the stories before, because you responded to my first post, and now again, notice the difference? I sure did.

For me, it was not too much of a good thing. Their advice did not change my writing, it enhanced it. So having read before and after, what differences did you notice?

sk