I Never Thought

[José Tomas]

I haven't known you very long
but that's not the way I feel;
I've told you all about me
I have nothing to conceal.
What I say may sound silly now
but you'll find it to be true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.
You are my new beginning,
you're the door to life beyond;
you're all that I could ever want
or ever need to carry on.
You're the future I have dreamed of,
you're a new and brighter day;
with you, there is no looking back,
the past can fade away.
Though I haven't known you very long
you'll find all I've said is true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.

Btw, I'm new here.
Hello all.

 

[Guest]

Welcome to Lit! Are you looking for constructive criticism on your poem or just wanting to share with us?

I'm going to pretend the poem is written for me, okay? It is beautiful.

 

[The Poets]

Hi
Your poem was moved from the poetry discussion circle forum to the poetry feedback & discussion forum. Yeah, it's confusing. If you'd like your poem on the other forum, please add it first to the poetry discussion queue If not, you'll get lots of great feedback here.

 

[José Tomas]

Welcome to Lit! Are you looking for constructive criticism on your poem or just wanting to share with us?

I'm going to pretend the poem is written for me, okay? It is beautiful.

Thanks. Not many appreciate my writtings for some reason. Soemthign about, 'alterior motives'...

 

[wildsweetone]

hi Jose Tomas and welcome to Litland.

i like this line

'you're a new and brighter day;'

 

[Guest]

Thanks. Not many appreciate my writtings for some reason. Soemthign about, 'alterior motives'...

Thing that make ya go hmmm...


Anyway, do you mind if I offer any advice on your poem?

 

[José Tomas]

Thing that make ya go hmmm...


Anyway, do you mind if I offer any advice on your poem?

Sure.

 

[champagne1982]

I haven't known you very long
but that's not the way I feel;
I've told you all about me
I have nothing to conceal.
What I say may sound silly now
but you'll find it to be true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.
You are my new beginning,
you're the door to life beyond;
you're all that I could ever want
or ever need to carry on.
You're the future I have dreamed of,
you're a new and brighter day;
with you, there is no looking back,
the past can fade away.
Though I haven't known you very long
you'll find all I've said is true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.

Btw, I'm new here.
Hello all.

I NEVER THOUGHT

Author: William Thomas Kinsey

I haven't known you very long
but that's not the way I feel;
I've told you all about me
I have nothing to conceal.

What I say may sound silly now
but you'll find it to be true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.

You are my new beginning,
you're the door to life beyond;
you're all that I could ever want
or ever need to carry on.

You're the future I have dreamed of,
you're a new and brighter day;
with you, there is no looking back,
the past can fade away.

Though I haven't known you very long
you'll find all I've said is true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.

______________________________________________________________

Is your name William Kinsey? He has a few more poems published.

 

[TheRainMan]

Oh, Jesus...here we go again.

...say it ain't so, Joe ...ummm ...José.

 

[Guest]

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[Guest]

Jesus fucking Christ! I was fooled?! I didn't know. You rotten son of a bitch! What a waste of time!

It still needs better punctuation.

 

[TheRainMan]

Jesus fucking Christ! I was fooled?! I didn't know. You rotten son of a bitch! What a waste of time!

LOL .... sorry.

It's a sad and beautiful world, ain't it.

 

[wildsweetone]

I NEVER THOUGHT

Author: William Thomas Kinsey

I haven't known you very long
but that's not the way I feel;
I've told you all about me
I have nothing to conceal.

What I say may sound silly now
but you'll find it to be true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.

You are my new beginning,
you're the door to life beyond;
you're all that I could ever want
or ever need to carry on.

You're the future I have dreamed of,
you're a new and brighter day;
with you, there is no looking back,
the past can fade away.

Though I haven't known you very long
you'll find all I've said is true;
I never thought that when we met
I would fall in love with you.

______________________________________________________________

Is your name William Kinsey? He has a few more poems published.

okay that does it. i've had enough of this stuff. it was bad enough that i'm too chicken to check out the new poems.

thanks Carrie.

 

[Guest]

LOL .... sorry.

It's a sad and beautiful world, ain't it.

I was just trying to PM you to ask if it was stolen, but realized my box is full with outgoing messages. So, this poem is someone else's work?

 

[TheRainMan]

okay that does it. i've had enough of this stuff.

putting your foot down, eh?

...what's next? ...chewing gum in class?

 

[wildsweetone]

be careful.


i don't chew, gum.

 

[TheRainMan]

I was just trying to PM you to ask if it was stolen, but realized my box is full with outgoing messages. So, this poem is someone else's work?

it would appear that way, unless ol' Jose is really William Kinsey.

what odds of that will you give me? i'm in a gambling mood.

 

[TheRainMan]

be careful.


i don't chew, gum.

you use of commas has improved, tremendously.

 

[Guest]

Okay, what a stupid question. Sorry, TRM. This person needs a boot up his ass, and I need to go outside for a cigarette. I cannot believe I was SO stupid!

 

[wildsweetone]

you use of commas has improved, tremendously.

that did not soften me up.

 

[Guest]

it would appear that way, unless ol' Jose is really William Kinsey.

what odds of that will you give me? i'm in a gambling mood.

It won't be one cigarette. It'll be three. I wanna smoke him, I wanna smoke him! Just damn...

 

[The_Fool]

that did not soften me up.

That would require tactile manipulation of muscles, probably starting with those in your shoulders and back.

 

[wildsweetone]

that'd work?

 

[The_Fool]

that'd work?

Tangible possibility.

 

[wildsweetone]

will thinking about it, work?