I need more feedback
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litchipking
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Read a story
Hey rckplsky,
I was glad to take a look at one of your stories. I picked "Pegging Party" since you claimed it as one of your best. Here is what I thought:
You definitely have an audience. I think one of the most important things you did was to be true to your loyal readers. The comments that you received on the public post were all fans of your work and sound like they can't wait for story number twenty-one.
The two things that distracted me from the story were the numerous grammatical and spelling errors and the speech tags.
A good editor can easily help catch the careless errors that we all make when we write. It's often difficult to see our own mistakes because our mind simply reads what we meant to write instead of what we actually did.
The speech tags were very cumbersome. I'm not one to say that you shouldn't use tags at all (although in my last story I did try to eliminate most of them) I do think that you overused them in this story. You might want to refer to some of the Writer's Resources on the site.
Overall - your story is not my type but that doesn't make it bad. Keep writing for your readers. It sounds like they can't wait to read your next installment.
Good Luck,
Chip
Hey rckplsky,
I was glad to take a look at one of your stories. I picked "Pegging Party" since you claimed it as one of your best. Here is what I thought:
You definitely have an audience. I think one of the most important things you did was to be true to your loyal readers. The comments that you received on the public post were all fans of your work and sound like they can't wait for story number twenty-one.
The two things that distracted me from the story were the numerous grammatical and spelling errors and the speech tags.
A good editor can easily help catch the careless errors that we all make when we write. It's often difficult to see our own mistakes because our mind simply reads what we meant to write instead of what we actually did.
The speech tags were very cumbersome. I'm not one to say that you shouldn't use tags at all (although in my last story I did try to eliminate most of them) I do think that you overused them in this story. You might want to refer to some of the Writer's Resources on the site.
Overall - your story is not my type but that doesn't make it bad. Keep writing for your readers. It sounds like they can't wait to read your next installment.
Good Luck,
Chip
PrincessErin
Literotica Guru
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I read your story "Miscarriage" and knew there was a problem when the title wasn't even spelt correctly. I think you have good ideas but you jump around too much. There isn't alot of hot sex in the story and you need to figure out what sort of audience you're looking for. If you wanted to appeal to the pregnancy fetish people, this story didn't do it.
Sorry for the harsh comments but you did ask.
Erin
Sorry for the harsh comments but you did ask.
Erin
