i lost my virginity!!

[kaboom3d]

i lost my virginity!!

sometime last night i lost my virginity
it seemed to happen without a notice
was i wrong to expect more?

poor, poor, sally..
holding my head, i cry for my lost innocence.
and i had such dreams, desires, hopes
now its gone
i imagined in my walter mitty's that it would be taken by a hoard of amazon warriors
or a dashing don jaun
poor, poor, sally
lost in the wires, t-5 cables, blue tooth magic, cyber never land

experienced the title reads
like yea right
i'm experienced?
poor, poor, sally

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i'm not a poet. i was planning to post this on the general board. but it seem out of place. it wasn't even going to be a poem, it just turned out that way.
it scares me to put post here with all the talent in the room.

please take this for what it is, just sally trying to be funny

 

[annaswirls]

Hi Sally! Welcome to the poetry forum! Thanks for sharing this. Are you looking for poetic suggestions or people to share their critiques? Sometimes it is just nice to put things out there for others to read.

I have no idea what walter mitty's is but I LOVE the sound it makes in this line:

i imagined in my walter mitty's that it would be taken by a hoard of amazon warriors...

lost in the wires, t-5 cables, blue tooth magic, cyber never land

I loved these parts: First line, what an image, the next, the sound of blue tooth magic is awesome.

i lost my virginity!!

sometime last night i lost my virginity
it seemed to happen without a notice
was i wrong to expect more?

poor, poor, sally..
holding my head, i cry for my lost innocence.
and i had such dreams, desires, hopes
now its gone
i imagined in my walter mitty's that it would be taken by a hoard of amazon warriors
or a dashing don jaun
poor, poor, sally
lost in the wires, t-5 cables, blue tooth magic, cyber never land

experienced the title reads
like yea right
i'm experienced?
poor, poor, sally

--------
i'm not a poet. i was planning to post this on the general board. but it seem out of place. it wasn't even going to be a poem, it just turned out that way.
it scares me to put post here with all the talent in the room.

please take this for what it is, just sally trying to be funny

 

[vampiredust]

walter mitty-> another word for a daydreamer (from The Secret Life Of Walter Mitty by James Thurber)

 

[kaboom3d]

Hi Sally! Welcome to the poetry forum! Thanks for sharing this. Are you looking for poetic suggestions or people to share their critiques? Sometimes it is just nice to put things out there for others to read.

I have no idea what walter mitty's is but I LOVE the sound it makes in this line:

i imagined in my walter mitty's that it would be taken by a hoard of amazon warriors...

lost in the wires, t-5 cables, blue tooth magic, cyber never land

I loved these parts: First line, what an image, the next, the sound of blue tooth magic is awesome.

thank you for your kind words..
i was worried, heck i still am, about how it would be received.
and you know it was just so much fun to write.
you are sweet..

 

[fire child]

i lost my virginity!!

sometime last night i lost my virginity
it seemed to happen without a notice
was i wrong to expect more?

poor, poor, sally..
holding my head, i cry for my lost innocence.
and i had such dreams, desires, hopes
now its gone
i imagined in my walter mitty's that it would be taken by a hoard of amazon warriors
or a dashing don jaun
poor, poor, sally
lost in the wires, t-5 cables, blue tooth magic, cyber never land

experienced the title reads
like yea right
i'm experienced?
poor, poor, sally

--------
i'm not a poet. i was planning to post this on the general board. but it seem out of place. it wasn't even going to be a poem, it just turned out that way.
it scares me to put post here with all the talent in the room.

please take this for what it is, just sally trying to be funny

I still remember clearly the night mine disappeared...and everyone was so patiently congratulatory as I cheered myself on. (I can't spell.) WTG. and may all the experience you recieve be a pleasant and learning process. *kotc*


great poem too, btw.

 

[kaboom3d]

I still remember clearly the night mine disappeared...and everyone was so patiently congratulatory as I cheered myself on. (I can't spell.) WTG. and may all the experience you recieve be a pleasant and learning process. *kotc*


great poem too, btw.

thank you..
and i worried.. silly me
everyone here is so nice.... ;-)