i just wrote my first story its a loving wife story pm me to read it i need feedba

[dreamsreal]

i just wrote my first story its a loving wife story pm me to read it i need feedback

 

[driphoney]

In your story, did you use any punctuation?

 

[Trudy_Antone]

In your story, did you use any punctuation?

LOL DH. Heaven knows why you asked that question!

 

[torchthebitch]

i just wrote my first story its a loving wife story pm me to read it i need feedback

Did you allow comments?

Also post a link to take me there. I'm lazy.

 

[torchthebitch]

OK, I'm not really. I went and looked for it but it isn't posted yet.

 

[driphoney]

LOL DH. Heaven knows why you asked that question!

Hey! I know you, can't hide behind a new "do" with me.

 

[Sanichi]

Dreamsreal, check your PMs. I sent an edited version of your script with correct punctuation and everything. You posted the pre-proofed version, complete without punctuation. The result is predictable.


My Wife's Ass Gets Soaked with Cum

The category is Loving Wives, which is just asking for it.


Anonymous comment 1:

Proof Read Please

U stirted to red yor stori but gave up. 2 many mistakes.


Anonymous comment 2:

Dude, find an editor

If even that last guy thought there were too many mistakes, you really are in trouble.

 

[CWatson]

Did you notice he can't even spell "Oklahoma" right in his profile?

 

[Trudy_Antone]

Hey! I know you, can't hide behind a new "do" with me.

Yep, Still Truant One but I'd just 'dy' if my mommy found out what I get up to!!!

 

[Sanichi]

Did you notice he can't even spell "Oklahoma" right in his profile?

Oklaohma might be in Hawaii...

Dreamsreal, don't you want to do something about that story? Two days now and the comments are rabid.