Xodus
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I have a new poem up - Whack away, please :)
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WickedEve
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Whack away at a BDSM poem? Hmmm...Xodus said:
Well, I'm not sure what to say. It's interesting how you describe a scene that may be shocking, or at least, extremely uncomfortable to some, then you end it with "God, I love my Master." I'm not sure if there's much else you could do with this. You basically give minimal details of a scene, and then you give your poem an ending that's almost like a punch line -- at least, to me, though I found that an interesting way to look at it.
Then again you could rewrite this describing in more detail how you feel. Are you feeling nervousness, anticipation, arousal? You mention itching and burning and stinging. You could describe other sensations to flesh this out more. Maybe other sights, sounds, smells.
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Oh, a Dom writing from a sub's point of view... Well, have you thought of trying that same scene from the Dom's perspective? Perhaps, you could describe the feelings of power surging through you as watch your sub retain water. Though, it would be best if Rybka skips Master: The sequel to Slave since it's not his cup of pee. Actually, I don't think there's gonna be pee in this cup, Fishy... tee heeXodus said:Thanks for the input, Eve
I am a Dom though, not a sub.
But seriously, Xodus, it may be an interesting comparison.
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I'm curious, (as usual) have you had your sub do this before? Isn't 6 quarts an awful lot? How soapy? Leather is one thing, but don't those studs hurt like a bitch? And coarse rope? Ouch.
Since this has nothing to do with poetry, no need to answer unless you simply want to satisfy my curiosity. And I must warn you - I'm accustomed to being satisfied.
Since this has nothing to do with poetry, no need to answer unless you simply want to satisfy my curiosity. And I must warn you - I'm accustomed to being satisfied.
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She can hold six quarts, but only on her side. We are working on it though
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She can hold four in the situation mentioned, though.
edit: Although the studs are covered with leather, they can be dangerous if the wielder is inexperienced.
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She can hold four in the situation mentioned, though.
edit: Although the studs are covered with leather, they can be dangerous if the wielder is inexperienced.
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WickedEve
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Was there a naked woman in your AV a while ago?
So... is there an actual arousing sensation when one is that full or is the arousal in doing as ordered?
Does your sub write poetry?
I'm at that question phase in my life? "What is the meaning of life and how much water can a sub comfortably hold."
So... is there an actual arousing sensation when one is that full or is the arousal in doing as ordered?
Does your sub write poetry?
I'm at that question phase in my life? "What is the meaning of life and how much water can a sub comfortably hold."
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WickedEve said:Was there a naked woman in your AV a while ago?
So... is there an actual arousing sensation when one is that full or is the arousal in doing as ordered?
Does your sub write poetry?
I'm at that question phase in my life? "What is the meaning of life and how much water can a sub comfortably hold."
No there wasn't a naked woman before. I just threw one of my poser artworks in there. It's poorly done because I did it in like five minutes
She seems to love it. My wife likes enemas occasionally but not as big, and usually before anal sex.
I don't think that particular sub writes poetry. I know my wife doesn't.
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BTW this is my first poem
I normally write stories.
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I've heard of poser but I'm not sure exactly what kind of artwork it is. I know that all poser art I've seen has a similar look. Is it a program that offers a selection of body parts that you can put together and then manipulate?
(I know I'm off the subject of poetry, so I'll write "this board is for verse -- not for poser and perverse" 100 times.)
(I know I'm off the subject of poetry, so I'll write "this board is for verse -- not for poser and perverse" 100 times.)
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hmmmmm
Poser works like that, but there is much more to it.
All the body parts are there. You shape and form them the best you can.
You start with a fairly blank body of regular proportions. Then you add tones colors hair, features, etc.
There is no background so you do that also.
The lighting must be set up just right to get the look you want also.
Most of us take our finished Poser products into a photo shop program and do about as much work there as we did in poser.
It takes me from four hours to a week to make one piece.
Edit: you can look at my poser work at the last link in my sig.
also there are many great works at www.renderosity.com
Poser works like that, but there is much more to it.
All the body parts are there. You shape and form them the best you can.
You start with a fairly blank body of regular proportions. Then you add tones colors hair, features, etc.
There is no background so you do that also.
The lighting must be set up just right to get the look you want also.
Most of us take our finished Poser products into a photo shop program and do about as much work there as we did in poser.
It takes me from four hours to a week to make one piece.
Edit: you can look at my poser work at the last link in my sig.
also there are many great works at www.renderosity.com
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