I could use some thoughts/ideas

[emap]

I think maybe I do this to much but darnit the idea won't form and it is bugging me.

OK so first off little layout of the idea. If you happen to be playing Age of Conan you will recognize this. I'm going to layout the basic premise of the starting area of AOC, then I will tell you where I am right now with it. At that point I will be stopping and letting you guys come up with thoughts and ideas, I want many please.

AOC starts off your on a ship, you are a slave, after you finish making your character the ship crashes. You get a little video of you sinking into the water then raising and it cuts to you on the shore where an old guy comes up talks to you for a while and you get to find the slavemaster from your ship. You save a tied up whore, do alot of fighting and get to the town. There you have to talk to the blacksmith who has you get stone for him to work on a wall after which he hammers your slave irons off. Once in the town you can do many rather well thought out quests, during the day and at night. Night time is where you advance the main story and eventually get yourself out of town and into the rest of the world.

I'll cut it shortish and say that the town is controlled by a dictator who is blockading the harbor. His troops are slaughtering the townspeople, for unknown reasons or because they are suspected of being part of the resistance. Night time you help said resistance overthrow him.

OK that is the setup I am starting with, obviously I can't use that, Funcom may or may not be mad if I do, I'd rather not risk it. Besides where's the fun in that.

So instead, I am staying with the slave on the ship and shipwreck part I know that, handy for showing the character, having some sex right off so the people who want the quick bang get their buck and may actually read the rest.

Of course i have to change it some so there is no tattoo tying the main to a spirit like in AOC, instead was given drugs to forget her past, and of course was a sex slave on the ship destined to be sold for same. Skipping the tied up whore part, that was a teensy weak anyway.

So as it stands now, I have a gal who finds herself shipwrecked, no memory and no clothes who has to make her way through a jungle to get to a town. I'm not terribly sure what to do between beach and town. I do know she gets turned into the new whore, she has no clothes and they assumed so she works in a brothel.

Keeping the dictator, just starting his blockade and everything shortly after getting there. I know she works in a brothel, though I need thoughts on stuff that happens in said brothel.

Oh and I know that she is an assassin, very good with blades and so forth. The guards of the dictator will be mean and nasty and of course take free time with the whores.

Oh one more thing, she stays nude, cause I told Tenyari I would do that.

OK, so I need thoughts on what gets done to the town, what happens in the brothel, what she does while getting to town in the first place. That actually rather more than covers the first part, though any additional thoughts would be good on what happens to the town, the resistance people so on so forth. No seriously cause otherwise it would start bugging at me when I am typing up the first part.

 

[ms.read]

I think maybe I do this to much but darnit the idea won't form and it is bugging me.

OK so first off little layout of the idea. If you happen to be playing Age of Conan you will recognize this. I'm going to layout the basic premise of the starting area of AOC, then I will tell you where I am right now with it. At that point I will be stopping and letting you guys come up with thoughts and ideas, I want many please.

AOC starts off your on a ship, you are a slave, after you finish making your character the ship crashes. You get a little video of you sinking into the water then raising and it cuts to you on the shore where an old guy comes up talks to you for a while and you get to find the slavemaster from your ship. You save a tied up whore, do alot of fighting and get to the town. There you have to talk to the blacksmith who has you get stone for him to work on a wall after which he hammers your slave irons off. Once in the town you can do many rather well thought out quests, during the day and at night. Night time is where you advance the main story and eventually get yourself out of town and into the rest of the world.

I'll cut it shortish and say that the town is controlled by a dictator who is blockading the harbor. His troops are slaughtering the townspeople, for unknown reasons or because they are suspected of being part of the resistance. Night time you help said resistance overthrow him.

OK that is the setup I am starting with, obviously I can't use that, Funcom may or may not be mad if I do, I'd rather not risk it. Besides where's the fun in that.

So instead, I am staying with the slave on the ship and shipwreck part I know that, handy for showing the character, having some sex right off so the people who want the quick bang get their buck and may actually read the rest.

Of course i have to change it some so there is no tattoo tying the main to a spirit like in AOC, instead was given drugs to forget her past, and of course was a sex slave on the ship destined to be sold for same. Skipping the tied up whore part, that was a teensy weak anyway.

So as it stands now, I have a gal who finds herself shipwrecked, no memory and no clothes who has to make her way through a jungle to get to a town. I'm not terribly sure what to do between beach and town. I do know she gets turned into the new whore, she has no clothes and they assumed so she works in a brothel.

Keeping the dictator, just starting his blockade and everything shortly after getting there. I know she works in a brothel, though I need thoughts on stuff that happens in said brothel.

Oh and I know that she is an assassin, very good with blades and so forth. The guards of the dictator will be mean and nasty and of course take free time with the whores.

Oh one more thing, she stays nude, cause I told Tenyari I would do that.

OK, so I need thoughts on what gets done to the town, what happens in the brothel, what she does while getting to town in the first place. That actually rather more than covers the first part, though any additional thoughts would be good on what happens to the town, the resistance people so on so forth. No seriously cause otherwise it would start bugging at me when I am typing up the first part.

i think ann rice did that in her third book of the sleeping beauty series. Correct me if Im wrong?

 

[Fantasies_only]

I think maybe I do this to much but darnit the idea won't form and it is bugging me.

OK so first off little layout of the idea. If you happen to be playing Age of Conan you will recognize this. I'm going to layout the basic premise of the starting area of AOC, then I will tell you where I am right now with it. At that point I will be stopping and letting you guys come up with thoughts and ideas, I want many please.

The way you describe it, sounds like it should be an SRP.
I've never read AOC but I've seen the movie Hercules In New York with Arnold Shwartzanegger.
Half god desires human companionship, falls for a modern day (mid or late 70s) mortal in the future (from temple of The Faits), and travels to New York to find her (sequel in San Francisco with Sylvester Stalone as Atlas).
The refilmed sequel stars a young Hulk Hogan and Shwartzanegger as Atlas.

 

[emap]

Maybe she did, I don't read her books, besides I'm not her and my version will be different anyway.

Oh yeah bad ms, you didn't have any thoughts on what I could do.

 

[ms.read]

Maybe she did, I don't read her books, besides I'm not her and my version will be different anyway.

Oh yeah bad ms, you didn't have any thoughts on what I could do.

You could wait for this story line to come to fruition while you wait for November 1st to roll around. Then you could write 50, 000 words About it on NANOWRIMO (NAtional NOvel WRIting MOnth) then at the end of the month hack it up during editing for all the bad parts and then send in the good pieces as Girl on a shipreck parts one , two, three ect.

*does a little dance around the room*

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

You could wait for this story line to come to fruition while you wait for November 1st to roll around. Then you could write 50, 000 words About it on NANOWRIMO (NAtional NOvel WRIting MOnth) then at the end of the month hack it up during editing for all the bad parts and then send in the good pieces as Girl on a shipreck parts one , two, three ect. ...

Then you could submit the whole thing to a publisher and make some money ...

 

[ms.read]

mad libs.

cheers to the _________ who thought for the rest of us to join him to hunker down and write 50,000 _________ words during a _________ month.

 

[emap]

ms your forgetting one thing, I am slow, generally I am lucky to have 2000 words in a month, 50000 I could do if say I start right this second and finish three years from now. Well three years if I am lucky anyway.

Ask snoopy generally my tense sucks and I don't always have all of the commas or sentences structured right but otherwise he isn't adding or removing words. Yes I do actually pay attention to what you said with my stories.

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

ms your forgetting one thing, I am slow, generally I am lucky to have 2000 words in a month, 50000 I could do if say I start right this second and finish three years from now. ...

So, get on with it already!

 

[emap]

Well I can't, I am working on other stories and nobody has given me any ideas on what to do with this one. There really isn't that much to work with if I just use what I have already.

I mean it's not like I wanna do, sex on a boat, boat sinks survivor wakes up on beach, starts walking to town, cuts to town and working in a brothel so on so forth. That's just kinda silly, way to much cutting ahead and skipping the good stuff, well in this case probably fighting, though there would be sex to, I am missing what to do in the brothel.

 

[ms.read]

Emap, thats the beautiful thing about nanowrimo!Nobody cares about tense , commas, or if your I's come before E's. Your first draft is SUPPOSED to be SHIT!.

Mine was. Chris Baty's was. ( the friggin guy who made up the write on the seat of your pants 50,000 words OH my god why the hell am I doing this, Oh by the way friend why dont you join me in this Flipping charade.)

SO here's the deal. Lets get a whole Friggin bunch a people. You, me, snooper, Stella, Will,.... EVERYBODY that we can. and write for a month. See if you make 5,000 words. I'll be there to cheer you on. And then you can see if girl on a boat can make it to paradise? I want to be the first one to read it!!!

I know you can do it emap. You just got to give it a try!

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

... SO here's the deal. Lets get a whole Friggin bunch a people. ... snooper ... write for a month. See if you make 5,000 words. ...

Let's see ... November ... 30 days ... take out the week-ends ... I should have something over 20,000 words in draft and, with luck, 15,000 usable in that time.

... I'll be there to cheer you on. ...

Not offering to write yourself?

... I know you can do it emap. You just got to give it a try!

Now that I agree with.

 

[lowflykiwi]

A couple of thoughts

I think maybe I do this to much but darnit the idea won't form and it is bugging me.

OK so first off little layout of the idea. If you happen to be playing Age of Conan you will recognize this. I'm going to layout the basic premise of the starting area of AOC, then I will tell you where I am right now with it. At that point I will be stopping and letting you guys come up with thoughts and ideas, I want many please.

...

So instead, I am staying with the slave on the ship and shipwreck part I know that, handy for showing the character, having some sex right off so the people who want the quick bang get their buck and may actually read the rest.

...

Oh one more thing, she stays nude, cause I told Tenyari I would do that.
...

I am not aware of the AOC storyline. So the following could be totally out of character...

To me the nude requirement could be a bit restricting. The storyline could have more potential if she had one piece of covering, maybe it gets changed through the story.

Say she starts with a piece of sail that only covers her lower modesty. This gets ripped off, and destroyed, during an early sex scene. Then, as the story progresses, the piece of attire changes, maybe to something like a see through silky gown, that she picks up from the brothel. You could play games with this making her try to hide behind the see through cover while warding off attackers.

Maybe later on, if I am reading correctly that AOC has a fantasy theme, some piece of attire she discovers in her travels could have some magical properties in some way. Maybe giving her power over the dictator, or something.

If AOC does not have a fantasy theme, maybe adding this is where you can branch from "doing their story".

For the first step along the way you could start that she wakes on the beach. It is too hot. Wandering back into the tree line for shade. Discovers a cool pool. Dives in and is observed by her first attacker.

Just some thoughts...

Kiwi

 

[SpicyPepper]

For shits and giggles you can have her first attacker throw some coinage her way after he has his way with her thinking she's a whore from the brothel...
There she is, all used and crying and he tosses her some coins!
Nothing like a little non-consent!

 

[emap]

Low trust me your thinking in the box, it's not hard to have a nude gal going around getting in fights and stuff, can even make it incredibly erotic at the same time. Trust me that part is something of a bonus.

Spicy that's not a bad idea, going a tad off the direction I was thinking, though you did give me a pretty good thought on the getting into town part.

 

[ms.read]

what if...

girl in your story gets some kind of sickness that if she doesn't stop havin sex at least once a day then, ( insert consequence here) the problem is all the people that she is to have sex with aren't quite up to her standards?

 

[emap]

Oh now stop that your making me giggle.

That would be more in line with a freddy story. Not saying it's bad just that's one of those funny thoughts and I'm not ready for funny.

 

[GratefulFred]

Oh now stop that your making me giggle.

That would be more in line with a freddy story. Not saying it's bad just that's one of those funny thoughts and I'm not ready for funny.

Someone called?

What's up?

 

[emap]

what if...

girl in your story gets some kind of sickness that if she doesn't stop havin sex at least once a day then, ( insert consequence here) the problem is all the people that she is to have sex with aren't quite up to her standards?

That is what's up Freddy, you got yourself a grand idea for a funny story there, and we all know your pedophile story won't be done for a long while, your having to much fun with fantasies. Which is amusing and mean all in one, he is a nice guy just has issues or is having fun playing at being dumb. Well probably both, but I didn't say that.

 

[GratefulFred]

That is what's up Freddy, you got yourself a grand idea for a funny story there, and we all know your pedophile story won't be done for a long while, your having to much fun with fantasies. Which is amusing and mean all in one, he is a nice guy just has issues or is having fun playing at being dumb. Well probably both, but I didn't say that.

Emap my dear, stop being a thread basher. The person who started this thread is perhaps complaining as we speak on how you are changing the subject and jumping into other threads to make your point.

My pedeophile story I'll have you know is up to 20,000+ word count thus far and I'm still only on the title.

 

[JRaven]

Hate to get off topic here, but I had a few thoughts.

She wears only a chain around her waist. It's what identifies her as a sex slave. One of the guards from the ship also manages to survive the shipwreck. She seduces him and screws him. When he's finished with her, he rolls over and falls asleep. She takes his knife and slits his throat, giving her a weapon. She doesn't even think to take his clothes, for years she's worn only the chain.

As she forages for berries, nuts, fruits in the jungle, she's attacked by a wild boar. (Not sexually, no bestiality) She manages to kill it with her knife. Roasting it, a band of bad looking guys led by a good looking guy smell roast pork and visit.

As she's screwing the good looking leader, she tells him about her dream of being a free woman. But he talks her into going to the brothel that had purchased her from her former employer on a different land. There, she can help them spy on the dictator. As officers of the army and navy visit the brothel, she can engage them in conversation. Then, one of the resistence members will pay for her services and she can tell them what the dictator's plans are. By helping the resistence movement, she can become truly free.

But, sometimes the dictator's soldiers will pool their money, pay for the services of a sex slave for an hour. Then they all have a quickie with her, using more than one hole at the a time. To give her an idea of what would be expected of her, the rest of the band has their way with her. Before she leaves, she's given a satchel with a few coins to pay for her services. They also give her an amulet. The resistance member that will approach her will have the same amulet.

Now knowing in what direction the town is in, she heads off. You could throw in another wild animal here.

When she nears town, she puts the knife in her satchel knowing that a sex slave wouldn't carry one. At the gates of the town, she's molested by the guards, much rougher than the band had treated her. When they finish, they let her grab her satchel, give her a few pennies as a joke and haul her off to the brothel.

The brothel owner takes her to her room, complete with a door that locks from the outside and bars on the window. He tosses the satchel aside, dismissing it because a sex slave wouldn't ever have anything of value. She gives him the best sex she can so that he'll reccommend her to the officers of the dictator.

After a whole bunch of sex with army and navy officers, the good looking band leader who learns all the plans, a group of 6 soldiers... Maybe she does the dictator, maybe she does his wife instead.
The day for the big take over begins. Her first task is to kill whatever officer she happens to be with at the stroke of noon. But instead, she's with a group of soldiers. "I got something from Colonel Shithead. You guys want a really mind blowing experience? Let me get something." She retrieves her knife and surprises the first two. The other two go down with a fight, but she wins.

As she opens the door, the brothel owner rushes by screaming and hollering for an officer that is with another girl. She kills the brothel owner. Then as she sets the other sex slaves free, she finds the officer and kills him. The soldiers had to check their swords at the desk. But the officer kept his. (RHIP, Rank Has Its Priviledges) Only with the help of the sex slave that he was with does she win. But now she has a sword that she tucks into her waist chain. Giving the keys to the other sex slave, she grabs her satchel and leaves the brothel to join the fight.

But she had the day wrong. She realizes that the dictator had summoned the officer for something else. And that the officer will be expected. Now, covered in blood, wearing only the chain of a sex slave and a sword, she must leave town to join up with the band.

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Or, if you wanted to make the brothel owner a good guy...
She complains to an officer after screwing him that a paricular group of soldiers had mistreated her. But the officer has a sadistic streak. He returns the next day with the soldiers she complained about. They take her away, offering the brothel owner only the point of a sword as payment. (Which he tastefully declines). She's lead to the barracks and left there for days. When she's finally taken back to the brothel, she's so beaten and bruised, she's unable to work for a week. This delays crucial information getting to the resistance. But it also pisses off the brothel owner enough to join the resistance.

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You asked for ideas. I gave you one or two.

Jenny

 

[snoopercharmbrights]

Hate to get off topic here, but I had a few thoughts.
...
You asked for ideas. I gave you one or two.

Jenny

There is your novel all laid out for you.

 

[emap]

Thanks Jenny, though not quite where I was planning on going with it. Sex isn't going to be the main focus of the story, and well with your ideas that seems to be the main focus.

 

[JRaven]

Well, you wanted her naked through out the story. I think most guys would assume sex where ever a naked woman is involved.

Jenny

 

[emap]

There will be plenty of sex silly, I just don't want it the focus, which it always is with guys anyway, the nude part is kinda a tease to get guys to look.