Hypnosis

[Jenny _S]

I've started a story about a dorky pyschologist who runs a "Stop Smoking" clinic and uses hypnosis. The guy is the typical "couldn't get laid in a whorehouse" type. His pants are too short. He has greasy, slicked down hair and a full pocket protector. You get the idea.

But he weeds out the best looking women who come to him to stop smoking and, using hypnosis, gives them something else to smoke, turning them into insatible whores for him at the sound of a single special, predefined word.

Anyone ever heard this done before?

 

[BlackSnake]

I think it would be a good story if the women stop smoking. Change thier craving to the taste of him sperm. Doing a little at a time, so the story won't loose crediblity.

 

[Jenny _S]

Well...

I think it would be a good story if the women stop smoking. Change thier craving to the taste of him sperm. Doing a little at a time, so the story won't loose crediblity.

That's really the idea here... moving the women from one fixation/habit to another. The way I have the story working it takes a number of sessions to bring the women around then they become ravenous for sex... But at least the don't smoke.

 

[BlackSnake]

Taking that the nerdy doc is serious about his work. He is not setting out to satisfy his needs, but with a woman on the couch totally under his spell and her delious barely clad body on the sofa, the idea comes to him.

Maybe he could take a peek under a skirt and his on confidence build as the patient trust increases in his abilities.

Getting away with something small and building up to the real naughty.

Under his spell:
"You are feeling hot. Your things are sweating...."

 

[Jenny _S]

Well...

Taking that the nerdy doc is serious about his work. He is not setting out to satisfy his needs, but with a woman on the couch totally under his spell and her delious barely clad body on the sofa, the idea comes to him.

Maybe he could take a peek under a skirt and his on confidence build as the patient trust increases in his abilities.

Getting away with something small and building up to the real naughty.

Under his spell:
"You are feeling hot. Your things are sweating...."

I've finished the story. The motivation is in terms of the geek doctor using hypnosis to give the women an alternative to smoking. That alternative, of course, center around the doctor's satisfaction in the story, but the women also find the alternative rather delightful.

The story begins on a rather dark note, "Why am I here? This never works." and finally ends up with "I can hardly wait until next Tuesday, doctor."

The women, of course, are not aware of what the doctor is doing, only that the "treatments" are having a positive affect on their lives.

At the same time the doctor is weeding out the so-so's and replacing them with better "quality" so to speak.

Perverted, I know. Sorry.

 

[BlackSnake]

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I've finished the story. The motivation is in terms of the geek doctor using hypnosis to give the women an alternative to smoking. That alternative, of course, center around the doctor's satisfaction in the story, but the women also find the alternative rather delightful.

The story begins on a rather dark note, "Why am I here? This never works." and finally ends up with "I can hardly wait until next Tuesday, doctor."

The women, of course, are not aware of what the doctor is doing, only that the "treatments" are having a positive affect on their lives.

At the same time the doctor is weeding out the so-so's and replacing them with better "quality" so to speak.

Perverted, I know. Sorry.

Perverted is good. It will keep me reading.

PM me when it done, I would love to read it.

I'm working on a swinging story right now.

 

[Jenny _S]

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Perverted is good. It will keep me reading.

PM me when it done, I would love to read it.

I'm working on a swinging story right now.

Here you are, BlackSnake

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=105331

Enjoy

 

[BlackSnake]

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Here you are, BlackSnake

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=105331

Enjoy

Bravo! Ancore!

 

[Jenny _S]

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Bravo! Ancore!

Thank you... <Bowing> Thank you...

Really... I don't know quite why that story is doing so well... It's really terse... and somewhat odd...

 

[sirhugs]

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Thank you... <Bowing> Thank you...

Really... I don't know quite why that story is doing so well... It's really terse... and somewhat odd...

odd is good, as long as it's well written...so many Lit stories rerun boring cliches and redundant images....odd = fresh!

I didn't find it terse, but I like dialogue driven tales.

I agree a sequel might be in order. But not 12 chapters.

 

[Jenny _S]

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odd is good, as long as it's well written...so many Lit stories rerun boring cliches and redundant images....odd = fresh!

I didn't find it terse, but I like dialogue driven tales.

I agree a sequel might be in order. But not 12 chapters.

Thank you, SirHugs

I've thought about a sequal. There's a problem: Who's the main character in the sequal? The original story is about Ann. The doctor really doesn't have much of a part in the story until the end.

If the sequal is about Ann. Why? She's already over her smoking and anything more would simply be a story about fucking.

The sequal would have to be about the Doctor. I've already thought about it.

 

[BlackSnake]

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Thank you, SirHugs

I've thought about a sequal. There's a problem: Who's the main character in the sequal? The original story is about Ann. The doctor really doesn't have much of a part in the story until the end.

If the sequal is about Ann. Why? She's already over her smoking and anything more would simply be a story about fucking.

The sequal would have to be about the Doctor. I've already thought about it.

The Doctor is the machine. Many people can have a different reaction because they are so different.

The ending sugguests that the Doctor maybe looking for a different patient to suck on his cock, but maybe the geek's waiting room is full, and his accomidations a little better. Women are waiting hours to see the doctor.

Now, your new character can't believe that all these women are waiting to see this greasy-headed geek. You may even add details of her experience while under the doctor's spell.

The story is different, because the main character is different, her life is different.

 

[sirhugs]

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Thank you, SirHugs

I've thought about a sequal. There's a problem: Who's the main character in the sequal? The original story is about Ann. The doctor really doesn't have much of a part in the story until the end.

If the sequal is about Ann. Why? She's already over her smoking and anything more would simply be a story about fucking.

The sequal would have to be about the Doctor. I've already thought about it.

the other option is to stay focussed on Ann...Doc replaced her nicotine addiction with one for sperm. Now she comp[ulsively goes seeking cocks to suck...all sorts of odd story potential...in elevators, restaurants, mens rooms, the boardroom during a big meeting, the A train.....

 

[BlackSnake]

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the other option is to stay focussed on Ann...Doc replaced her nicotine addiction with one for sperm. Now she comp[ulsively goes seeking cocks to suck...all sorts of odd story potential...in elevators, restaurants, mens rooms, the boardroom during a big meeting, the A train.....

More than one way to skin a cat: What has the doctor done to poor Ann, now she has a craving for cum every time that word is spoken.

 

[Jenny _S]

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More than one way to skin a cat: What has the doctor done to poor Ann, now she has a craving for cum every time that word is spoken.

I'm working on it... thinking about doing a synopsis both ways and seeing how they work later today.

Thanks

 

[BlackSnake]

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I'm working on it... thinking about doing a synopsis both ways and seeing how they work later today.

Thanks

I'm interested. Post the one that you like the least here.

 

[Jenny _S]

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I'm interested. Post the one that you like the least here.

No Prob, BlackSnake... but it will be tonight... gotta work today

 

[Jenny _S]

Ok BlackSnake

This is the quick synopsis of the sequal I'm NOT going to write....

Story picks up where "Mercy Stop Smoking Clinic" ends. Ann leaves the office and arrives home to fix dinner for her husband. By the time hubby arrives she is dripping wet. Dinner is forgotten in lieu of a hot sex scene.

Next morning hubby leaves for work. Ann masturbates in the shower thinking about the sex the night before. Afterwards she does the shopping at the local grocery store.

As she's leaving the grocery store she runs into her next door neighbor's wife in the parking lot. They have lunch followed by a lesbian sex scene at the neighbor's house. The neighbor's hubby comes home for lunch and catches the two women together. Sounds like a threesome here.

After work, hubby comes home and it ends up in a pile Hubby loves the "new" Ann and can't get enough.

Finally, Ann returns to the Clinic for her next appointment. The doctor declares her cured (because he's found a better replacement).

Well?

 

[BlackSnake]

Re: Ok BlackSnake

This is the quick synopsis of the sequal I'm NOT going to write....

Story picks up where "Mercy Stop Smoking Clinic" ends. Ann leaves the office and arrives home to fix dinner for her husband. By the time hubby arrives she is dripping wet. Dinner is forgotten in lieu of a hot sex scene.

Next morning hubby leaves for work. Ann masturbates in the shower thinking about the sex the night before. Afterwards she does the shopping at the local grocery store.

As she's leaving the grocery store she runs into her next door neighbor's wife in the parking lot. They have lunch followed by a lesbian sex scene at the neighbor's house. The neighbor's hubby comes home for lunch and catches the two women together. Sounds like a threesome here.

After work, hubby comes home and it ends up in a pile Hubby loves the "new" Ann and can't get enough.

Finally, Ann returns to the Clinic for her next appointment. The doctor declares her cured (because he's found a better replacement).

Well?

I see...

I might have went for praise of the doctor to the neighbor, and after the first session the neighbor is a firecracker as well. The husbands get great sex first, but while their at work the Ann and her neighbor go at.

Maybe the weekend the men talk about how their wives have changed and then enters the house finding the two going at each other, which they join.

Maybe...., but I would like to see what you came up with.

 

[Jenny _S]

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I see...

I might have went for praise of the doctor to the neighbor, and after the first session the neighbor is a firecracker as well. The husbands get great sex first, but while their at work the Ann and her neighbor go at.

Maybe the weekend the men talk about how their wives have changed and then enters the house finding the two going at each other, which they join.

Maybe...., but I would like to see what you came up with.

I finished the first draft last night, BlackSnake. It is a bit different than the first one.

This is how it starts....

Ann leaves the office and goes on her way. Then you find out what the doctor is all about and how this got started with the drug. And another patient awaits... etc... The ending is still open for more adventures.

 

[BlackSnake]

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I finished the first draft last night, BlackSnake. It is a bit different than the first one.

This is how it starts....

Ann leaves the office and goes on her way. Then you find out what the doctor is all about and how this got started with the drug. And another patient awaits... etc... The ending is still open for more adventures.

This sounds great. There is a lot we don't know about the doctor. Why in this day and age is he dressed like a real nerd? It's not like he can't afford to be presentable. We don't know if he is a real nerd or is it a cover.

 

[Jenny _S]

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This sounds great. There is a lot we don't know about the doctor. Why in this day and age is he dressed like a real nerd? It's not like he can't afford to be presentable. We don't know if he is a real nerd or is it a cover.

He has a pocket protector, Ok?

 

[BlackSnake]

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He has a pocket protector, Ok?

I'm sorry...the questions were rhetorical. I was giving reasons in support of your posted story.

Let me know when it has been approved. I very interested in it.

 

[Jenny _S]

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I'm sorry...the questions were rhetorical. I was giving reasons in support of your posted story.

Let me know when it has been approved. I very interested in it.

LMAO.
You do learn some more about Dr. Peterson and a lot more about the drug. But I thought I would save more about the doctor for a second sequal. The ending set that up.

The second draft is complete. I will let it sit for a day and reread it before I submit. It should be out by Monday or Tuesday. That's about the length of time it's taken the last few stories.

 

[Jenny _S]

Ok, Blacksnake

The sequal to the Mercy Stop Smoking Clinic is posted now. Just for you, hon.

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