How to describe 'virile' male characters?

[erotica_n_s]

Would like to hear other folks' thoughts/ideas on this.

• many of my stories involve a woman getting pregnant by a man other than her partner/husband
• the idea is to present a 'contrast' between a 'strong' male (the 'bull') and a 'weak' male (the 'cuck'), and thereby to highlight the strong male/bull's 'virility'
• I'd like my stories to read as 'paeans' to the virility of the male protagonists, just as much as they are about sweet and submissive female protagonists

• The two 'models' I most usually think of are Rocco Siffredi (the 'athlete') and Sebastien Chabal (the 'hulk'/'beast'). The 'athlete' is an intelligent, suave character, the 'hulk' is a more 'animalistic' character. The athlete appears more frequently in my stories, but the hulk is the 'pinnacle' of virility.
• I would be inclined to describe their physical appearance - tall, broad-shouldered men, of course, the 'hulk' is taller and has even more broad shoulders than the 'athlete', the hulk has 'bigger' muscles, I think the athlete would be 6'3", the hulk would be 6'5" (at a minimum).
• Personality - they are both highly libidinous characters, but the athlete would have a 'warmer' personality, he would make an effort to 'connect' with a woman before they have sex, the hulk would have little time for this. The athlete would start slow and gentle and then gradually build up the 'intensity' or the 'vigorousness' of the sex, the hulk would go full throttle right from the beginning. The athlete would be prepared to perform cunnilingus, I don't think the hulk would.

• I could use suggestions on adverbs, adjectives, similes, etc. to describe the male characters.
• Any examples of particularly well-written descriptions?
• Any examples of lines/passages that would be arousing to female readers?
• Scenes describing/depicting a woman experiencing sexual arousal as she sets her eyes upon a good-looking man?
• Any examples would be helpful

 

[Voboy]

I would suggest using terms often reserved for animals: breeding, stud, sire/dam, cross, husbandry, stock, buck, boar, ram.

And I'd make frequent use of "seed" or "sperm," rather than things like "spunk" or "cum." So... basically, use vocab to emphasize the breeding aspect of your men and their encounters.

By contrast, you can use more "tender" vocab to express things from your cucks.

 

[tenyari]

Any examples of lines/passages that would be arousing to female readers?

You've described a body type that is more arousing to men who want to be that than to women. The super muscular male is all about the male gaze. So I'd stick to making that character consistent therein. You could literally troll video game forums and see how gamers describe their 'buff dude' characters and copy-paste into your stories.

 

[lovecraft68]

You've described a body type that is more arousing to men who want to be that than to women. The super muscular male is all about the male gaze. So I'd stick to making that character consistent therein. You could literally troll video game forums and see how gamers describe their 'buff dude' characters and copy-paste into your stories.

I agree, and will add that the 10" cock is also for the men, more than the women. In reality, with the exception of the women who would classify as size queens, most women will tell you they have no use or desire for a cock that size. But insecure men transpose the big cocked character on to themselves. These men are easily identifiable as the ones who drive their over sized pick up to their office job

Gamers are obsessed with the buff dude because most of them can rest their controller on their gut while they shove a quad burger in their face and wash it down with a six pack of Yoo-hoos. Then, through their buff dude, they verbally harass and attack all the female gamers.

I'd love to see the gamer/incel stat percentage

 

[TadOverdon]

It may not be right for the effect you're after, but more and more often I keep the physical descriptions of attractive men from the perspective of female characters to a few general and downright prosaic elements. They are tall, "athletic," and so forth. Not really different than you'd find in popular romance. Then I focus on the responses of the women to the men, and maybe am a little purple-prosy there - they find the guy "magnetic," they're (purple alert) "intoxicated by his sheer physicality."

Getting into specific physical dimensions never is realistic, I don't think. "Far more generously endowed than her husband" is enough to be a little too much.

 

[TarnishedPenny]

‘Virility’ includes more than just body shape or size. It includes health, energy and often intelligence.

I would suggest you google what male body attributes women find attractive. Follow that up with another search about personality traits. Your results may not be precisely IAW your definitions (athlete vs hulk) but they’ll be more likely to resonate with 50% of the readership. Good luck.

 

[yowser]

I think you'll be more effective by emphasizing non-traditional aspects. The eyes: even gaze, unwavering, confidently piercing, etc. Or one physical detail that stands out arrestingly - vein in a neck, forearms that ripple, aquiline nose. Many times descriptions get overwritten when just a handful of the right details can convey the qualities you want.

 

[TheRedChamber]

Gamers are obsessed with the buff dude because most of them can rest their controller on their gut while they shove a quad burger in their face and wash it down with a six pack of Yoo-hoos. Then, through their buff dude, they verbally harass and attack all the female gamers.

I'd love to see the gamer/incel stat percentage

Hey, knock off the stereo-typical gamer bashing. We have our equivalent of Loving Wives Trolls for sure and they're just as loud as they are here. Instead of writing paragraphs of whiny rebuttal, I'll just link to an interview with a fairly typical modern gamer to make my point.

 

[colddiesel]

I think that the attributes suggested by the op indicate caricature rather than character. Description should perhaps be slight, with character emerging through their speech and actions

 

[lovecraft68]

Hey, knock off the stereo-typical gamer bashing. We have our equivalent of Loving Wives Trolls for sure and they're just as loud as they are here. Instead of writing paragraphs of whiny rebuttal, I'll just link to an interview with a fairly typical modern gamer to make my point.

Stereotypes, whether 100% accurate or not, are created for a reason. These people think gaming is now a sport...sitting in your chair spending all night on a game.

There's a running joke whenever a new call of duty drops "sorry girls no sex tonight, new call of duty" Reality is there's no sex to be had any night with a gamer.

Want to see the true face of gamers? go hand on reddit, they probably created the stereotype especially the abuse of women

Don't like the truth about a large portion of a community of adults playing video games all night ignore me. Its sad videos games and comic books, two things created for kids have now been taken over by loser adults and because of that have turned into cesspools of violence and sex, with political narrative thrown in. A generation of incel Peter Pans.

BTW I've been involved in comics for 40+ years, so don't tell me what I don't know about a lot of that crowd.

 

[TheRedChamber]

Stereotypes, whether 100% accurate or not, are created for a reason. These people think gaming is now a sport...sitting in your chair spending all night on a game.

There's a running joke whenever a new call of duty drops "sorry girls no sex tonight, new call of duty" Reality is there's no sex to be had any night with a gamer.

Want to see the true face of gamers? go hand on reddit, they probably created the stereotype especially the abuse of women

Don't like the truth about a large portion of a community of adults playing video games all night ignore me. Its sad videos games and comic books, two things created for kids have now been taken over by loser adults and because of that have turned into cesspools of violence and sex, with political narrative thrown in. A generation of incel Peter Pans.

BTW I've been involved in comics for 40+ years, so don't tell me what I don't know about a lot of that crowd.

Stereotypes often are created for a reason, but those reasons are often as much about one group trying to build itself up at the expense of another than it is necessarily about any kind of underlying truth about that set of people. Which subreddit would you have me go on? The one about retro video game collecting? The one about patient gaming? The one about accessibilty options for disabled gamers? The one specifically for female gamers? No, you'll tell me to look on the ones that reinforce the view that you want to peddle. True face of gaming indeed. Yes, some of the 20 million people who bought PlayStation 5's last year are dickheads, just by the law of averages - maybe more so because certain types of gaming are good for people who don't make friends easily and lack social skills. Yes, gaming isn't physical activity and can be a massive time sink and needs to be done with some responsibility.

I'm a gamer. I'm married. I'll have sex tonight. My mother, soon reaching 70, took up gaming ago and has completed most of the major RPGs from the last decade as well all of the Lego games. But she'll be no true Scotman, because she doesn't match you image of what a gamer is: male, overweight and vile.

You probably know a lot about 'that' crowd, but what do you know about all the other crowds?

 

[Carnevil9]

I think that the attributes suggested by the op indicate caricature rather than character. Description should perhaps be slight, with character emerging through their speech and actions

I agree with this. Show, don't tell. Let the virility of your characters be demonstrated by having them do virile things. Not necessarily inseminate a dozen women, but have them change a tire, lift something really heavy, win an arm-wrestling contest, etc.

 

[erotica_n_s]

I agree with this. Show, don't tell. Let the virility of your characters be demonstrated by having them do virile things. Not necessarily inseminate a dozen women, but have them change a tire, lift something really heavy, win an arm-wrestling contest, etc.

Understood, agreed.

Would be helpful to have more examples/suggestions of "virile things". Would be helpful to have a 'bank' of suggestions/examples so I can refer back to this page/thread for ideas in future.

Some/many of my female protagonists are trying to resist temptation, but the male protagonist is so "virile" that the woman eventually gives in. I want to try and depict that in a vaguely believable way, and in a way that would be arousing for readers.

I read this story (not written by me) a while ago, about a tourist at a beach in Greece, who finds herself feeling turned on by the men she meets. There's no actual sex in the story, just descriptions of how she finds herself feeling vaguely sexually aroused.

If folks have any other examples/suggestions...

 

[CuriousErin]

You are clearly a man. The “hulk” is NOT the pinnacle of virility!

The differences described between the “athlete” and the “hulk” are incorrect. I think almost all women would find the athlete more appealing physically, and desirable for breeding. I know I do!

The athlete has a more natural strength and masculinity. He is naturally ripped AND graceful. Strong AND skilled. Not just a bodybuilding oaf who almost certainly juices steroids. The athlete is the epitome of vigour and health, combining beauty, strength, speed, and potency. His cardio-pulmonary health is as impressive as his skeleto-muscular health. He has stamina. He comes back for more. He would almost certainly have a higher sperm count than the hulk.

Try my favorite cuck story for sensuality with the pinnacle of virility:

https://www.literotica.com/s/micheles-dark-destiny-ch-02

 

[SimonDoom]

Play up the five senses: the hardness of his muscles, the scent of his sweat or of his hair, the deep bass of his voice, the sight of his muscles stretching his t shirt, that sort of thing. Describe a feature of the man that is appealing rather than just using an adjective to describe him generally. Rather than calling him "animalistic," for example, describe some feature that makes him seem like an animal -- he growls, for example.

 

[lovecraft68]

These days just make them have a job and not have a bun on their head.
Added masculinity points for having them drink a beer or regular coffee and not a triple vanilla Latte with cinnamon sprinkes.
Oh, and don't forget to have them pump gas in the rain so their wife or GF doesn't have to instead of sitting in the car while the women do it.

 

[stickygirl]

You've described a body type that is more arousing to men who want to be that than to women. The super muscular male is all about the male gaze. So I'd stick to making that character consistent therein. You could literally troll video game forums and see how gamers describe their 'buff dude' characters and copy-paste into your stories.

But isn't that the point for his readers? He's already described homo-erotic characteristics and maybe that's what his readers actually want, hidden behind a facade of 'breeding women'? Yes, it's a stereotype, same as a cheeseburger but people keep filling their faces with it.

To the OP, I'd say yes, keep up with the 'pumping his thick white seed deep inside her tight virgin hole'. They'll love that stuff.

 

[CuriousErin]

My fiancé is a fat hairy bear (which I find sexy), so I don't give a fuck about any of this shit.

A fat hairy trans bear? LOL! Righhht…

 

[KeithD]

There are actions that could be shown that would reflect virility, but I think "virility" is one of those terms you use to click into the reader's own visualization of what that means to them--with readers having widely varied understandings of that. I don't think the author should try to zero in on what that is in the context of the story other than not using generally understood opposite understandings of what being virile is.

You can describe a character as young, fit, vigorous, and virile. The third ejaculation he has in a twenty-minute section will assure the reader of the virile bit.

 

[vanmyers86]

Who's your target audience?

 

[Kumquatqueen]

Who's your target audience?

This.

And how do those people think of both themselves and the type of guy being described?

I've just tried to portray a character as 'manly' and went for "tall, dark and handsome, as he said himself", with other descriptors later like cocky, confident, jack-the-lad, muscle.

 

[TheRedChamber]

Who's your target audience?

Got me interested more generally - do women, by and large, like cuckold stories or are they more for the benefit men imagining themselves cucks? That's a genuine question btw.

I was just thinking how gay this all sounds. Not bad, obviously, gay as I am... Especially with the lack of emphasis on the role of the female characters and that these stories will be "'paeans' to the virility of the male protagonists." But I don't actually know how much emphasis there is on the female submission.

There is at least a certain homo - adjacent feeling to these stories (and much much more when he's eating the other guys seed from her/from the condom)

I'd missed that the OP has mentioned 'sweet submissive female protagonists and so initially misunderstood this part of the conversation. In a usual cuckold in story the wife might be putty in the hands of the bull, but are not generally submissive to their husbands. (At best they usually start at equal partners in a marriage) and having tasted of the forbidden (steroid enhanced) super fruits they're usually not sweet much longer either.

(Disclaimer. Have read and enjoyed the occasional cuckold story, haven't written any...yet)

 

[SimonDoom]

Got me interested more generally - do women, by and large, like cuckold stories or are they more for the benefit men imagining themselves cucks? That's a genuine question btw.

This is an excellent question. And vanmeyers86's question is astute as well. How you write your story may depend on the audience you are writing for. The audience may just be you, but you should think through who "you" are as an audience, and what really turns you on.

I suspect a very big portion of the cuck readership is men, maybe even more than women.

Similarly, I wonder who the audience for black men/white women interracial stories is. I get the feeling there are many white men who are turned on by this fantasy -- maybe even more than black men or white women who are turned on by it.

A theme of my writing is to figure out, early on, what the "erotic focus" of the story is. For me, that tends to drive everything else. Once you've figured that out, the rest will fall in place.

 

[TadOverdon]

I might be mistaken (always), but it's hard for me to imagine that many black men would be turned on by the kinds of fantasizing that seem to comprise the majority of the black/white interracial stuff I've seen on the site. So much of it revolves around behaviors and stereotypes that are demeaning, while being superficially flattering perhaps from the point of view of a white guy, and my guess is that as with so much else here white males are the primary group this fetishizing appeals to.

 

[TheRedChamber]

A theme of my writing is to figure out, early on, what the "erotic focus" of the story is. For me, that tends to drive everything else. Once you've figured that out, the rest will fall in place.

Agree. The most important starring question for a story is not who, what, where or when, it's 'why is this hot?' and this inherently has a extra 'to me personally' tacked on the end.

Having made an exhaustive survey of the LW high-scorers last night, I've come to the conclusion that the erotic focus is 'having a watertight pre-nup in place'

As for myself, I guess the reason I haven't written any LW stories yet (apart from the categorys reputation) is that I don't find either BTB or RAAC particularly strong endings in themselves (whereas I'm fine with 'and they lived happily ever after' or 'it was fun while it lasted' for other categories, so go figure...)