How to describe my favorite areolas... creatively!

[blackstreetBBWlover]

http://www.freeimagehosting.net/uploads/91254b00cd.jpg

Long story short; working on some stories to submit to the site, and working on a novel... right now! I LOVE these types of areolas!

My novel is gonna be sexy and so I wanna descibe the areolas as pictured in the link above in an attractive way.

Maybe something like this, or the way I came up with...

"The hue of her beautiful areolas matched the color of the amber fall leaves. They were about the diameter of coffee mugs. Boardering the edges of her areolas were smaller dots as they resembled the sun's atmosphere."

Yeah, I know. Sort of trashy, but hey! I'm still pretty new to the writing craft. This is after all my first novel. But I still wanna make it count. Suggestions? Tips?

Thanks in advance.

 

[Boxlicker101]

Hi, BBW Lover, and welcome to Literotica and the AH. Amber is sort of a bright yellow, and those areolas are dark brown.

Her areolas are big, and a rich coocolate color, and are surrounded by a myriad of small brown spots. When she is aroused and I lick and suck her luscious breasts, my tongue is given immense pleasure by their pebbly texture.

Trashy is okay; this is a porn site.

 

[Verdad]

Box is right, amber and solar words don't paint the image you want to paint. For what it's worth, the picture's making me think of the cocoa dusting on a tiramisu.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

And the boobs look like shit.

 

[blackstreetBBWlover]

Hi, BBW Lover, and welcome to Literotica and the AH. Amber is sort of a bright yellow, and those areolas are dark brown.

Her areolas are big, and a rich coocolate color, and are surrounded by a myriad of small brown spots. When she is aroused and I lick and suck her luscious breasts, my tongue is given immense pleasure by their pebbly texture.

Nice. Thank you!

Trashy is okay; this is a porn site.

Really? I never thought of it that way. Even if that's so, I still don't want my work to be all poorly-writen and whatnot.

Box is right, amber and solar words don't paint the image you want to paint. For what it's worth, the picture's making me think of the cocoa dusting on a tiramisu.

Even that bit of advice helps, so thanks.

And the boobs look like shit.

Really? I mean- you're entitled to your personal opinion just as I am to mine but I mean, they're huge and sexy... to me that is and the areolas are so beautiful.

 

[sr71plt]

I don't think the "coffee mugs" image will do anything for a reader. Coffee mugs are usually viewed side on. Unless you somehow tell them it's the diameter of the opening to the coffee mug (which would seem to take a lot of words), I think you've lost the reader on this image.

I think describing that it covers half the breast would be clearer.

I'll have to go with JBJ on these jugs, though. I dont find them erotic, so I probably wouldn't describe them at all in a story.

 

[JAMESBJOHNSON]

Nice. Thank you!



Really? I never thought of it that way. Even if that's so, I still don't want my work to be all poorly-writen and whatnot.



Even that bit of advice helps, so thanks.



Really? I mean- you're entitled to your personal opinion just as I am to mine but I mean, they're huge and sexy... to me that is and the areolas are so beautiful.

You need a good taste transplant.