i have had many good comments bout my very 1st attempt at writing (pls check it out if u havent). but there's a comment about me being slightly grammatically incorrect (english is my 3rd language). izzit important? but i think that if it doesnt interfere with the storyline it should be okay? wat do u guys think?
How do i check my grammar? Izzit important?
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Snowingman
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Well...
Having good spelling and grammer in a story is not everything. To be a good story, there needs be a good plot and charecters. However, no matter how good the plot may be, having bad grammer can really get it the way and take away from the effect of the story. It can be really jarring.
Putting puncuation in the right place is always a bonus too. It makes the story much more stuctered and easy to read. Having puncuation in the wrong place is a huge distraction, for me at least.
Having good spelling and grammer in a story is not everything. To be a good story, there needs be a good plot and charecters. However, no matter how good the plot may be, having bad grammer can really get it the way and take away from the effect of the story. It can be really jarring.
Putting puncuation in the right place is always a bonus too. It makes the story much more stuctered and easy to read. Having puncuation in the wrong place is a huge distraction, for me at least.
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I recommend that you post a link to your story here.
Your fellow authors will be kind enough to take a look and give you their feedbacks.
You can also ask them about your grammartical problems here, or on Authors' hungout board. And, they will help you to improve your grammar, if you ask nicely.
I recommend that you post a link to your story here.
Your fellow authors will be kind enough to take a look and give you their feedbacks.
You can also ask them about your grammartical problems here, or on Authors' hungout board. And, they will help you to improve your grammar, if you ask nicely.
For convenience sake, here is the link to her story.
I haven't read it, yet, but I have to agree Snowingman. What really "makes" a story is good plot and characters. However, grammar is included in all languages to help make it easier for some one who is reading what you've written to fully understand it. I don't know if you are currently in Malaysia (a country I've always wanted to visit, btw!), but there are some very simple English grammar books available.
Otherwise, you can always take advantage of the volunteer editor program, or ask some of the writers who post here if they might take a look at your story. I know I never mind helping out a writer as best I can.
Now, I shall have to read your story!
I haven't read it, yet, but I have to agree Snowingman. What really "makes" a story is good plot and characters. However, grammar is included in all languages to help make it easier for some one who is reading what you've written to fully understand it. I don't know if you are currently in Malaysia (a country I've always wanted to visit, btw!), but there are some very simple English grammar books available.
Otherwise, you can always take advantage of the volunteer editor program, or ask some of the writers who post here if they might take a look at your story. I know I never mind helping out a writer as best I can.
Now, I shall have to read your story!
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Some feedback on your story.
For somebody who has English as a third language, your story is extremly well written. I am triyng to learn Spanish as a thirf language and there is no way I could write a sentance, let alone a whole story!
The plot and charecters are also well done. The one suggestion I do have to not "list" Amy's features. Its hard to picture a person (for me at least) when your getting measurements and such thrown at me all at once. Mabye you could try introducing her features during the story...
As for grammer:
His eyes would stray to my breasts every so often but he remains very polite around me.
Try to keep tenses the same. ‘Would’ is past tense and ‘Remains’ is present. Changing ‘remains’ to ‘remained’ would fix the problem.
My legs became weak and I had to grip his shoulders for support. I couldn't find my voice 'coz all I can think about is the tingle that is running through my body.
In most formal writing, using short forms like ’coz in the place of because is not recommended. Might be better to write out the whole word. You do it a couple times in the story. It is a bit jarring to the reader. Also, remember the tenses... 'is' should be 'was.'
I gasped out loud in pain 'coz I haven't had sex in a while and my previous boyfriend's cock was not as fat as Zak's.
Other then the ‘cuz, I would recommend rewriting the sentence. The effect would be better with a pause in there somewhere. A possible re-write:
"I gasped out loud in pain. I had not had sex in a while and my previous boyfriend’s cock was not as fat as Zak’s"
Other then that, theres really nothing to say. Keep writing!
For somebody who has English as a third language, your story is extremly well written. I am triyng to learn Spanish as a thirf language and there is no way I could write a sentance, let alone a whole story!
The plot and charecters are also well done. The one suggestion I do have to not "list" Amy's features. Its hard to picture a person (for me at least) when your getting measurements and such thrown at me all at once. Mabye you could try introducing her features during the story...
As for grammer:
His eyes would stray to my breasts every so often but he remains very polite around me.
Try to keep tenses the same. ‘Would’ is past tense and ‘Remains’ is present. Changing ‘remains’ to ‘remained’ would fix the problem.
My legs became weak and I had to grip his shoulders for support. I couldn't find my voice 'coz all I can think about is the tingle that is running through my body.
In most formal writing, using short forms like ’coz in the place of because is not recommended. Might be better to write out the whole word. You do it a couple times in the story. It is a bit jarring to the reader. Also, remember the tenses... 'is' should be 'was.'
I gasped out loud in pain 'coz I haven't had sex in a while and my previous boyfriend's cock was not as fat as Zak's.
Other then the ‘cuz, I would recommend rewriting the sentence. The effect would be better with a pause in there somewhere. A possible re-write:
"I gasped out loud in pain. I had not had sex in a while and my previous boyfriend’s cock was not as fat as Zak’s"
Other then that, theres really nothing to say. Keep writing!
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If English is your third language I am willing to cut you a little slack. However, another new story I read just now was seriously compromised for me because its author had relied on Spellcheck too heavily, and we all know what trouble that can land you in.
thanx for the comments
lol... do u guys know that i didn't get any comments about my grammar from my fellow m'sians???
thanx. i do realise the fact that tenses are my weakest point.
yup! i speak 3 dialects of chinese (mandarin, hokkien, cantonese), malay, n english.
i can only hope that i get better with experience. hehe!
lol... do u guys know that i didn't get any comments about my grammar from my fellow m'sians???
thanx. i do realise the fact that tenses are my weakest point.
yup! i speak 3 dialects of chinese (mandarin, hokkien, cantonese), malay, n english.
i can only hope that i get better with experience. hehe!
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Shit! If that's your linguistic background, and you still write as well as you do in English, I'm even more impressed.
I have seen stories written in other languages in Literotica, but they were all written in languages that had alphabets. I'm not sure they could handle a language that consisted of pictographs.
I have seen stories written in other languages in Literotica, but they were all written in languages that had alphabets. I'm not sure they could handle a language that consisted of pictographs.
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