How about I task you?

[TMV]

This is one of my incongruous poems and one that exhibits my odd delectability in wordsmithing. I know that you will find it confusing..., but please, this one isn't that hard to understand if you would just try. I am intrigued by the sense of poetic reasoning and rules that you bog yourself down with. And then you call it art and freedom of expression. Can't you see the tight little box you limited yourself to?

Sly was the Dawg

Sly was the dog and on your back,
soon to be a log on user..
As must, your trust and shield is set as all,
challenge to fend.
Wend the guard and secure your state as the “One”.
Defend as your scion
Poor little sodden child; vice be your only bauble.
And you hide,
then benign as a darkened chandelier.

Who blithely could take,
and rape your former innocence?
Please,
barricade your velorious protest.
Still the brand charred and,
then left before thought was formed.
And the nerve and rod behind,
permanent,
is straight and strong.
If only the tide,
of the shaded light,
would wane.

If I could shatter will to pour the stone as flesh.
The literati cracks the bane whip,
thus allocates the vision errant poor pawn.

Shiloh L. Augustine
5-31-2007​

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[Angeline]

I'm not sure what you are asking for here. Do you want feedback on your poem? Or maybe just for people here to read it? Either way is fine, and either way welcome to the poetry forum.

 

[TheRainMan]

. . . exhibits my odd delectability in wordsmithing . . .

i'll say.

i would recognize your odd delectibility anywhere.

why the new name, Mystery Valiant?

and welcome back, you sly dawg.

 

[Sara Crewe]

i'll say.

i would recognize your odd delectibility anywhere.

why the new name, Mystery Valiant?

and welcome back, you sly dawg.

You spelled dog wrong. In this case it starts with an 'i' and ends with a 't'. I'll let you guess at the letters in between.

 

[TheRainMan]

You spelled dog wrong. In this case it starts with an 'i' and ends with a 't'. I'll let you guess at the letters in between.

i suck at Wheel of Fortune.

and hi, Canuck.

 

[Sara Crewe]

i suck at Wheel of Fortune.

and hi, Canuck.

That's 'cause you're too busy gawking at Vana.


Hi backatcha.

 

[TheRainMan]

That's 'cause you're too busy gawking at Vana.


Hi backatcha.

hey, she still looks mighty fine.

her surgeon's bills must be astronomical.

 

[Sara Crewe]

hey, she still looks mighty fine.

her surgeon's bills must be astronomical.

I rest my case.


Well, since she never needed to buy a vowel, she probably had tons of cash to buy a f-a-c-e or at least some b-o-t-o-x.

 

[Tzara]

You spelled dog wrong. In this case it starts with an 'i' and ends with a 't'. I'll let you guess at the letters in between.

That was mean, dahling. Accurate, but mean.

 

[Sara Crewe]

That was mean, dahling. Accurate, but mean.

Never said I wasn't mean... 'specially when someone throws the first stone.

 

[TheRainMan]

Never said I wasn't mean... 'specially when someone throws the first stone.

you make me so hot.

 

[Sara Crewe]

you make me so hot.

You're just trying to make me throw stuff at you instead of the helpless bystanders.

 

[TheRainMan]

You're just trying to make me throw stuff at you instead of the helpless bystanders.

task me, baby . . . task me.

 

[Sara Crewe]

task me, baby . . . task me.

You better run. I used to play shortstop, which strangely enough, was not a comment on my height.

 

[TheRainMan]

You better run. I used to play shortstop, which strangely enough, was not a comment on my height.

only on your temper.

 

[Sara Crewe]

only on your temper.

That's not true! I have a long fuse on my temper..however, I will admit that there is a big charge attached to it.


And I do have a very short leash on a very sarcastic tongue.

 

[Tzara]

You better run. I used to play shortstop, which strangely enough, was not a comment on my height.

Good range, good arm, handles the pivot well?

 

[Sara Crewe]

Good range, good arm, handles the pivot well?

You still talkin' about baseball?


You missed good glove.

 

[TheRainMan]

And I do have a very short leash on a very sarcastic tongue.

i hadn't noticed.

 

[Sara Crewe]

i hadn't noticed.

It's subtle.

 

[GuiltyPleasure]

Is this the PFDF's version of what they call "drama" in other, less sedate, fora?

 

[champagne1982]

i'll say.

i would recognize your odd delectibility anywhere.

why the new name, Mystery Valiant?

and welcome back, you sly dawg.

I think what he's done is some more projectile vomiting.. I mean projection

 

[Tzara]

You still talkin' about baseball?


You missed good glove.

I... hesitate to ask how well you turn a double play.

 

[Sara Crewe]

I... hesitate to ask how well you turn a double play.

A shortstop never tells.

 

[Tzara]

A shortstop never tells.

Short stop says plenty right there.

Tease.