hide and go seek

[christophe]

hello everyone, i just penned a fourth story, and i was looking for feedback from the gurus of literotica!

follow the link below, any comments can be posted her or emailed, whichever you prefer

thanks in advance!

 

[DopeyAngel]

I may not be a guru, but i hope you don't mind me contributing.

I though the story was very good, it was exciting and full of suspense, not too long and had an air of mystery. It was well written, and not too repetitive, you varied your vocabulary well. I also liked the description, not too much so as to make it boring, but enough to set the scene, and the idea is novel. The only criticism I would like to make is that it appeared slightly rushed toward the end but nothing too serious, hardly noticable if I weren't looking to give you feedback.

I also write for the Exibitionist section and would be pleased if you could send me some feedback if you ever get a chance.

 

[christophe]

hiya DA thank you for your kind words, it was greatly appreciated. when ever you post your stories please let me know so i can check them out
cheers

 

[lovetoread]

Check your email.....great story.