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[juicylips69]

hi my writing name is juicylips . I am a woman of mature age 49, and have many erotic stories to tell you all, I hope you will read them and let me have your views and comments. I would love to send it to someone and for them to read it and check it out if it is any good for here

 

[Handley_Page]

hi my writing name is juicylips . I am a woman of mature age 49, and have many erotic stories to tell you all, I hope you will read them and let me have your views and comments. I would love to send it to someone and for them to read it and check it out if it is any good for here

I suggest that you look in the "Editors Forum" and seek expert help.
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[SamScribble]

Welcome to the zoo, JuicyLips

 

[R. Richard]

Welcome aboard, JuicyLips

 

[49greg]

Welcome to Lit, have fun and meet people.

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[handysr]

I would love to send it to someone and for them to read it and check it out if it is any good for here

Using an editor would be a great idea! If you don't want to do that, feel free to simply submit your stories to the site. There are tons of stories here that are not that great, as well as many that are outstanding. Most likely, yours will be like most people's (mine included) and fall squarely into the middle ground. You will get more visibility and feedback that way instead of IMing to two or three folks. Once they are posted, if they don't get the response you want, it's easy to remove them as well, whether it's forever or if it's to re-write and re-post.

 

[juicylips69]

Problem

I keep submitting my story, and yet again it gets turned down, even though I had someone check it before hand. Every one that has read it ,love it and want more, what shall I do, here it is , Please let me know why.
August 1984 Things start to get interesting

I am often asked, why we have had so many erotic adventures, and I have to think back, a long way back. We never started out wanting sex with other people, we were young, in love and had great pleasure making love and try out different ways of pleasuring each other. But it did change, way back in August 1984, our first holiday with friends. So I wracked my and my husband’s brain and together we came up with this. The acts that I tell about really happened, what was said was partly remembered the rest is writers privilege, so sit back and read, hope you enjoy and most of all have some fun afterwards.

It seems so long ago I was just 19, still young and my sex experience was still low. I had met my future husband, but was still shy and very inexperienced. I was 5ft 8 tall, size10 with small breast and had just started to shave my bits, this was a request from G as he kept on pulling hair out when he was licking me. G was 21 and 6ft 2 very muscular and his cock was, well still is very impressive 6 inch soft and over 9 inches hard and nice and thick. It took me several attempts to take him but that is another story.
We had decided to go away and booked a cottage down in Cornwall, we also invited our friends Jake and Sue, Jake, worked with G. He was 6 ft tall and quite thin, Sue was 6ft 3 all natural blonde with massive breasts. We met ages ago and gone out together many times, I went out shopping with Sue. She even took me to my first Ann Summers party, where she told me which toy to buy. Sue was outgoing and from the start told me she liked girls as well as boys.
We finally arrived at the cottage, it was in a small village with narrow roads with even narrower lanes .We were met by a woman who showed us around and told us where the nearest shops were. The men went to get the food and drinks, while we chose our rooms. Later we all strolled around the grounds. There was tall trees all around, a small pond, various colourful flowers and bushes, but what I loved about it was so quiet and so secluded, not a person or a car could be seen, the nearest house was about half a mile away. All you could here was birds, it was so peaceful. That night we ate, drank and decided on the activities for the following day, then went to bed.
I was a bit tipsy and soon as we were in our bed room I had G cock out, and was soon sucking him, he was too big to go all the way down, that would take me years to achieve that. I got him semi hard when he lifted me on the bed, removed my pants and used his tongue on me. I felt the wet tip of his tongue hitting my labia I moaned in pleasure. The hairs on the back of my neck stood up and I felt a tingle in my stomach, I was soon wet. G has always has been good with his tongue. He removed his top, and his muscular body turned me on more, I felt my body shake with anticipation on what was about to happen.G slowly placed his cock head onto my wet lips, it felt so warm, which only made me wetter as he rubbed it against them. Slowly he parted them before he slid into me. I felt every inch, I felt the warmth of his cock slowly parted my lips wider with each thrust, I could not help but look into his eyes, they were full of passion and lust. He blew me a kiss which I caught and placed it on my heart. Once all the way in G started to move slowly, He leant over and sucked my now hard nipples, his warm mouth felt at home there, I felt them growing with every suck and when he kissed them , my heart beat went faster. I was soon gasping for air, my legs was wide apart and his cock was full size, I could not help myself and started shouting
“Fuck me big boy, were not at home so I can scream with joy” G responded and fucked harder. I heard Sue shout
“Go girl go”
Sweat was pouring off G his body it glistened when a ray of light hit it. He looked gorgeous and so sexy; I felt I was the luckiest girl in the world. I wanted to change position, so he slowly withdrew and I got into doggie position, I could not let him enter me until I had kissed him and gave his cock a little kiss as well. It was the first time I had tasted my passion, it was sweet and mmmmmm it was so tasty I wanted him back inside me, so I guided him in again. Soon he was holding my waist and pulling me deep onto him, I grabbed one of my breasts and pulled it hard, then screamed in pleasure. God he is so big, I felt every movement of his hot cock sliding against my lips, I had to feel it so I reached back and placed my fingers on my lips and moved it till I felt his massive member sliding in me, it felt wonderful my lips moving one way and the warm feel of my juices being swept over them as he slid out. I started to feel him growing he was close to reaching a climax, I encouraged him to continue,
“Me too darling, but keep going honey, keep going”
Suddenly my back arched, I grabbed his cock tight with my pussy, and screamed as I came. Gradually I released him and G was ready to cum,
“Cum over my tits” I asked,
He withdrew and quickly I got up from the bed and knelt down, grabbed his cock in both hands then tossed him off till he exploded over my tits, he covered them and then helped me rub it in. We kissed and hugged, I cleaned off his cum and then we just lay on the bed until we must have fallen asleep, the last thing I heard was Sue shouting
“Lucky girl that sounded amazing, sleep well and tell me all about it in the morning”.
Morning came I got up, took G a cup of tea in bed and went for a shower. Sue had already eaten and was sitting at the breakfast table waiting for me.
“Well “Sue said,
“Tell me all, it sounded amazing, so come on how good he is, and more important how big is he “
So I told her
. “Yes it was amazing so hard and so big, it had to be over 9 inches and was so thick, my pussy lips were well stretched and boy did he make me cum.”
“Me too “said Sue
“Jake was asleep so quick, once I heard you I just had to play with myself, and you two made me cum several times, just wish it was for real”
Eventually the boys turned up. That day we went out all day to the nearest beach, we split up till much later then ate out, returned back to the cottage late. It was time for bed.
The next morning the boys decided to go deep sea fishing so they left early to find a local fisherman to take them, boasting that they would bring home dinner. It was lovely and sunny so us girls were going to sunbathe. I had breakfast with Sue then we washed up. Sue went for a shower and I went to find a good sunny spot. I found the perfect place, down by the pond, it was peace full, all I could hear was the birds and the occasional sway of the trees as a breeze occasionally blew. I lay down and for only the second time in my life, took my bikini top off; I covered myself with lotion and settled down. I suddenly heard Sue shouting
“L where are you”,
“Over here” I shouted.
Sue eventually found me
“WOW this spot is perfect and so secluded, I was beginning to think you where hiding from me.” Sue said.
Sue then placed her rug down, and then removed her robe. Sue was nude and much more, for the first time I was looking at a shaved pussy, it was the sexiest thing that I had ever seen, not a hair to be seen, it was as smooth as a baby’s bottom, for the first time I was being aroused by another woman. Sue came over to me and closed my mouth.
“So you like what you see do you”, she asked, with a smile on her face.
“Yes you are so sexy; I wish my body was as sexy as yours”.
“You are darling “she replied, then lay down
Sue then covered her front with sun oil, I watched every move, and when she started on her tits it was a turn on. Sue squirted the oil onto her breasts, it started too slowly drip down them, she slowly placed her hands on them both and started to slowly massage the oil in, she started on the outside lifting them up so to cover the underside, moving slowly towards her nipples. Once Sue had reached them she used a couple of fingers and slid her nipple between them and slowly pulled them upwards, her nipples started to grow.
Sue then moved to her body, slowly to worked the oil in till her body shone in the sun, then her legs, she lifted them up in the air and rubbed the oil in, I got my first glimpse of her erotic bits, they looked so much bigger and sexier than mine, and when she swapped over to the other leg I noticed them slightly part, and they seemed to be calling me towards them. What was happening to me, this has never happened before, I had seen loads of naked woman in the gyms changing rooms, and not one of them had this effect on me.
“I LOVE COCK, I LOVE COCK “,I told myself, then looked down into the grass,
I could not help myself as I looked up at her again, she squirted some oil into her palm, and started to rub it into her pelvic area, I am sure she lifted herself up a little as she rubbed it in, moving slowly down to her inner thigh’s and moving slowly towards her lips. Slowly and gently she covered them with oil, her eyes closed as she gently massaged it in. I have to say to see a beautiful woman cover herself in sun lotion oil, is one of the sexiest and erotic things that a man or a woman could see, and it had an overwhelming effect on me. I was very aroused. I licked my lips without even knowing that I was doing it, Sue saw it
“Naughty girl” she said. Laid on her back and started to relax.
Time passed I was getting hot, I felt Sue touch me on the shoulder and looked at her,
“Can you do my back for me. Please, “Sue asked.
Sue passed me her oil, and then she rolled over. I squirted oil over my hands and started to massage it in, I slowly started at the neck and gradually moved down, going from top to bottom till I reached the small of her back, I made sure I passed down her sides and on doing this occasionally touched her breast, each time she moaned, they felt so smooth, I was sure she was teasing me. I moved in slow short movements down until I reach her butt, I poured some over it and rubbed it in, it was bigger than mine but Sue was generally much bigger than me, it was firm but still moved with ease. Every now and then she would tighten them up, making them big and firm. I was enjoying myself, what was wrong with me?Several times her back arched and twice my finger nearly slid into her butt hole, this made her look at me, very seductively, each time I blushed.
I moved to her legs slowly moving from the outer edges to the inside, and each time I reached her top inner thigh I slowed down, making sure with just the tip of my finger touched her pussy. Sue raised her back and look at me, finally she was covered. I was red with embarrassment and even more turned on. I was about to lay down when she told me it was my turn.
Sue rolled me over and told me to lift my butt up and then swiped away my bikini bottoms. She squirted some oil on my back, I screamed as it was cold. She laughed, slowly she massaged the oil in, she seemed to have her own unique way of making sure I was covered, it was so soothing and relaxing. I did not know it but I was moaning quietly all the time, Sue told me later. Sue moved to my butt and again she squirted the oil, right in my butt cheeks, she quickly placed both hands on them and in a circular motion rubbed the oil in, spreading them open as she did, and making sure everywhere was covered. Slowly she moved down and rubbed what was left stopping at my inner thighs, where she slightly parted my legs to make room for her hands. I could not help myself and arched my back in pleasure, Suddenly she touched my bits, and at that point a cold shiver went down my back, and I was turned on.
“Ohh you like that” Sue said
and did it again, this time a bit more forcefully making sure she slipped a finger in between my lips. Again I moaned but this time louder she moved on down my legs covering them with the oil as she went, I was soon glistening in the sun the same as her Sue and I laid down again to catch the rays. As I laid there , I had to turn my face away from her, I was a bit afraid and confused with both my feelings and thoughts, I have never been in this situation, yet I was loving it, what would happen next, I closed my eyes to gather my thoughts.
Time for lunch, we decided to stay nude and went back inside the cottage to make some sandwiches and juice, just laid there chatting away. Sue asked me if I fancied having my pussy shaved, I replied
” Yes, that I would someday.
We settled down again soaking up the sun.
All of a sudden I noticed a shadow ahead, I looked up and all I could see was Sue big tits, and felt my nipple being sucked. Sue stopped and looked at me
“Sorry love, I could not resist you any longer, your nipples are so big, and so suck able, plus I want to eat you”
I went bright red and Sue just went back to sucking my nipples, I noticed it felt different than with G, it was more softly and sensual, her tongue felt smooth and wet and I felt my breast heaving when she kissed around them. The hairs on my neck stood up, all I could do was moan. Sue sucked one nipple at a time making sure it very hard, before she moved to the next one
As I looked up and saw her breasts my mind went blank, what shall I do, is this right, what is happening was all going in my mind. I reached up and took one of her breasts in my hands, it was so smooth, yet firm and heavy, I gazed at it taking in all in, yes I have played with mine but never really looked at them closely, I could see all the little hairs, the blood veins. I turned my attention to her nipple it was dark red, and as I looked it was growing, I noticed her areolas was dark and had load of little bumps on them. I closed my eye and, built up the courage then I opened my mouth and stuck out my tongue and touched her nipple, she screamed with delight
“Suck them L suck them”
So I did what I was told and sucked it hard, it felt like a jelly bean in my mouth, firm but very tasty, I opened my mouth wider and slowly slid as much as I could into it, and sucked them hard, she sucked mine harder as soon as she felt me do it, we both found that funny, we both stopped and moaned in pleasure together. I then grabbed both of her breasts, and went from nipple to nipple sucking them hard, I could feel my nipples were hard and wet just like hers. Sue then slowly released my tits and could feel her tongue sliding down my body, every part of me stiffened with anticipation, I stuck out my tongue so as her body moved it rubbed against her, slowly she descended, I felt her as she reached my pelvic bone. Again I stiffened up and for some reason my legs closed. Sue turned her head and looked at me
“What’s wrong honey? Relax, close your eyes and relax. If you suddenly change your mind and want to stop just tell me , I won’t be angry, I’ll just stop,” she said.
I closed my eyes and relaxed, Sue gently opened my legs and once again I felt her kisses on my body. Slowly she moved her kisses till she was above my lips, I felt her tongue follow my contours of my lips as she moved in a circular motion licking it, stopping occasionally to kiss it. I was shaking slightly; Sue put her arms around my backside and slowly lifted me up. Suddenly my heart was beating fast just as I felt her tongue slide between my lips and felt it going in, I moaned loud.
Here I was enjoying myself with another woman, and yet again I noticed a difference between her and G.
Sue was gentle, she moved slowly and when I felt her chin hit my body it felt so smooth, and yet it felt so good, I could not hold back, I came. Sue carried on.
I opened my eyes and was looking straight at her pussy, I looked up and studied it, her pelvic bone bulging out, her lips was open slightly and I could see that she was wet. As I gazed at her wet lips, I was wondering to myself what do I do? Shall I? Before I could decide, Sue lowered herself till her smooth pussy was resting on my mouth. I wrapped my arms around her and lifted her up a bit, then I stuck my tongue out till it reached, when it touched the first thing I noticed was how smooth it was. I moved my tongue around and traced her lips, as I was moving towards the centre Sue moved and my tongue slid in her. My tongue slid in so easily as she lowered herself down to my chin, I suddenly thought OMG my tongue was in another woman. It was so strange yet it felt right , I would say if I had to compare it with anything, I think getting a good Juicy plum, bite into it and you slip your tongue in it to lap up the juices, but she was much tastier, well to me.
I could feel her licking me, sucking and sliding some fingers in, Sue told me to do the same, so I did as I was told. I was eating another woman and I can tell you I was enjoying myself. It was not long till Sue had me cumming again and she made sure she lapped it all up. Sue got up and sat back down, opened her legs and told me to lie down and to eat her, I did as she wanted and she told me what to do, with my tongue and fingers, soon she was cumming and as she did she grabbed my head and encouraged me to lick her juices up, I did they were so sweet. I have to say while lying there being told by another woman on how to pleasure her was and still is one of the most erotic things that ever happen to me. Once I had finally lapped up all her juice I looked up at Sue, my face covered with her cum she grabbed me and kissed me on the lips. We just lay there kissing and cuddling for the rest of the day.
That night we showered together and I allowed her to shave me smooth, we spent ages washing each other, I loved her big tits and she loved my pussy. Finally the boys came back bearing gifts, fish and chips; all they caught was the sun. That night they were so tired they went to bed early, we girls cuddled up watching TV and occasionally we would start playing with each other. I t was the first time I ever knew it was OK and normal to play with yourself, and over the years have enjoyed it a lot. Not sure what time I got into bed with G but he was fast asleep, never mind, I will have surprise for him in the morning.
I woke up to an empty bed, I got dressed and found all the others sitting outside eating breakfast, Sue got up and made me a cup of tea and came over and sat next to me.
“What are we doing today” was the first question of the day asked by Jake,
“Why” G asked.
“I need to go into town to get some more film for the camera” he replied,
Jake then whispered something into G ears.
“Well you go in and we will hang around here till you come back” was Sues answer.
I ask G what he whispered, apparently, Sue has promised to pose nude for him with her smooth body. Jake left and I asked Sue if he was right
” Yes of course, he’s taken loads of pictures of me, you should ask G to take some of you” Sue said then went for a shower.
It was hot so we got the blanket out and went into the garden, back to that same spot.
“Come on strip of lets sunbathe nude, come on big boy get your clothes off” I sais when we reached the spot, G was shocked and surprised, but soon agreed and started to strip. As soon as G set his eyes on my shaved pussy I could see his cock twitch,
“When did you do that”, G asked me pointing to my clean shaved pussy,
“Last night, you was to tired for me to show you, so what do you think”, I replied
“Wow it is so erotic and sexy, if I knew they looked like that I would have asked you ages ago” G said, then leaned over and kissed me.
Soon we were settling down on the rug,
“What about Sue?” G asked.
“She will be ages, anyway she won’t mind she always sunbathes nude, when she can” I replied.
I oiled him up on his back and he did me, then we laid there..
It was getting hotter and soon we needed to change positions, G rolled over onto his back, I followed him, before we got settled I asked him
“If we should put some more lotion on”,
And lent to get the lotion, all of a sudden we herd Sue coming
“Wow, what a very sex couple I have found” said Sue, “no, don’t move let me oil you up”.
Sue reached for the oil took of her gown she was naked again and was eager to cover us both with oil Sue started on me, the first place she went for was my tits, making sure my nipples was hard, then continued to my pussy making sure not to get any inside then my legs.
“Your turn now”, Sue said as she moved toward G.
“Wow you are a muscular boy”
Sue slowly covered his body with oil till all of his muscles glimmered in the sun. Slowly she moved down,
“Not on this big cock, big boy” she said,, as she stood holding it in her hands. That way it will be good and tasty later on” she said,
She turned to me and winked. Sue then continues to apply the oil, Sue finished, making sure that she ended up staring straight at his cock, I saw her stick her tongue out and wet her lips.
As I watched her explore Gs body as she covered him with oil, I was surprised at myself, I was not horrified or angry of another woman touching his body, I was excited and turned on, it was so , so , so erotic.
“Now who is going to do me” Sue asked.
G jumped up, he could not wait to get hold of her tits. I had always known that he was a tit lover the bigger the better, but he never ever said anything against mine, he loved as they were. Sue lay down on her rug, and G got down by her head. G reached over and covered her tits with oil; he was enjoying himself, rubbing his big hands around her big breast for the first time the breasts was bigger than his hand, he soon had them shinning and her nipples was big and hard, I noticed his cock was growing. Sue loved every second of it and her smile got bigger when our eyes met and I blew her a kiss.
G leaned forward and put some oil on her belly, then with both hands worked the oil in slowly stretching further over her body, I was watching my lover with another woman and I will be honest, it was exiting and so pleasurable to watch. G reached lower down and reached her pelvic bone, I watched as she arched her body in pure excitement, I have done it many times it’s such a pleasurable experience knowing something special was going to happen.
As I sat watching them as his lips kissed her body I noticed that his cock was now growing quickly, Sue saw it too and she moved her head, opened her mouth and quickly moved to secure his cock head in her mouth, I heard her moan and then I saw her tongue come out and lick his shaft. Slowly she repositioned herself and soon I watched in amazement as his member slowly slides down her throat. I have never seen another woman suck Gs cock, it was mine, yet here I was watching his cock go down, slowly it went down till she stopped and started to withdraw, not even Sue could take it all.
When it was all out, Sue looked at me and asked if I was OK with this I just nodded. She slowly slid his cock back in again, moving up and down. I could see that G now had his tongue in her and was doing what he does so well. Her body was moving and she kept on thrusting her hips out making him go deeper inside her.
I noticed Sues arm out, gesturing me closer, once I got in range, she moved her hand towards my crotch and I too moaned in pleasure as I felt some fingers slide into me. I felt them working deep inside me and then she hit a spot that just made me wild. I never felt it before, uncontrollable pleasure flowed over me. I felt my insides grow and my pussy just opened and juices just flowed out.
Sue grabbed my hand and placed it on her breasts , I got the hint and played with them, and pulled hard on her nipples, I knew she loved that, every time I did it she slid a bit more of G cock down her.
I called out “how do I get some of this action”
Every one stopped, Sue got up, thought for a moment and told me to lie down an put her gown under my head. I got into position she got down on all fours and started to lick me, then stopped and said to G
“Go on move over to her, stand there and let her suck your cock, and don’t forget to play with her tits”
G moved and I soon had as much of him in my mouth as I could, he pulled on my nipples and caressed my breasts till they were as big as they were going to get, Sue was busily working on my pussy. I was able from time to time see her head move and noticed G was watching her.
“What’s it like I” asked him. He quickly replied
“ it’s amazing watching you two, , your mouth devouring my cock, sliding it in and out, gripping the shaft hard , the other hand juggling my balls, and watching Sue, her head moving from side to side, and on occasion see her tongue tip on your wet lips. Its fucking amazing and I want to fuck you both,”
“I like the sound of that” Said Sue, “if L does not mind you can come back here; I have a juicy place that would love to be filled by your cock”
“Go on, fuck her, and fuck her as you fuck me.” I told him.
I watched G move behind her, bent down and kissed her butt. Sue grabbed his cock and rubbed her pussy juice into it and slid the head in. I watched G grab her butt and spread them open then slowly move her back and forth, Sues back arched and she screamed
“More, fuck me with your big cock”.
G slid it in getting deeper and deeper till he was all the way in, Sue reached behind and help G to spread her butt checks,
“Fuck me you are so big” is all she kept saying,
In-between time of her shouting in her throws of lust and passion, she kept on returning to eat me and fingering me. Sue screamed out loud whenever she came, which was becoming more frequent. I moved and got up, I slowly walked around them, I stopped behind G and watched in delight as I saw his cock slowly slid in and out of her pussy, I watched for the first time the way the lips moved, and the way juices flowed in and out with the movement. I moved to the side and watched Sue reach back and rub herself and grab G balls, G reached forward and grabbed her tits, he held them tight and his tempo increased, I was in a kind of a trance, watching them, it was like , like , well it was amazing.
This was to me, when everything changed. I had realised that what G and I did together was making love, and in time what I did with Sue when we were alone was the same. But this was just pure SEX, and I realised I loved this, I wanted this, this was fun, I could be who ever I wanted to be.
“I want to be fucked” I shouted out,
Sue said “what have you in mind”
I thought for a second and told Sue to lie down flat and I got into the 69 position over her, as soon as I was there she parted my wet lips with her tongue and began to lick me. I called G over, he stood in front of me, I got a quick suck of his cock, have to say with Sues juices on it, tastes good. I let him slip out of my mouth and gestured him to bend down, I kissed him, and then whispered to him,
“Come on my lover slide that big cock in me and fuck me till you fill my pussy with your yummy cum”
G walked slowly, watching us lick each other’s pussy, knelt down behind us. Sue stopped licking me and, and was later told that she grabbed Gs cock, kissed it then guided it to my pussy, I felt the head slowly part them and slowly slide in, G helped by spreading my legs and parting my butt cheeks, I felt him deep inside me, Ohhh it felt so good, that big thick cock deep inside, I felt every twitch. Slowly he started, and Sue returned to licking me, it felt so good, a big cock sliding inside me and the feel of a tongue lapping at my bits; it was not long before I was cumming.
I was fingering Sue hard and licking her fast, and soon Sue was ready to cum I lapped it all up, she tasted so good. From time to time I felt G cock come out, then back in again, I asked
“What happening back there” G replied
“Wish you could see this, Sue keeps grabbing my cock, pulling out then sliding it down her throat, with your juices covered in it, its fucking sexy”.
I felt G cock growing inside me, I knew from experience he was getting close. G started to shout out
“I’m cumming”
“Keep fucking her” Sue shouted
“Tell us when you are cumin”,
He carried on for a short while but could not last long
. “I’m cumming” he shouted again,
I felt him tension up and his cock swelled up, suddenly I had that lovely sensation of his cum filling my pussy up, I think I came as well, I could hear the sound of Sue lapping it up. G slowly stopped, I moved and his cock fell out, I turned round just in time to see Sue grab it and open her mouth and slowly suck it, I came over bent down and joined her, G moaned in pleasure as we both took it in turns to suck his cock and lick his balls, a bit more cum came out we sucked it all up.
Sue then turned her attention to me, she left me with Gs cock and crawled behind me, laid down , I guess she opened her mouth as I felt my pussy going in there and suddenly there was a hard suck, I felt Gs cum pour out of me straight into her mouth, then she licked every drop from me. Sue then stood up, pulled me over, I looked at her, and she was smiling. I could see traces of cum slowly starting to slip out, god it was such a sexy site. Sue bent over opened her mouth, some cum dripped down onto her breasts. Sue leant over and we met. I had my first passionate kiss with another woman, and the feeling of G cum flowing from her mouth to mine, I will be honest I came again, it was that erotic.
We finally parted, and Sue and I looked at the cum on her tits,
“G” Sue called,
“Come here I have something for you”
G got up, he was drenched in sweat. It was running down his chest, over his six pack and down onto his now limping cock.
“Yes I’m coming” he said
When he reached us I pointed to the cum, Sue told him,
“Go on lover treat yourself, after what you did you deserve it”
G knelt down grabbed the left one first, slowly kissed it, and when he reached the part where the cum was ho opened his mouth and took a mouth full, we could see him sucking hard, then repeated on the other one, I was clean, Sue was now clean and so was G. We all three just hugged each other, started to laugh and saying
“That that was amazing”
Sue quickly said
“Fuck yes; we have to do that again”
We all held hands and walked slowly back into the cottage and showered, by the time we finished could not have been better, as soon as we got settled in the garden with a cup of tea Jake returned.
“What have you three been doing?” he asked
“Nothing much” I replied. “Just chatting, having a laugh, so what are we going to do for the rest of the day”.
For the rest of the holiday we were out and about but every time we could Sue and I got together and on the last night we all got drunk, Jake passed out so we went to our room and fucked the night away. Soon the holiday was over and it was back to work, both I and G remember that holiday for what we did. Since then I have always, well most of the time have had a bald pussy, and on occasions I would let G shave me, it turns him on like mad, and I make sure his cock and balls are free from hair. What happened with Sue and Jake I hear you ask? Well Sue came round regularly, and we had fun together, she taught me many more things, and we had many more threesomes,
I hope you like what you have read and do hope it’s not too long, let me know of any comments and be kind to me, so I can write many more for you.
(L ) Juicylips XXXXXXX

 

[Sammael Bard]

It needs spacing, IMO, if you've copy-pasted the story as it is. Laurel does give a reason for turning down any story. You should check that out in the "rejected" link.

Welcome to the Board, juicylips.

 

[BuckyDuckman]

Welcome to the boards, Juicylips. I don't believe it's appropriate to post an entire story to a thread inside this forum. I don't offer my services as a volunteer editor (which is probably a good thing!). Nor did I read your entire story. However, skimming through it, there appears to be quite a few basic punctuation errors. Additionally, using just letters for characters instead of actual names - that can come across as multiple spelling errors. I'm not sure what program you use for writing, but I would recommend that write inside Microsoft Word or Google Documents or any number of other pieces of software. Most of those programs have ways of showing grammar and spelling errors.

Here's an example of a poor punctuated line from somewhere in the middle. You wrote:
“Wow, what a very sex couple I have found” said Sue, “no, don’t move let me oil you up”.

Here's a better way to punctuate that line:
"Wow, what a very sexy couple I have found," said Sue. "No, don't move. Let me oil you up."

I hope that helps.

A link to the Lit volunteer editor program

 

[_Lynn_]

I keep submitting my story, and yet again it gets turned down, even though I had someone check it before hand. Every one that has read it ,love it and want more, what shall I do, here it is , Please let me know why.
August 1984 Things start to get interesting




(L ) Juicylips XXXXXXX

You need to edit your post. Three paragraphs of a story is the maximum amount allowed on a forum.

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Welcome, Juicylips.

You've been given good advice, but no one seems to have told you about the three nude self-portraits required for joining the AH. One profile, one full frontal, and one appropriately recumbent should be posted within the next 36 hours.

 

[JWren]

Welcome, Juicylips.

You've been given good advice, but no one seems to have told you about the three nude self-portraits required for joining the AH. One profile, one full frontal, and one appropriately recumbent should be posted within the next 36 hours.

Ah, Tio, too late - Juicylips has done those already (follow her other posts!)

 

[Tio_Narratore]

Ah, Tio, too late - Juicylips has done those already (follow her other posts!)

Will do, JW!

I have. An appropriate recumbent, but the frontal isn't full, and there's no profile.